Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh dear, and you both had to wake up early the next day! Well, that's good news for Andrea but it still doesn't feel like a safe situation if that uncle will keep coming back.
Enjoyed your visit with Roni and how thoughtful of you to give Darlene a much needed break!

One question:
We made it back to the living [room] just (Do you drop "room" in Canadian English?)

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021

Thank you so much for reviewing Helene, I already fixed that, lol, no we don't drop the word. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Hugs n smiles!

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

We take a day off from the classroom to deal with family problems. It is often a good thing to step aside from the main plot development aas it allows us to view the protagonists in a new and different light.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thank you for you kind comments and for reviewing, it is appreciated.

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I believe that this is the second chapter that I have read about Mrs. Armstrong. I really like the characters and am enjoying the story. You use a great deal of dialogue which I believe makes all the difference. It makes the story move along, even if there is not much action at the time. Good job.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for reviewing, I am glad that you enjoyed it and I really appreciate your kind comments.

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

what she was supposed to and not to run her ragged. (comma after to)

I don't think I have ever seen anyone leave a room as fast as she did. ( I don't think I have ever seen anyone leave a room so fast. )

, causing her to have a rather full bladder. (reword this--sounds awkward and don't use the word bladder)

she went to bed, so she would get a good night's sleep. (omit comma)

We hardily (heartily?)

bathroom, looking so relaxed. (bathroom looking relaxed. )

grandma Roni (Grandma Roni)

cook book (cookbook)

I will miss you and if you want to come over to make cookies you can." (I will miss you, and if you want to come over to make cookies, you can.")

We retired, I suspect we were both asleep (We retired. I suspect we were both asleep )

A good story. Needs a bit of editing and polishing still though, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thank you for reviewing and doing such a great job, I appreciate you catching those errors and will fix them shortly, again thanks so much.

Comment from beizanten

Excellent

A pretty interesting beginning paragraph, you intrigue me to read more. A pretty interesting plotline so far. The character are interesting and their emotion flow well

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for reviewing, I really appreciate your kind comments and observations.