Peanut Butter
How eating peanut butter scarred me for life20 total reviews
Comment from Ogden
Beautifully written, young man (you're two years my junior).
Although we lived through the same times, our lives could hardly have been more different. Your recall of the events of yours is remarkable in its details, and I love your sense of humor.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Don (aka Ogden)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Beautifully written, young man (you're two years my junior).
Although we lived through the same times, our lives could hardly have been more different. Your recall of the events of yours is remarkable in its details, and I love your sense of humor.
I look forward to reading more of your work.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Old Timer. To bad that I couldn't connect the dots between those events. I have a picture where I am looking daggers at an aunt and uncle, the date is 1939. The picture shows them sitting on the porch and I'm in the yard. My mom told me, too many years ago for me to recall the story, they hid my stick horse and wouldn't tell me where they put it.
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You're very welcome, kiddo. That picture sounds like it would make an excellent illustration for a piece on the incident.
Who are you, mystery writer?
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Reply by Henry: I thought about it. It's in my daughter's hands, she is searching. I kept that stick horse until I was in 1st Grade in El Paso. It traveled to Dallas and then to El Paso. Dad had to attach the head to a broom handle.
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I continue to be impressed by your exceptional recall. I hope your daughter finds the photo.
Don
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I hope so also.
Comment from Ricky1024
this is a story with or about scarce contest entry rich and team them and replug well-read well as I read your rather lengthy story I thought what the culprit being peanut butter that you were going to be allergic to it some people are but fortunately was just a little bit too much of all those things from Grandpa nicely written have a blessed day good luck in the contest dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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this is a story with or about scarce contest entry rich and team them and replug well-read well as I read your rather lengthy story I thought what the culprit being peanut butter that you were going to be allergic to it some people are but fortunately was just a little bit too much of all those things from Grandpa nicely written have a blessed day good luck in the contest dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018
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Thank you Ricky.
Comment from emptypage
Oh, wow... I'd be scarred, too. But, OMG, to live without peanut butter? I couldn't do it! I'd die, I tell, you! I'd simply die!--Okay, I was going into my Gone With the Wind persona there for a minute, but, hey, sorry you hate the PB in PB&J. I think I'll make a samich [sic] right now!
Great story. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Oh, wow... I'd be scarred, too. But, OMG, to live without peanut butter? I couldn't do it! I'd die, I tell, you! I'd simply die!--Okay, I was going into my Gone With the Wind persona there for a minute, but, hey, sorry you hate the PB in PB&J. I think I'll make a samich [sic] right now!
Great story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Reply by Henry: It's funny, I can eat all the peanuts and peanut brittle I want. It's just peanut butter and things made of peanut butter. I have tried making my own by grinding the nuts, but it is too dry. So I guess it might be the oil that is added. Thank you for your stars and your words.
Comment from doggymad
Your writing isn't bad but you have a tendency to allow your thoughts to wander.
In all of this there is very little mention of the peanut butter. The reader does not need to know where you lived to enhance the story.
Regards
Freda
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Your writing isn't bad but you have a tendency to allow your thoughts to wander.
In all of this there is very little mention of the peanut butter. The reader does not need to know where you lived to enhance the story.
Regards
Freda
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Reply by Henry: Thank you for your comments and your stars.
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Honestly I like your style of writing and look forward to reading more if you can let me know who you are after the contest
hugs
Freda
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Reply by Henry: Freda, thank you and intriguing.
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Reply be Henry: Freda as I look back at what you wrote initially, I wonder if I didn't prepare reviewers for that "wandering." In my first paragraph I wrote, "... It was like viewing Greek drama, one scene at a time ..."
Comment from N.K. Wagner
You didn't say so, but I suspect that rooster taught you about something you shouldn't do, as well. It's good to learn young.
Sorry about the peanut butter. It's really good--unless you get sick on it. Your poor little tummy.
It took me about 10 years living in my present location before I could begin navigating by where something "used to be". I'm not a native here, but at least now, after 20 years, I know where the natives are talking about when they give directions.
Great, if painful, memories. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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You didn't say so, but I suspect that rooster taught you about something you shouldn't do, as well. It's good to learn young.
Sorry about the peanut butter. It's really good--unless you get sick on it. Your poor little tummy.
It took me about 10 years living in my present location before I could begin navigating by where something "used to be". I'm not a native here, but at least now, after 20 years, I know where the natives are talking about when they give directions.
Great, if painful, memories. :) Nancy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
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Reply by Henry: I don't drop my drawers for the fun of it any more. I still detest peanut butter. In this my hometown, we have a new one. The over one hundred-years old smoke stack was demolished. It is a major reference point for the TV traffic reports. Thank you for the stars.
Comment from Marge Setzer
Your story makes me think - just what do I clearly remember about my pre-school years? The only thing that comes to mind is the time when I waded into the pond water too far and it was over my head. My dad, shoes and all, rushed in to save me. That's all I remember about that incident. You, on the other hand, remember many significant events in your life at age three. Although not related as you mentioned in your first paragraph, each was significant enough to have made a lasting impression. I could feel through the well-chosen details the impact each event had at the time when your dad became a real entity in your life. You captured that transition beautifully. This was a tender and loving piece and I thank you for sharing. Marge
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Your story makes me think - just what do I clearly remember about my pre-school years? The only thing that comes to mind is the time when I waded into the pond water too far and it was over my head. My dad, shoes and all, rushed in to save me. That's all I remember about that incident. You, on the other hand, remember many significant events in your life at age three. Although not related as you mentioned in your first paragraph, each was significant enough to have made a lasting impression. I could feel through the well-chosen details the impact each event had at the time when your dad became a real entity in your life. You captured that transition beautifully. This was a tender and loving piece and I thank you for sharing. Marge
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Reply from Henry: Thank you for the 5 stars Marge. My children instigated the rehashing of these events. Most are grandparents and they wanted my thoughts preserved for their descendants. My children and their children are scattered, these stories help them stay connected.
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Bravo! I, too, am trying to write some personal history. At the moment I am working on a novel about my fathers's family from the perspective of the Homestead who calls herself House. I have also started a work on just my father. I hope you are having as much fund as I am. Marge
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Reply from Henry: Yes I am. I have several I will release as the situation permits. I even have a couple of fictional short stories which evolved from my mini autobiography.
Comment from CC Mack
It is funny what one's mind remembers and what it doesn't. Your grandpa's favorite snack brought back wonderful memories of my father who loved peanut butter and white Karo syrup mixed together for "biscuit dipping". Your story invites my own mind to pen my memories.
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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It is funny what one's mind remembers and what it doesn't. Your grandpa's favorite snack brought back wonderful memories of my father who loved peanut butter and white Karo syrup mixed together for "biscuit dipping". Your story invites my own mind to pen my memories.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Reply from Henry. Thank you.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think that this is a good entry for the Story About Scars writing prompt.
Well done, a well told story of memories.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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I think that this is a good entry for the Story About Scars writing prompt.
Well done, a well told story of memories.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Reply from Henry: Sharon. Thank you for the complements and stars.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I absolutely love this story. You are quite the story teller, and with your childhood experiences, you have stories to tell. That was almost 80 years ago. Life was so different then without all the technology we have today. Kids really experienced life. Please keep your stories coming to keep our history alive. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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I absolutely love this story. You are quite the story teller, and with your childhood experiences, you have stories to tell. That was almost 80 years ago. Life was so different then without all the technology we have today. Kids really experienced life. Please keep your stories coming to keep our history alive. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Thank you very much Debbie. Your words are inspiring.
Comment from Wabigoon
Nicely done. My only problems are formatting, meaning I think you should have divided paragraphs for the readr The stupid program doesn't -- you're supposed to be the brains.
A nicely done memoir. Sorry about peanut butter.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Nicely done. My only problems are formatting, meaning I think you should have divided paragraphs for the readr The stupid program doesn't -- you're supposed to be the brains.
A nicely done memoir. Sorry about peanut butter.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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If I divided the paragraphs, the word count would have been over the limit. I divided the scenes and indented the paragraphs. I don't know any other way to do it. I tried carats, but that jumped the word count even higher. Thank you for liking my story.
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Didn't know you had such constraints!
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Yes, this particular piece is under strict word constraints.
