Metaphorical Sun
A poem9 total reviews
Comment from nancy_e_davis
So true. When will we ever learn. Why can't men get along with each other? We are on all going to pay for the greed of a few. No one wins a war. Well written poem with perfect rhyme and meter. Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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So true. When will we ever learn. Why can't men get along with each other? We are on all going to pay for the greed of a few. No one wins a war. Well written poem with perfect rhyme and meter. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Thank you very much Nancy. tom
Comment from Pantygynt
I really do find this highly interesting. The sun is of course an object, scientifically verifiable. God or, if you prefer, a god is not so verifiable. Now i hold that man created god (if you want to add in his image, feel free) so if man ceases to exist the god he created, with or without a capital letter, would cease to exist, like the sun in your poem. But this won't/can't happen to the sun because its existance is not subject to belief. so the sun is quite capable of outlasting man. Its very permanence renders it an excellent candidate for deification, but only man can create a god so...
Is this what they call a circular argument?
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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I really do find this highly interesting. The sun is of course an object, scientifically verifiable. God or, if you prefer, a god is not so verifiable. Now i hold that man created god (if you want to add in his image, feel free) so if man ceases to exist the god he created, with or without a capital letter, would cease to exist, like the sun in your poem. But this won't/can't happen to the sun because its existance is not subject to belief. so the sun is quite capable of outlasting man. Its very permanence renders it an excellent candidate for deification, but only man can create a god so...
Is this what they call a circular argument?
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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You and I seem to think alike. The sun was a central part of 'god-focus' in most primitive cultures around the world so I just figured the sun needed a poem. lol Thanks friend. tom
Comment from Sherman541
Very interesting and intriguing story about our sun. It would be a terrible thing to lose for the planet earth and mankind. We should take care of our earth and sun they are the only ones we have. I really like the background color and the font color choices too. Sherman541
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Very interesting and intriguing story about our sun. It would be a terrible thing to lose for the planet earth and mankind. We should take care of our earth and sun they are the only ones we have. I really like the background color and the font color choices too. Sherman541
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Thank you Sherman. tom
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You are most welcome, Tom :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks dimensional viewpoints about our metaphorical sun in existence a part of infinite creation; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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This speaks dimensional viewpoints about our metaphorical sun in existence a part of infinite creation; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Thank you friend. tom
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
A sad reflection of things on Earth. Thanks for putting it to words in a well-composed poem. I enjoyed reading it and it flowed well from verse to verse.
"The soul of man is now without
the love that made him part of me,
he drowns in war's iniquity."
NICE!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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A sad reflection of things on Earth. Thanks for putting it to words in a well-composed poem. I enjoyed reading it and it flowed well from verse to verse.
"The soul of man is now without
the love that made him part of me,
he drowns in war's iniquity."
NICE!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much my friend. tom
Comment from Wetbelly01
What a powerful and scary, haunting piece!...
Says a whole LOT!... Didn't come across any problems...
Got a nice smooth rhythm and rhyme to it...
My compliments!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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What a powerful and scary, haunting piece!...
Says a whole LOT!... Didn't come across any problems...
Got a nice smooth rhythm and rhyme to it...
My compliments!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Thank you once again Wetbelly. Most honored by this great review and again I thank you. tom
Comment from Ricky1024
This Kiss the Sun a different perspective and worthy one little dooey realize it wasn't for the miracle of the fact that many many billions of years ago if the Earth was shattered buy an asteroid and a chunk of what it's called the moon today started to revolve it also pushed us into an atmosphere close enough to the Sun for humankind to survive Heavenly Father noted this and took advantage of it and that's where we are today the sun provides many things besides just warmth and light it provides us with seasonal changes there would be no winter or fall or spring will be a constant unbearable heat a torrid desert like state of being if it wasn't for seasonal changes of the sun the sun also helps control the liquid on Earth too much liquid and we flood in Parrish and drown the son of evaporates the excess and transports it from the sea into drinkable rainwater so many things can the sun do provide solar energy a new and important form of virtually free electricity the son also helps when it comes to creating crops upon the Earth without the Sun's light and heat a seed would not nourish let alone grow into a fine plant or a tree which will then also provides shelter and protection.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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This Kiss the Sun a different perspective and worthy one little dooey realize it wasn't for the miracle of the fact that many many billions of years ago if the Earth was shattered buy an asteroid and a chunk of what it's called the moon today started to revolve it also pushed us into an atmosphere close enough to the Sun for humankind to survive Heavenly Father noted this and took advantage of it and that's where we are today the sun provides many things besides just warmth and light it provides us with seasonal changes there would be no winter or fall or spring will be a constant unbearable heat a torrid desert like state of being if it wasn't for seasonal changes of the sun the sun also helps control the liquid on Earth too much liquid and we flood in Parrish and drown the son of evaporates the excess and transports it from the sea into drinkable rainwater so many things can the sun do provide solar energy a new and important form of virtually free electricity the son also helps when it comes to creating crops upon the Earth without the Sun's light and heat a seed would not nourish let alone grow into a fine plant or a tree which will then also provides shelter and protection.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Great review Ricky. Fantastic. Take care Ricky and thank you so much. tom
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a profound write about what the sun has seen and man's treachery and deceit and our warring ways, a damning poem with no let up throughout, we are guilty as charged, I hope the sun doesn't bleed though, a fine write from your talented pen, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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This is a profound write about what the sun has seen and man's treachery and deceit and our warring ways, a damning poem with no let up throughout, we are guilty as charged, I hope the sun doesn't bleed though, a fine write from your talented pen, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much Dolly. tom
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I really enjoyed this. The flow, content, and rhyme scheme were skillfully done. It seems that everything man puts his hand to, he destroys. There is so many elements of this to like. Thanks for sharing this. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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I really enjoyed this. The flow, content, and rhyme scheme were skillfully done. It seems that everything man puts his hand to, he destroys. There is so many elements of this to like. Thanks for sharing this. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018
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Thank you Jeffrey. Most honored. tom
