Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

Hi Sandra, your story continues and the writing I find consistent and still holding the same interest. I like how you ended the last part, an almost violent hook to compel the reader to read the next part. LOL

I like this tale of time travel and going back to past family members. You are to be admired for your staying power and talent. I never seem to see any errors large or small in your writing.

How is the published novel going?

Mel. xxx

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018

Hi Mel, thank you so much for this lovely review. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying this story. The first book is doing really well. I've been asked to be interviewed on our local radio now, so that will be exciting. I've already had a whole page in a magazine written about my book. So, yes, it's going really well. Thank you for your interest, my friend. Big hugs. :) Sandra xxx

reply by write hand blue on 21-Feb-2018

Oh Sandra, I'm so pleased for you. And to learn that yor first book is doing well. Good luck with the interview... Mel xx

reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018

Thank you! You are so nice. xxx

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

This is a terrific chapter from your book, Sandra :) I enjoyed the characters and felt like I was in the story with you watching everything you describe. Now that I have my own copy of your book I'll have to start reading from the beginning. Your book will be next after I finish the novel I'm reading presently.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018

What a wonderful review, thank you so very much, Joy!! I hope you enjoy the first book, it's had some great reviews on Amazon. I was really worried when it was released, because the reviews FS readers gave it were so brilliant as I wrote each part, but it's a different feeling when it's out THERE. So far, so good.

I'm delighted you enjoyed this part, I have to show Veronica has a 'normal' life as well! lol. Big hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx

Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-I thought James already knew that
Ver. time traveled, or is it just that
he doesn't know when.
-It is odd to see him distraught, but
it is understandable.
-I like his observation about it,
"...so it's as if it's all in my head.'
-It's nice to see them spending family
time with the kids.
-It's also nice to see Mildred with the
family and sharing some good ideas
with Ver.
-Then, James concludes the chapter with
what appears to be exciting news about
Jacob, but then he puts the twist on
the good part of the news.
-Where will Ver. find Jacob, and
why won't she like it are questions
we are left with at the end of the chapter.
-Good job, Sandra.


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 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

Thank you so much, Pam, for another of your wonderful reviews and all those stars. I think James was having a bit of a wobbler because it's hard to think his wife has been and come back without him even realising it. I'm going to have to have a good think about this, too. Thanks again, my dear friend. I'm so pleased you are feeling better. Big hugs, :) Sandra xx

reply by Pam (respa) on 20-Feb-2018

You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. I didn't know someone could have a wobbler! I imagine it is quite confusing with Ver.'s comings and goings. I have been wondering what she does when her physical self is home, but she is transported through time. Time travel can be confusing, as no one has really done it.

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Excellent reminder that "this time" still exists.
So, James isn't so perfect after all. Typical male behavior.
Of course, having someone "disappear"
without going anywhere is a bit disconcerting.
This book has changed much of what was true in the first book.
I blame it on those Powers that Be" (including Sandra, who is the "be" all)
I'm not sure what the others be, other than a nuisance.
The family interlude is very good, but
now another cliffhanger ending. Where is Jacob?
RS

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

Thank you so much, Robert, for all those lovely stars! You review has given me something to think on, as it has paralleled thoughts I've been having. Thank you again, my friend. Big hugs, Sandra xxx

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Exceptional

Oh! Where could that be? Not in an asylem or some other un-accessible place I hope. It is hard enough for her to get anything done the way it is. No, The powers that be are in charge. That is why James found this bit of information.
It is another stepping stone to a solution. Right? Good job. xxxx Nancy

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

Thank you so much, Nancy, for your wonderful review and for the lovely 6 stars. I'm so pleased you are enjoying this book. Big hugs, my friend. xx Sandra xx

Comment from frogbook

Good

A chapter in the present explaining how the family is feeling balances out the adventures while "traveling." It's amazing how you keep everything in order, and fling us back and forth with you. Haha.

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 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

Thank you so much, JoAnn for another lovely review. I do try to keep an even keel!! lol. :) Sandra xx

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Oh my goodness, Sandra. This chapter ties a lot of things together. First and foremost is the commitment and love Veronica and James have for each other. He is allowed a bad moment. Secondly is the love for the children both present and past and of course Joe's well being. Third is the bond between Mildred and Veronica. And then James comes up with a new clue. An exciting chapter indeed. Very well done and so enjoyable, thanks.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

I thought he was entitled to a bad moment, too. I don't think many men would be as nice as James under the circumstances. Thank you, Alie, for the lovely review, you really made my day. Big hugs. my friend. :) Sandra xx

reply by aryr on 20-Feb-2018

You are so welcome Sandra. I think that with James being in the medical field, he tends to have a more open mind. The other thing is that he really doesn't have a choice, this is Veronica's life. But I agree he is being nice. Big hugs in return.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Another very nice chapter here. Good pacing in the grand scheme of things and a nice interlude of normality. Excellent stopping off point.

He'd be getting' a lot of love with us. - gettin'.

Michael ready to go to his play-group - playgroup can be a single word here.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

And one still slipped through the net! I thought I'd got all the 'g' endings for Mildred! Thank you so much, Gareth, I've corrected that and made playgroup one word. I'm glad you liked this part, after all the excitement I thought there should be something that is somewhat normal. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

As he looked from me to Mildred, James' bemused expression was understandable. My leaping back and forth in time was new to him, whereas Mildred had been a witness to this phenomenon since she was fourteen years old.

who was 14?

I looked up into his anxious eyes and snuggled closer. 'As far as I know, nothing can hurt me in the form I take. I believe the 'powers that be' are watching over me all the time. They know what's happening, and act accordingly.'

We lapsed into another silence, each with our own thoughts. Perhaps it would be better not to tell him when I travel, then he'd be none the wiser and perhaps....

paragraph

'I know what you're thinking, and you can get that right out of your head! If you think not telling me would be better, then you couldn't be more wrong.'
He held me at arm's length, his eyes searching mine for confirmation that he'd read my mind correctly.
'I'm your husband, and I want to be involved in your life, in every respect. How can I protect you when I don't even know when you've gone?'

'Yes!' Michael screamed out (comma) loud enough

with coats, hats, scarves and gloves, welly-boots for the children, and sturdy walking shoes for Mildred, James and me. (superfluous)

very hard typing left handed only. please don't be offended but something is slipping last chapter and this. not the story line, that's still wonderful. grammar and structure however is jumping out at me. never did before. just my opinion

fell while walking my nine month rambunctious black lab pup



It has t' be fer a reason, you've jus' gotta find out what it is.'
two sentences

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

Thank you so much, my friend. It must be painful as well as annoying to have your wrist broken. I hope it soon mends.

Who was 14? Mildred. She was the first one to meet Veronica in her time travelling. That all happened in the first book of this trilogy. James only found out about it in this book. so he has a lot to work through in his mind. I agree with you on the matter of hats coats etc. I'll remove that, and sort the commas out as well. thank you so much for this review, it must have hurt a lot to do it, and I really appreciate it. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from rwilliam

Exceptional

I really liked the picture for this chapter. :)

'Ow, you little terror! Just you wait till I catch you,' he cried after it made contact with his left ear.--Maybe this is nit pick so ignore if you think so. But would it sound better to say..".made contact with the left side of his face"...? Just saying 'ear' doesn't sound like much of a 'hit' but just a thought. :-)

OOHHHH...the ending. Well done. You're making me wait. UGH! :-D LOL
Looking forward to reading on.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

Hi, Rebecca. Thank you so very much for the lovely six stars! I've changed that line now, he just gets hit on the head! lol.

?You have as much chance of getting them back to sleep, as you?d have pushing toothpaste back into its tube.? James laughed as he tried to grab the pillow that was about to hit his head. ?Ow, you little terror! Just you wait till I catch you.?

I think leaving it there is probably the best way. Thank you again, my friend. Your input is always very welcome. :) Sandra xxx