Sheol's Mask
Hidden dangers14 total reviews
Comment from catch22
Hi Tom, this is a powerful set of rhyming quatrains about the demise of Western culture and democratic values. The images sent a chill down my spine. Skillful use of slant end rhyming and pure rhymes that sounded natural. Excellent write.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hi Tom, this is a powerful set of rhyming quatrains about the demise of Western culture and democratic values. The images sent a chill down my spine. Skillful use of slant end rhyming and pure rhymes that sounded natural. Excellent write.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you my friend. Most honored. tom
Comment from Pantygynt
As far as the ancient Greeks were concerned and like most pagan religions the gods were not overly concerned with human morality as we understand it today. Hades was not really the equivalent of the Christian Hell, a place of the damned, but rather a place of the dead. You had to be something really special to end up in the elysian fields.
This began to change with the Judaic concept of Sheol although it is often equated with Hades and Hell. The essential difference between judaism and pagan religions, apart from its monotheism, was that for the first time a deity became concerned with how ordinary folk conducted themselves or as we would say, morality.
Zeus could give a damn who slept with whom or who knicked whose shovel or whatever. No pagan god was. Jehovah was different. It wasn't just the rituals that had to be done right but life itself in all its aspects.
This poem would seem to hint at the sky burial traditions of zoroastrians as much as the punishment of Prometheus before his release by Hercules. Fascinating.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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As far as the ancient Greeks were concerned and like most pagan religions the gods were not overly concerned with human morality as we understand it today. Hades was not really the equivalent of the Christian Hell, a place of the damned, but rather a place of the dead. You had to be something really special to end up in the elysian fields.
This began to change with the Judaic concept of Sheol although it is often equated with Hades and Hell. The essential difference between judaism and pagan religions, apart from its monotheism, was that for the first time a deity became concerned with how ordinary folk conducted themselves or as we would say, morality.
Zeus could give a damn who slept with whom or who knicked whose shovel or whatever. No pagan god was. Jehovah was different. It wasn't just the rituals that had to be done right but life itself in all its aspects.
This poem would seem to hint at the sky burial traditions of zoroastrians as much as the punishment of Prometheus before his release by Hercules. Fascinating.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Great and informative review as usual my friend. Thank you. tom
Comment from ameen786
Brilliant! Simply outstanding reflections my friend, wow! Gravitating/impacting verses with superb alliteration and excellent rhyming; dark, but awesome picture of current environment.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Brilliant! Simply outstanding reflections my friend, wow! Gravitating/impacting verses with superb alliteration and excellent rhyming; dark, but awesome picture of current environment.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Hello friend. Thank you very much for this wonderful review. I am humbled and honored ameen. tom
Comment from TPAC
A good air of poetry in this work. Writer's words making the stir, given swing that captivate the reader, flourishing in thought-provoking views. All in my opinion of this write.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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A good air of poetry in this work. Writer's words making the stir, given swing that captivate the reader, flourishing in thought-provoking views. All in my opinion of this write.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you very much TPAC. Most honored. tom
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Eternal songs of freedom ring;
neo-cons kneel to just one drum
hearing only neo-cons sing
while humming still their hubris hum.'
The rhythm and onomatopoeic quality of this is outstanding. I always look forward to your poems, they always hit the highest standard. Sorry I have no six this work deserves it. Kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Eternal songs of freedom ring;
neo-cons kneel to just one drum
hearing only neo-cons sing
while humming still their hubris hum.'
The rhythm and onomatopoeic quality of this is outstanding. I always look forward to your poems, they always hit the highest standard. Sorry I have no six this work deserves it. Kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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I thank you very much Meia. Most honored. tom
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very skillfully penned poem with excellent use of rhyme, alliteration, and metaphor. I especially like this stanza:
Scorn has stained sweet liberty's dreams
and pompous prophet neo-cons
with sick and secret silent schemes
break their bread with bludgeoning bombs.
This poem definitely reflects my thoughts on the current world situation. Excellent, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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This is a very skillfully penned poem with excellent use of rhyme, alliteration, and metaphor. I especially like this stanza:
Scorn has stained sweet liberty's dreams
and pompous prophet neo-cons
with sick and secret silent schemes
break their bread with bludgeoning bombs.
This poem definitely reflects my thoughts on the current world situation. Excellent, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much Debbie. I am most honored friend. tom
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Good alliteration and strong rhyme pattern used throughout the poem. Dark subject that portrays "Death" well and indicates no one is immune from its consequences. Your Formalist style shows forth in this posting.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Good alliteration and strong rhyme pattern used throughout the poem. Dark subject that portrays "Death" well and indicates no one is immune from its consequences. Your Formalist style shows forth in this posting.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you very much Brett. tom
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. It seems there are many predators wearing masks of innocence who get hold of powerful fire arms that nie thrn suddenly brave to kill.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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A very well-written poem. It seems there are many predators wearing masks of innocence who get hold of powerful fire arms that nie thrn suddenly brave to kill.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you very much Sandra. tom
Comment from Liberty Justice
Seems the Western culture namely the U.S. is in trouble. We have foreign enemies inside and outside our nation who have strong hostilities toward us and want to harm us even more. Indeed, they have already killed and maimed thousands of Americans, such as 911 and other attacks. WELL WRITTEN. Good luck. liberty justice
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Seems the Western culture namely the U.S. is in trouble. We have foreign enemies inside and outside our nation who have strong hostilities toward us and want to harm us even more. Indeed, they have already killed and maimed thousands of Americans, such as 911 and other attacks. WELL WRITTEN. Good luck. liberty justice
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you Liberty. tom
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Comment from rama devi
Wow. This is INTENSE! Wish I had a six. When you post on the weekend, many people won't have sixes left. The alliteration is phenomenal. The rhymes are super inventive. The imagery is impacting. The tone is compelling and consistently intense. The flow is interesting--mixed meter--and musical in a jolting sort of way. I think it fits the theme well. It starts off in iambs...and superb alliteration and consonance of L and S. The phonetic nuances are so abundant that I won't list them all...just know I noticed and applaud!
Favorite lines (for sound and meaning):
Death lurks and laughs with flash of eyes,
salacious stare in sheol's mask -
Our Western cultures waft and wane
rejecting poverty's canard.
AWESOME LINE:
while humming still their hubris hum.
AWESOME STANZA:
Contentious inattention made,
turbulent with temerity,
a price that Western culture paid
that fuels a world's hostility.
Super relevant and memorable (and fantastic phonetics):
Scorn has stained sweet liberty's dreams
and pompous prophet neo-cons
with sick and secret silent schemes
break their bread with bludgeoning bombs.
Perfect closing note--intense:
Black death still lurks and lusts in wait;
great defender of no culture,
feigning fates felicity great -
feed fast, proud Peregrine Vulture.
Wow.
Whew!
Bravo
Love,
sis
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Wow. This is INTENSE! Wish I had a six. When you post on the weekend, many people won't have sixes left. The alliteration is phenomenal. The rhymes are super inventive. The imagery is impacting. The tone is compelling and consistently intense. The flow is interesting--mixed meter--and musical in a jolting sort of way. I think it fits the theme well. It starts off in iambs...and superb alliteration and consonance of L and S. The phonetic nuances are so abundant that I won't list them all...just know I noticed and applaud!
Favorite lines (for sound and meaning):
Death lurks and laughs with flash of eyes,
salacious stare in sheol's mask -
Our Western cultures waft and wane
rejecting poverty's canard.
AWESOME LINE:
while humming still their hubris hum.
AWESOME STANZA:
Contentious inattention made,
turbulent with temerity,
a price that Western culture paid
that fuels a world's hostility.
Super relevant and memorable (and fantastic phonetics):
Scorn has stained sweet liberty's dreams
and pompous prophet neo-cons
with sick and secret silent schemes
break their bread with bludgeoning bombs.
Perfect closing note--intense:
Black death still lurks and lusts in wait;
great defender of no culture,
feigning fates felicity great -
feed fast, proud Peregrine Vulture.
Wow.
Whew!
Bravo
Love,
sis
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much sis. tom
