Only One Word
Contemplation when one is grappling for a word not invented.7 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
He is not deaf and loves every snippet he hears,
but he is dumb as he can't articulate or invent that word.
So he settles for such a much distant second word, "Beautiful!".... This is amazing and I especially enjoyed your notes...so interesting. Well done warmest regards and I look forward to reading more from you your work is so interesting. Kind regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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He is not deaf and loves every snippet he hears,
but he is dumb as he can't articulate or invent that word.
So he settles for such a much distant second word, "Beautiful!".... This is amazing and I especially enjoyed your notes...so interesting. Well done warmest regards and I look forward to reading more from you your work is so interesting. Kind regards Meia xx
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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I thank you very much for your compliments and this review.
Comment from Dan Diego
This post has two parts to it. The first part is the poem itself (beautiful) and the second part is a series of notes that justify (?) the writing of the poem. If you ask me, the poem stands on its own merit. The notes actually detract from it. Just me.
First, I am not a poet. So, I read your post without an eye for form, but simply for the enjoyment. Second, your premise is universal - how many times have we been in situations when we search for the one word to summarize our feelings. So, your words resonated with me. For example, my wife and I went to the Louvre a few years back and fought through layers of people to get a glimpse of Mona Lisa. I got close enough to have an unobstructed view, then looked for one word to summarize what I saw. I couldn't find it.
So, the storyteller in your poem is smitten and looks for answers in his mind. He is conflicted about his past yet truly wishes to find that word to say. He settles on second best (beautiful) because he just can't find it. If anything, this is a testament to your narrator's conflicted state of mind.
I hope my interpretation is close to what you meant. If not, sorry.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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This post has two parts to it. The first part is the poem itself (beautiful) and the second part is a series of notes that justify (?) the writing of the poem. If you ask me, the poem stands on its own merit. The notes actually detract from it. Just me.
First, I am not a poet. So, I read your post without an eye for form, but simply for the enjoyment. Second, your premise is universal - how many times have we been in situations when we search for the one word to summarize our feelings. So, your words resonated with me. For example, my wife and I went to the Louvre a few years back and fought through layers of people to get a glimpse of Mona Lisa. I got close enough to have an unobstructed view, then looked for one word to summarize what I saw. I couldn't find it.
So, the storyteller in your poem is smitten and looks for answers in his mind. He is conflicted about his past yet truly wishes to find that word to say. He settles on second best (beautiful) because he just can't find it. If anything, this is a testament to your narrator's conflicted state of mind.
I hope my interpretation is close to what you meant. If not, sorry.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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On FanStory I had a simple six line poem ripped to shreds and informed, "No doubt while you consider yourself a poet, let me inform you are not one!"
How do you answer that one? My rebuttal only took have the space he used and I had to disarm him and said, "Where in my notes did I ever say I was a, "Poet?" Personally I consider myself a poetic writer, but as you can clearly see, I surely paid the price of one!" Hell, with the first poem I posted here, I almost lost my house three times.
To me I only review poems that stand by themselves, if they don't I don't post a review. I do my review and then look at the notes. If they don't help I don't worry about it as they are optional in my mind, but if they do, they get mention. I once had a FanStory member downgrade me if I included any notes, and figured out why when I was told FS should charge me double.
I also had a favorite member who was teaching me about poetry but from the old world and a friend helped me out with her poetry as he let me know that in America, we stop at a double entendre' but they work on three or four of them. I sort of exposed that concept, but let her end up my guide. She brought up two other entendre' what she herself thought I was saying, and what she got out of it.
Smitten is over used in regards to me, but the feelings I experienced is a combination of appreciative for her being a blessing as well sheer admiration... Most likely the same thing as smitten as others see it.
I was going to boast that I too say the Mona Lisa at an exhibition of a Boston museum, but researched it. When I saw it, the Mona Lisa was a painting you had to walk into, which made me wonder as my photography teacher presented it's majesty but got me to believe it was the size of 4 x 5 inches. You saw the real deal, and I discovered the one I saw was part of an exhibit of how De 'Vinci inspired other people. LOL Yet you, my art teacher and myself saw the beauty and blessing in it and don't have the word we need to convey it.
This will be one of my favorite reviews of my own work. Thanks!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Each line is quite long and your poem is quite epic. I often search for just one word, in fact I do it often and it can take days to find it. Inventing a word is often what poets do, but finding the word you are looking for brings a moment of euphoria which only the writer will know, a fascinating write and I wish you luck with it, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Each line is quite long and your poem is quite epic. I often search for just one word, in fact I do it often and it can take days to find it. Inventing a word is often what poets do, but finding the word you are looking for brings a moment of euphoria which only the writer will know, a fascinating write and I wish you luck with it, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Thank you very much for your review, I wasn't expecting so kind an audience with this one. I've been accused of inventing a word and it ended up down to the battle of not only the unabridged dictionary, but the particular edition and year.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like your style, or lack of it here. Since the theme is that you can't find a word to express your feelings, I don't think that it needs a lot of order. More of a rambling, searching for the word style seems better. That is what you use. I like that approach. Good luck with your other writing endeavors. This one is great.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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I like your style, or lack of it here. Since the theme is that you can't find a word to express your feelings, I don't think that it needs a lot of order. More of a rambling, searching for the word style seems better. That is what you use. I like that approach. Good luck with your other writing endeavors. This one is great.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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I think the difficulties in this work was more in expressing thoughts and sentiments behind the feelings, rather then simply the feeling that is generated. I thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a very nicely worded poem with a story about contemplation of a word not well invented; free flow of narrative taletelling in poetâ??s own style is an interesting read; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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This is a very nicely worded poem with a story about contemplation of a word not well invented; free flow of narrative taletelling in poetâ??s own style is an interesting read; well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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No, I didn't design it to be blabby or prattling. LOL The difficulty for me was to create a couple scenes that overlay each other. In a way it is like writing a poem in the room, and then standing without, looking in. Probably better stop there or I will be sounding like Jim Morrison. I enjoyed this review and thank you for it.
Comment from Jean Lutz
As I read well penned line after well penned line, one word kept shouting at me, albeit I didn't see it in black and white. CONNECTION! Two souls do not need words. Time for action. Sure stirred some memories in me -- where there was connection and then we both walked away. Left pondering what might have been.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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As I read well penned line after well penned line, one word kept shouting at me, albeit I didn't see it in black and white. CONNECTION! Two souls do not need words. Time for action. Sure stirred some memories in me -- where there was connection and then we both walked away. Left pondering what might have been.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Wow! I thank you for the review and the sixth star. I just wonder what is going to happen to me when people of the group figure the poem out as I have paid some hellacious prices for my attributional poetry, but each has had their unexpected rewards as well. Again, thanks and I hope to be on here a bit more.
Comment from Ella Gott
Wow this is awesome! You are super talented I can't wait to hear more from you! You should totally enter this in a competition! 5 Stars for sure, keep posting such interesting stuff I will definitely keep reading.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Wow this is awesome! You are super talented I can't wait to hear more from you! You should totally enter this in a competition! 5 Stars for sure, keep posting such interesting stuff I will definitely keep reading.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Wow! I am very happy for your review and will try to post a lot more as I really miss not posting like I once did. Part of the problem is financial and time, as I got to work like hell to keep my house, but that problem should be over soon. The other problem is while I love poetry, a lot of my writing is in the social/political commentary realm and that too is a whacky adventure. That also requires a lot of time.
I thank you very much for this review and taking the time out to read the poem.
