Comment from friartuck

Good

How does one distill a lifetime into 150 words? Even a year would be difficult, and we have the same number of those, so I can just imagine what a job it would be to break them down into two words per year! But you've captured the essence of it -- enough to show some of the similarities and differences we've experienced. Thanks for sharing that!

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thanks for your read and kind words.

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

Hi mystery man
I enjoyed reading your life story in 150 words. That is quite a feat to accomplish.
I was puzzled that you said "I lived with my wife of 32 years" because that infers that you don't any more and I assume that you still do so wouldn't it be better to say"live".
I wish you good luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thanks for the catch. Yes, she is still with me. Appreciate the read and review. I will edit.

Comment from apky

Excellent

I think that with this summary you did a pretty great job of telling us the story of your life in 150 words.

But I feel you probably could say less of what you said at the beginning - rooms, brother, sister - and saved the words to say more about wife, children, grandchildren.

Just my take on it though. The writing is excellent and free of spags.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thanks for the read and the suggestions. I will consider.

Comment from frierajac

Excellent

This post follows the formatting in the prompt. The only location is Ashland Ave. that I can relate to. It sounds like you have led a productive life, I think you may take the lead for being precise and to the point.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thank you for the read. Sacramento is between Kedzie and California Avenues on the Southwest side.

reply by frierajac on 18-Feb-2018

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