Comment from Sis Cat

Exceptional

No, Shana, put down the "King Lear"!

I'm glad I read it and seen the play, though.

I like the meatiness of this chapter. I do not mind the length because it allowed me to get immersed in your story. You continue to intertwine themes of romance, culture, religion, genocide, and gangsters. I do not know what is going to pop up or in what proportion or combination, but I am kept entertained and engaged as the story moves along.

High stakes and danger always draws in the reader. I would feel nervous around all of this security:

"I'm at your door. Another man's at the elevator. He rides it up and down when people use it. Two men are outside securing the perimeter."

But, apparently, it may not have been enough:

Shana screamed as Anderson scanned the room. "Jeff, the lights just went out. What's going on?"

Your prose is clean and well-paced and you end this action-packed chapter with a cliffhanger which makes me want to know what happens next.

Thank you for sharing. I look forward to your next chapter.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018

I appreciate the encouragement. Thank you.

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

Hi, Barbara! This is a beautifully written chapter in which I could spot no fault. Shana is making progress. It's strange that nothing showed up on Jeff's cameras though. Something's going on.
Nicole

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018

It sure is. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Exceptional

Hi, Barbara

I'm liking Anderson more with each chapter. I think you've presented us with a character that defies many stereotypes about the wealthy set.

Great bit of foreshadowing here:

'...Would or could a father really disown his daughter, his own flesh and blood...?'

So, I wonder what's going on at the end of this chapter?

:) Bev

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018

I am wondering too. I know how I want it to end, but my characters often disagree with me. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

reply by Writingfundimension on 25-Feb-2018

They (characters) can be very annoying that way. :)

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Uh oh. The lights going out never leads to anything good happening. You set the image well and showed us how Anderson was able to get information to Shana without making her feel self-conscious.

Can't wait to see why the lights are out,

~patty~

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018

We will find out Sunday. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Good chapter. The cliffhanger is awesome --let's see what happens. I am off to the next if there is one.
May you have a great week and weekend.
Thank you for everything.

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from mbroyles2

Exceptional

This book delivers on everything we've come to expect from one of your novels. Romance tied into a suspenseful thriller.
I can see Drew and Shana drawing closer in each chapter.
A joy to read.
Michael

 Comment Written 21-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018

I am hoping other's see it too. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Good chapter showing further the type of family Shana comes from and the due care Anderson has for her and her wellbeing.

"Fasten your seat belts." - seatbelts can be a single word here.

"Marc, can you come here for a minute." - possibly a question mark in here.

Shana screamed as Anderson scanned the room. "Jeff, the lights just went out. What's going on?" - not sure here. It may be better to mention the lights extinguishing in the narrative before the explanation in the dialogue.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018

I had seat belt as one word, but when I copied and pasted to post, FS said it was wrong so I check my dictionary and it said it's two words. I honestly have no idea. I changed to a question mark and am rechecking the last suggestion. I see what you mean. I will see what I can do about it.

Comment from trumby

Excellent

A lady's ultimate fantasy. To find a single billionaire who'll cook dinner and fall in love with them.
More people should write about real life, don't you think? With its imperfections, BO and bad manners.
Sorry. Its a bit of a personal bug-bear. Very well written.

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

You need to read me more because there is real issues going on. You just caught one post and a small one at that. My people are real. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Ooararais_Writer

Excellent

I found nothing really wrong. I loved the dialogue and just how natural it sounded. Sometimes I've read dialogue that didn't "flow" but yours is so smooth. Love the characters too. Really wish I hadn't jumped in so late into the story. Will be going back to read previous chapters. :)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2018

Thank you for the encouraging review.

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

This is certainly keeping me interested. I'm certainly curious to know what's going on at the end of this. Looks like more trouble ahead. It seems like the bad guys aren't going to let up in their quest. One way in which Anderson is not making it easy for Shana is that he has to be in control. Being a businessman, he's used to giving orders. Shana doesn't need to feel like she's fragile and has to have everything done for her. His plan to meet Shana's parents and provide the dinner doesn't go over well. He takes too much upon himself. Certainly worth six stars. Saw the notice about your book being available. Congratulations! I do think the title they used is misleading. judi

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018

Thank you for the kind review and the well wishes on my book. Drew will soon see a side of Shana h e's not used too. LOL