Looking in all the wrong places.
Where does the muse really reside?9 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Sometimes our muse play hide and seek with us and it seems we are looking in all the wrong places. When we least expect him to appear we find him in our mind rekaxing for a while.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
A very well-written poem. Sometimes our muse play hide and seek with us and it seems we are looking in all the wrong places. When we least expect him to appear we find him in our mind rekaxing for a while.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from RodG
This short 4-quatrain poem very aptly describes the writing process for many poets who temporarily lose, then regain their muse. I especially like how you describe the poet's despair in stanza three.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
This short 4-quatrain poem very aptly describes the writing process for many poets who temporarily lose, then regain their muse. I especially like how you describe the poet's despair in stanza three.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Share a Story in a Poem' writing prompt.
Your verse tells a good and clear story about a writter and muse.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
I think this is a good entry for the 'Share a Story in a Poem' writing prompt.
Your verse tells a good and clear story about a writter and muse.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like the sound of this. I like the way it flows and the rhyming aspect. The accompanying artwork is a nice touch. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
I like the sound of this. I like the way it flows and the rhyming aspect. The accompanying artwork is a nice touch. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your story about unifying with one's muse. Your rhythmic, rhymed quatrains are very effective, along with your use of alliteration and your "pleats" metaphor. Cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
I enjoyed your story about unifying with one's muse. Your rhythmic, rhymed quatrains are very effective, along with your use of alliteration and your "pleats" metaphor. Cheers and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Thanks, Joan. Glad you liked it.
Comment from rama devi
Whimsical an creative response to the contest challenge. Well done! Excellent tempo and rhymes. Good entry! Amusing!
A-muse-zing!
Superb rhymes! I like them all, but especially the last pair.
The meter and rhythm is near-flawless but this line has forced scansion:
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flagging the faith, he must regain.
suggest:
to flag the faith he must regain.
Superb alliteraiton of U and consonance of L and M in line one of this, my favorite stanza:
Unfolding in mind's unkempt pleats
His tempo lost in wrinkled beats,
Sound's rhythm teeters on the brink
As echoes drown in dribbled ink.
A couple of spag suggestions:
And ponders(:) is his talent dead?
As visions(,) locked in yesterday,
Perfect closing note:
He opens self and delves inside
Till he and muse are unified.
Excellent presentation with a cute artwork choice that fits well.
Whimsical
Enjoyed!
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
Whimsical an creative response to the contest challenge. Well done! Excellent tempo and rhymes. Good entry! Amusing!
A-muse-zing!
Superb rhymes! I like them all, but especially the last pair.
The meter and rhythm is near-flawless but this line has forced scansion:
*
flagging the faith, he must regain.
suggest:
to flag the faith he must regain.
Superb alliteraiton of U and consonance of L and M in line one of this, my favorite stanza:
Unfolding in mind's unkempt pleats
His tempo lost in wrinkled beats,
Sound's rhythm teeters on the brink
As echoes drown in dribbled ink.
A couple of spag suggestions:
And ponders(:) is his talent dead?
As visions(,) locked in yesterday,
Perfect closing note:
He opens self and delves inside
Till he and muse are unified.
Excellent presentation with a cute artwork choice that fits well.
Whimsical
Enjoyed!
Love,
rd
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the great review and tips, r d.
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:-)))))
Comment from Susan Burger
This is a good entry for a poem in a story contest. I like the story of a writer trying to get back to their craft. I would think many of us have wondered at some time or another about our talents and capabilities. Your story and rhyme flows well. Good work and good luck in this competition!
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
This is a good entry for a poem in a story contest. I like the story of a writer trying to get back to their craft. I would think many of us have wondered at some time or another about our talents and capabilities. Your story and rhyme flows well. Good work and good luck in this competition!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This poem has a brilliant flow with perfect rhymes and sentiments of the poet searching for his muse, and you were united when this poem was written, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
This poem has a brilliant flow with perfect rhymes and sentiments of the poet searching for his muse, and you were united when this poem was written, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello. I think this is a very good entry for the Story in a Poem contest. I like the phrase "mind's unkempt pleats". It signifies thoughts that are tucked away. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
Hello. I think this is a very good entry for the Story in a Poem contest. I like the phrase "mind's unkempt pleats". It signifies thoughts that are tucked away. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the kind review.