Where Old Bones Lie
Just a bit of fun, no offence intended : )13 total reviews
Comment from joycetreasures
Enjoyable read Kassawin. What interesting childhood to visit cemeteries? I enjoyed reading this rhythmic poem. I like how you shared the stories and terrible deaths of the ones that laid dead. Great title for this poem (Where Old Bones Lie). Also, I like how you chose the various characters to write about and how they died? Also, I like how you shared that the burial ground needed work, with the birds habitated the grounds? The last lines are nicely written. (Dead bones can't tell their story!). You did a great job telling each of their stories through your poetry. Also, thanks for sharing what " sent to Coventry" mean? Good job!!!!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Enjoyable read Kassawin. What interesting childhood to visit cemeteries? I enjoyed reading this rhythmic poem. I like how you shared the stories and terrible deaths of the ones that laid dead. Great title for this poem (Where Old Bones Lie). Also, I like how you chose the various characters to write about and how they died? Also, I like how you shared that the burial ground needed work, with the birds habitated the grounds? The last lines are nicely written. (Dead bones can't tell their story!). You did a great job telling each of their stories through your poetry. Also, thanks for sharing what " sent to Coventry" mean? Good job!!!!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for such a detailed and encouraging review. Much appreciated : )
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you are so welcome. Take care.
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You did the work. Great job! Happy writing!
Comment from Henry King
Review by Henry: This is superior humorous verse. The rhyme and meter are there. It flows very smoothly. It sounds very good, melodic, when spoken aloud. The attached picture adds to this poem. I can see girls slapping hands while chanting your poem.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Review by Henry: This is superior humorous verse. The rhyme and meter are there. It flows very smoothly. It sounds very good, melodic, when spoken aloud. The attached picture adds to this poem. I can see girls slapping hands while chanting your poem.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Wow! Thank you so very much for such an encouraging review. Six stars too!!! I?m so grateful and appreciative, many thanks
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Reply from Henry: Your welcome. When I was a child, graveyards scared me. Now, at my age, that's where I meet loved ones and old friends. What a change.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Very very interesting write indeed. So charming and amusing the way you rhymed your verses so well and at the same time, you told the stories of downfall of various victims. I like the old western language words you used in your descriptions. NICELY DONE. liberty justice
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Very very interesting write indeed. So charming and amusing the way you rhymed your verses so well and at the same time, you told the stories of downfall of various victims. I like the old western language words you used in your descriptions. NICELY DONE. liberty justice
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Hello and thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review. Very much appreciated : )
Comment from BlueTiger
Great work, I really enjoyed this poem. Your work has a nice rhythm that fits the style of humor well. I liked the stanza with the cat...nice job, I look forward to seeing more of your work on the site!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Great work, I really enjoyed this poem. Your work has a nice rhythm that fits the style of humor well. I liked the stanza with the cat...nice job, I look forward to seeing more of your work on the site!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review and rating. Much appreciated : )
Comment from Ulla
hahahah, I loved this poem written with such parnache and great humour. What a fabulous poem you've wriiten with a story within, and at the same time you made it rhyme. Good luck in the contest, All best, Ulla
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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hahahah, I loved this poem written with such parnache and great humour. What a fabulous poem you've wriiten with a story within, and at the same time you made it rhyme. Good luck in the contest, All best, Ulla
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for the kind words and review. I?m glad you liked it : )
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I love this poem, Kazzawin. Everyone has a skeleton in his closet. Why not one for company in his grave? Very well written with a good mix of vices and appropriate ends for one and all. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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I love this poem, Kazzawin. Everyone has a skeleton in his closet. Why not one for company in his grave? Very well written with a good mix of vices and appropriate ends for one and all. :) Nancy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for your kind review and stars. Much appreciated : )
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
Oh! I thoroughly enjoyed your rhyming poetic verse. The cast of characters is incredible, as are their stories! When I was a child, I lived across from a 100 year old cemetery, and my friends and I would often go there and sit and talk about everything and nothing. Old Captain Swarthout... now there was a story!
Your poem is delightful in form and content!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Hello!
Oh! I thoroughly enjoyed your rhyming poetic verse. The cast of characters is incredible, as are their stories! When I was a child, I lived across from a 100 year old cemetery, and my friends and I would often go there and sit and talk about everything and nothing. Old Captain Swarthout... now there was a story!
Your poem is delightful in form and content!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Thank you for such an encouraging review and for the stars. Both are truly appreciated : )
Comment from Edwin Hofert
I very much enjoyed this write. Excellent job! I loved the flow and humor. ( Vast and protruding rump) loved it! Would like to see more of this! Am new to the site but would love to be a fan. As soon as I figure out how.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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I very much enjoyed this write. Excellent job! I loved the flow and humor. ( Vast and protruding rump) loved it! Would like to see more of this! Am new to the site but would love to be a fan. As soon as I figure out how.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Well hello and welcome...and a huge thank you for such a kind and generous review. I hope you find the site fun and informative. We are all friends here, I hope to read some of your work very soon : )
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an amazing and amusing write with spot on rhymes, flow and great interesting story line, I loved it and wish I had a six for you, a delightful read and you have a great talent, good luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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This is an amazing and amusing write with spot on rhymes, flow and great interesting story line, I loved it and wish I had a six for you, a delightful read and you have a great talent, good luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Thank you Dolly. Such an encouraging review, really appreciated : )
Comment from jenintorre
I loved reading your poem. It is so funny and entertaining. The rhyme is superb. Strangely i have a fascination with graveyards and reading headstones. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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I loved reading your poem. It is so funny and entertaining. The rhyme is superb. Strangely i have a fascination with graveyards and reading headstones. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and the fantastic 6 stars!!! So much appreciated : )
