Comment from BrendaGayle

Good

I loved your phrase "wild flower's dance." The evolution of love into a sacredness is powerful. Personification of a "cruel clock" is especially descriptive.


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 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thank you muchly, blessings, Roy

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Here is a Valentine with a difference. Not for you, Roy, the uusual mindless platitudes and moon in June triteness. Here we have an educated discourse on the nature of love in language that would do credit to Shakespeare.

Finally in the last stanze the poem has a personal dedication. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks Jim, your observations and flattery are most welcome, I'm honoured, blessings, Roy

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I wish I had a 6 left to shine on this beautiful poem, Roy. Your love for your wife comes through like a golden arrow piercing the darkness, brightening everything around her. What a wonderful tribute to marriage and especially to your wife. I think you have a winner here, my friend. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks again, your incredible support is always most welcome, she did like the poem, but glowing review is amazing. , blessings, Roy

Comment from Cedar

Excellent

This is a beautiful tribute to the love you have for your wife. I'm sure she will really enjoy this one.

You know Roy, everlasting love is a hard commodity to find these days. It's truly a gift from God. The experts say that 50 % of the marriages end in divorce within 5 years here in America. What an awful thing that is.

My wife and I have been together for 50 years this past November. Happy Valentines Day...Bill

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Congratulations Bil, that's a feat my friend. The divorce is the same as the US here, it's an epidemic, my ancestors would roll over in their graves. Thanks for the great treview. Blessings. Roy

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I loved those opening lines:
"Youth's beauty's like a fleeting glance,
a skip in time -- wild flower's dance".
However, after the initial passions of youth have started to wane, it takes a certain amount of grit to weld together the bonds of a truly lasting relationship. The forge makes a very good metaphor in that respect.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks Tony, for these great comments and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Exceptional

Hi Roy, this is so well written, but more important it sounds written from the heart. The following certainly is -

We've shared a life with twists and bends,
it's stood time's test, on grace depends.
You've stood beside me, sun or storm,
in you God's grace assumes love's form.

I Love you dearest one ............ How beautiful to openly declare your love so easily.
Warm regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks Dear Dorothy for these sparkling words and beautifully expressed review, your exceptional rating is a great gift, blessings, Roy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Awww! Thanks so much for sharing your beautiful valentine to your wife! I really liked:
"
Love soars and crowns the head of grace,
it dies to self, reveals God's face,
it's like a fortress built on rock,
not subject to time's cruel clock. "

Thank the Lord for Love like that!

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks Helen, for these beautiful words and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from ameen786

Excellent

The fourth stanza is dynamite my friend; even in a valentine verse, you spiced up with spiritual tone; simply beautiful; thanks for the delightful read.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks Ameen, for these lovely words and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Roy, this poem is so loving and tender and the verses speak of an everlasting forever love. You exhibit such caring and sweetness in you analogies of love's worth. Well written. Tell me, though, why did you write the date 5/2/2018. This, of course, as you know, represents May 2, 2018. Did you mean 2/5/2018 February 5, 2018? lol liberty justice

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks LJ, the US is the only country that puts the day and month the wrong way around, it's Feb dear LJ, for these lovely words and super review, blessings, Roy

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Well, Valentine's day is supposed to be about love so this is right in season,
Also more steady rhymes and meter from Roy Down Under Excellent.

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks Red, for these great comments, and super review, blessings, Roy