Each Layered Cut
A poem49 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Very thoughtful from start to finish. A lot for the reader to ponder as the writer ponders his life with its increasing layers of complexity from childhood through the present and forward. It requires a few readings to gain the most from it.
Wendy
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Very thoughtful from start to finish. A lot for the reader to ponder as the writer ponders his life with its increasing layers of complexity from childhood through the present and forward. It requires a few readings to gain the most from it.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2023
Comment from forestport12
Yes so many seeming contrast and contradictions. I love how you built the child's play and early years with that veneer and velvet clouds etc. Last stanza was so powerful in description, how the illusion of yoke, an impression of protection until it is poked, etc... Veils of VAST transparency
fits so perfects with first few lines. Your poems are meant to be read over and over. What draws me in is the fact that you understand the frailty of our human condition and need for something greater than ourselves.
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Yes so many seeming contrast and contradictions. I love how you built the child's play and early years with that veneer and velvet clouds etc. Last stanza was so powerful in description, how the illusion of yoke, an impression of protection until it is poked, etc... Veils of VAST transparency
fits so perfects with first few lines. Your poems are meant to be read over and over. What draws me in is the fact that you understand the frailty of our human condition and need for something greater than ourselves.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your poem, ee. I enjoyed reading
it. Your word choices added to that enjoyment--so many
which make readers stop and think. Your rhyming and meter
were superb. I noticed those when I read it aloud. Your words
created great imagery from the time one was a youth til the same
one as an adult looking back at their life. What began as an easy
carefree time quickly became a complicated time of trying to
figure out what was true and real from that which was fake.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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You did a great job with your poem, ee. I enjoyed reading
it. Your word choices added to that enjoyment--so many
which make readers stop and think. Your rhyming and meter
were superb. I noticed those when I read it aloud. Your words
created great imagery from the time one was a youth til the same
one as an adult looking back at their life. What began as an easy
carefree time quickly became a complicated time of trying to
figure out what was true and real from that which was fake.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from JT traveller
Another wonderful poem. Once again, the meter is spot on.
You seem to be extremely productive in your writing these days.
Was there a specific message for a particular person in this poem or just generally directed? I wonder. Clearly you do not have to reply, it is just my own ponderings.
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Another wonderful poem. Once again, the meter is spot on.
You seem to be extremely productive in your writing these days.
Was there a specific message for a particular person in this poem or just generally directed? I wonder. Clearly you do not have to reply, it is just my own ponderings.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from LisaMay
Another fine example of metered poetry to relish, and well worth reposting to show readers how it is done.
I could end up feeling depressed by your poem; it is definitely thought-provoking and meaningful.
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Another fine example of metered poetry to relish, and well worth reposting to show readers how it is done.
I could end up feeling depressed by your poem; it is definitely thought-provoking and meaningful.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
Another terrific work. I was wondering how you've been able to kick them out so fast. Only now noticed that some are reposts. An excellent warning for all in this poem but some of the word choices make me think the subject of the poem's ire was more targeted than that. Well done.
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Another terrific work. I was wondering how you've been able to kick them out so fast. Only now noticed that some are reposts. An excellent warning for all in this poem but some of the word choices make me think the subject of the poem's ire was more targeted than that. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We don't always like to hear the truth, but ignorance is not bliss unless you live on a self sufficient farm in the middle of nowhere. I like to be informed so that I don't get my fingers burnt! Ha ha ha. The trouble is with this world, there is no transparency, life is complicated. I enjoyed the ride here in your wonderful unique word choice Tom, love Dolly x
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We don't always like to hear the truth, but ignorance is not bliss unless you live on a self sufficient farm in the middle of nowhere. I like to be informed so that I don't get my fingers burnt! Ha ha ha. The trouble is with this world, there is no transparency, life is complicated. I enjoyed the ride here in your wonderful unique word choice Tom, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is a very lovely poem it really is a lovely poem. The rhyming for the most part is very good. The flow for the most part is also good. I finally no issues with your sentence structure. You're spelling. Your punctuation are your subject matter all good to me. If I might make a one small suggestion and as I mentioned its are only a suggestion and then for your use or not your poem us nice it is! A picture would be good it will draw the eye to your poem. I find it to be really good and there's definite talent there and I wish you all the best great day!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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This is a very lovely poem it really is a lovely poem. The rhyming for the most part is very good. The flow for the most part is also good. I finally no issues with your sentence structure. You're spelling. Your punctuation are your subject matter all good to me. If I might make a one small suggestion and as I mentioned its are only a suggestion and then for your use or not your poem us nice it is! A picture would be good it will draw the eye to your poem. I find it to be really good and there's definite talent there and I wish you all the best great day!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2023
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I don't really know if you understand classic metered poetry. This is metered poetry so that is all I can say. Study what meter means and you will understand why it is written as it is written. ee
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Okay then thank you so much I will do
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Okay then thank you so much I will do
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Okay then thank you so much I will do
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My apologies...I have updated your review
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Every time I see you have a repost. I am curious to see if I read it. Again, I have not. I do see this poem was a Poem of the Month recipient. Congratulations with that. After reading I can see why, the rhyming scheme and the flow are perfect.
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Every time I see you have a repost. I am curious to see if I read it. Again, I have not. I do see this poem was a Poem of the Month recipient. Congratulations with that. After reading I can see why, the rhyming scheme and the flow are perfect.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2023
Comment from estory
The language is beautiful, the images convoluted and the contrasts bold and diametric in this piece. It really speaks of life, our intimations of its meaning, derived from our experiences, and our emotions. Life is like this. It is happy and sad, angry and calm, hopeful and despairing, often within what seems like minutes of each other. There is kind of fatalism about it. I believe in the resurrection of Christ, so the grave has no hold on me. Neither does this world. The spirit soars above it, escapes it. estory
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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The language is beautiful, the images convoluted and the contrasts bold and diametric in this piece. It really speaks of life, our intimations of its meaning, derived from our experiences, and our emotions. Life is like this. It is happy and sad, angry and calm, hopeful and despairing, often within what seems like minutes of each other. There is kind of fatalism about it. I believe in the resurrection of Christ, so the grave has no hold on me. Neither does this world. The spirit soars above it, escapes it. estory
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Thank you once again friend.. tom
