Comment from frierajac

Excellent

This is such a pleasant read and the motivation for writing it is admirable. It makes me glad to see someone doing this for Rama Devi as she has been so kind in her attending to the edits and reviews, not to mention entertaining and enlightening in her work.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. It was fun to write and kind of up Rama's alley, so I hope she likes it. estory

Comment from persevere

Excellent

As I read this poem I could feel my spirit soaring and joining those birds in flight. This is a piece of writing suitable for a meditation session or an aid in falling asleep.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the five star review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed the sublimity and tranquility of it, that was the aim. estory

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

What an uplifting poem! Your descriptions transport me to that mountain top. Such a serene poem. Is Chang Mai an actual place? I totally enjoyed your poem. Thank you for its loveliness.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the five star review and all your comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it and found it so uplifting. Chang Mai is in Tailand, I think. I know the name from Brian Eno's album, Music For Film. It inspired me to write something light and airy, free and expanding. estory

reply by Debbie Pope on 12-Feb-2018

Thank you for explaining. I am learning so much from Fan Story. I just joined last month.

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Hee hee - of course I like it! Thanks for the mention. I love it, actually...especially the closing lines. I love Brian Eno too. Listened to him in my teens.

Love the tone of hope and mystical rapture!

Like the other contemplative visual suite, I think this would be best suited without caps on all lines. One other nit: mountaintops is one word, I believe.

Love the alliteration of M in the first one.

LOVE THIS AHA:
Above even the clouds

Nice assonance of I sounds in these lines, and the closing line too:

Where clean and white
Feathers of birds
In flight

Rise into the skies,



Favorite lines:

Constellations of stars,
Lotus blossoms,

An indescribable delight


A six if I had one.

Thanks!

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the five star review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem, I am so glad you liked it. I thought you might like this one. I was inspired by the name and wanted to write something uplifting and sublime, tranquil and peaceful and meditative. I have so many Brian Eno albums. Another Green World, the Ambient series, and those great albums he did with Robert Fripp that got me into minimalism estory

reply by rama devi on 12-Feb-2018

I like Fripp too!

:-)))

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

I'm sure rama will be delighted with this lovely written poem, which is so full of hope and promise for all things better. That apart, I just want to comment that Chang Mai is beyond beautiful. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the five star review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you liked it and found it so uplifting and inspiring. estory

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A beautiful tribute for your friend with warm sentiments and I am sure this will be very well received, very kind and thoughtful and heartfelt, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem, I am glad you liked it. Rama told me she enjoyed it so I am glad about that too. It was fun to write estory