Ah, wilderness!
Will good or bad survive us?19 total reviews
Comment from Linda Kay
Great job with strong imagery and metaphoric description of our society today from our pollution is like breathing in oxygen and breathing out garlic, to our news cycles producing cyclops with one-eyed views of how to see the world. I like that it ended on a happy note.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Great job with strong imagery and metaphoric description of our society today from our pollution is like breathing in oxygen and breathing out garlic, to our news cycles producing cyclops with one-eyed views of how to see the world. I like that it ended on a happy note.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments.
Comment from The kurlman
Anytime you have God on your side, you can't take these words lightly. You praise the Lord through your poetry and do a good job of it. I am not going to be the one to say anything wrong, I think you do a special job on these poems. Keep up the good work. The kurlman
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Anytime you have God on your side, you can't take these words lightly. You praise the Lord through your poetry and do a good job of it. I am not going to be the one to say anything wrong, I think you do a special job on these poems. Keep up the good work. The kurlman
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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I will always praise and rejoice in the lord. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Comment from F Scott Hafner
Interesting commentary on a much addressed topic. You say "I Believe" once but "I hear", and "I see", twice. You seem to be a person of faith. For me belief transcends what is seen and heard. If not, faith could not exists or that is how I see it. Some say only one faith is possible others have a broader perspective. Your work seems to touch upon that, but that point might be made clearer if that is your intent. In any event I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Interesting commentary on a much addressed topic. You say "I Believe" once but "I hear", and "I see", twice. You seem to be a person of faith. For me belief transcends what is seen and heard. If not, faith could not exists or that is how I see it. Some say only one faith is possible others have a broader perspective. Your work seems to touch upon that, but that point might be made clearer if that is your intent. In any event I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. Both faith and belief transcend what is seen. I pray to my savior Jesus everyday to grow my faith.
Comment from Harry Smith
The picture selection was excellent. The poem was is just outstanding. This is a great free verse poem and should do well in the contest. I really enjoyed reading this poem and read it twice.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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The picture selection was excellent. The poem was is just outstanding. This is a great free verse poem and should do well in the contest. I really enjoyed reading this poem and read it twice.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Bless you for your generous review. It is quite a compliment for an author to be read twice.
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You are most welcome
Comment from friartuck
So many vivid descriptions! We make so much of the scary things out there in the wilderness, but sometimes we miss the fact that Jesus did go there for rest, for meditation, for communication with His father. And along with that we miss the beauty that is there as well.
You brought that out - we need to teach our kids to not fear the wilderness, but to find the same peace, in spite of stories they might have heard.
It's a hard poem to grasp, but it's worth the effort!
One small glitch, though - "Wilderness can be wild with wonder
and beauty to" -- Should it be "too"??
I appreciated this poem!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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So many vivid descriptions! We make so much of the scary things out there in the wilderness, but sometimes we miss the fact that Jesus did go there for rest, for meditation, for communication with His father. And along with that we miss the beauty that is there as well.
You brought that out - we need to teach our kids to not fear the wilderness, but to find the same peace, in spite of stories they might have heard.
It's a hard poem to grasp, but it's worth the effort!
One small glitch, though - "Wilderness can be wild with wonder
and beauty to" -- Should it be "too"??
I appreciated this poem!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Probably it is a glitch and to should have two o's. I really don't know. Thank you for reading and your words.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks wanted question - will good or bad survive us; the answer came naturally at Jesus intervention in wilderness; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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This speaks wanted question - will good or bad survive us; the answer came naturally at Jesus intervention in wilderness; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Many thanks back !
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This is great Sergeant. I do vision quests once in a while and I remember the last one I did was in the "wilderness". By the time the fifth day was up and I was on my way back to the civilized world I was tired, and grinned as if I was six again with a toothless smile. I felt like I was on top of the world, felt beautiful, happy and able to breathe again. When I looked in the mirror there was a return of wildness there that had not been there before. Sunburnt, hair a mess, dirty and I never thought I looked better. I don't think Christ had an ego even living on earth. I think He kept his humbleness and I often wonder before the worst of His life happened if he felt the same ... sorry for rambling. Great write. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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This is great Sergeant. I do vision quests once in a while and I remember the last one I did was in the "wilderness". By the time the fifth day was up and I was on my way back to the civilized world I was tired, and grinned as if I was six again with a toothless smile. I felt like I was on top of the world, felt beautiful, happy and able to breathe again. When I looked in the mirror there was a return of wildness there that had not been there before. Sunburnt, hair a mess, dirty and I never thought I looked better. I don't think Christ had an ego even living on earth. I think He kept his humbleness and I often wonder before the worst of His life happened if he felt the same ... sorry for rambling. Great write. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2018
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Ramble all you want to. The vision of you being six years old with a toothless smile , dirty from a vision quest and never looking better was totally enchanting. I am so happy you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from Henry King
Review by Henry: The picture, an out post looking from an old LEF fortress some where in Africa or SE Asia. A modern Guernica. Your words, I wish I could do as well as you. It would take me several stumbling and rambling pages. Both of them together are a wonderful melding of two fine arts. Thank you.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Review by Henry: The picture, an out post looking from an old LEF fortress some where in Africa or SE Asia. A modern Guernica. Your words, I wish I could do as well as you. It would take me several stumbling and rambling pages. Both of them together are a wonderful melding of two fine arts. Thank you.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for your gracious review.
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Reply from Henry: You are welcome.
Comment from Susan Burger
This is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry contest. Very thought provoking piece. Makes us think about how we handle our times in the wilderness. Good job and good luck in the competition!
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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This is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry contest. Very thought provoking piece. Makes us think about how we handle our times in the wilderness. Good job and good luck in the competition!
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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Thank you for your time and kind remarks. My thought is you will not go into a wilderness unarmed.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing prompt.
Well said and a story well told.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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This is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing prompt.
Well said and a story well told.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2018
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It was my pleasure to write and another to hear from you.
