AnnaĆ¢??s Drawer
My Biggest Mistake27 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
This is an experience poem. You allow the reader to see inside the drawyer you speak of and feel like they are in the scene described. I'm kind of wondering where Ann is and why you are looking at her jewellery? I can't help being curious.
You have nice rhymes as required for this contest. My favorite of your rhyme combinations is pearls and curls.
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
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This is an experience poem. You allow the reader to see inside the drawyer you speak of and feel like they are in the scene described. I'm kind of wondering where Ann is and why you are looking at her jewellery? I can't help being curious.
You have nice rhymes as required for this contest. My favorite of your rhyme combinations is pearls and curls.
Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Anna's Drawer, has nicely rhymed and tells this sad story of loss. I like how it begins with just the visual and works through to the revelation of a deceitful other woman and her successful ouster of the titular character. Enjoyed this.
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This poem, Anna's Drawer, has nicely rhymed and tells this sad story of loss. I like how it begins with just the visual and works through to the revelation of a deceitful other woman and her successful ouster of the titular character. Enjoyed this.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
Comment from TPAC
Super story. Played by a shadow that neither expected, a third wheel, lifting the whole situation into their wants and desires. Trickster who game on close ones emotions like a succubus feeding until they are dry. I found it an inspiring write, deposited with many profound views. All in my opinion of this work.
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Super story. Played by a shadow that neither expected, a third wheel, lifting the whole situation into their wants and desires. Trickster who game on close ones emotions like a succubus feeding until they are dry. I found it an inspiring write, deposited with many profound views. All in my opinion of this work.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
Comment from jppoet
Congrats, this is a Fantabulous poem which, in the richness of its rhymes and mood, merge harmoniously with its musical metrical cadences.
Best of success in the contest.
I find sympathetic with my poem "VALENTINE'S DAY" now in the VALENTINE POETRY contest ending Feb 14. Reviewers say its TRIPLICATE acrostic has NEVER been seen on FS. Pls take a peek-review. I have just become your Fan. Blessings. john
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Congrats, this is a Fantabulous poem which, in the richness of its rhymes and mood, merge harmoniously with its musical metrical cadences.
Best of success in the contest.
I find sympathetic with my poem "VALENTINE'S DAY" now in the VALENTINE POETRY contest ending Feb 14. Reviewers say its TRIPLICATE acrostic has NEVER been seen on FS. Pls take a peek-review. I have just become your Fan. Blessings. john
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
Comment from Ogden
That was a tricky gambit, assuming the first-person narrative of a man, and you pulled it off well. Apparently, you were left with lemons, and you made lemonade.
Nice work, LoannaLois.
Good luck in the contest.
Don (aka Ogden)
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That was a tricky gambit, assuming the first-person narrative of a man, and you pulled it off well. Apparently, you were left with lemons, and you made lemonade.
Nice work, LoannaLois.
Good luck in the contest.
Don (aka Ogden)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think we infuse inanimate objects with memories inadvertently and then when we look at them our memories are instantly visualised and felt deep within, your words resonated here, love Dolly x
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I think we infuse inanimate objects with memories inadvertently and then when we look at them our memories are instantly visualised and felt deep within, your words resonated here, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
An excellent treatise on the corrosive qualities of jealousy. This is written in common metre with the appropriate rhyme scheme, and tells the famiar tale of hell having no fury like a woman scorned together with the devastating consequences of that fury.
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An excellent treatise on the corrosive qualities of jealousy. This is written in common metre with the appropriate rhyme scheme, and tells the famiar tale of hell having no fury like a woman scorned together with the devastating consequences of that fury.
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
