Comment from frierajac

Excellent

I especially like the second stanza's, ' morn's cradle starts to sway' and I appreciate the clovers and the children and leprechaun, as it recalls to me the kind of feeling
I had as a child growing up and hearing the Irish songs.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks, for your excellent review and empathetic comments, blessings, Roy

reply by frierajac on 09-Feb-2018

Dawn's cradle endlessly rocking.

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

It seems that way

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Abcb rhyme scheme used here, which I hardly see used. Worked well.
A poem of hope, where once again your faith shines through.

Have a good day, author.
Best wishes.
RG

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks, RG, for your super review and thoughtful, comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

This is a well written poem with strong abcb rhymes.

Yes, even in the darkest night,
still shines the brightest star;
And though your thoughts be black as coal,
hope's shining spire's not far

This is an awesome opening stanza to start this delightful poem. Take care and have a blessed day, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks Debbie, for your excellent review and empathetic comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from JanPerry

Exceptional

Still writing with artistic flare I see. Don't worry about the grumps on here, in regards to your next poem.
I can see the depth of mystery, your poetic words ring true with real skill.
Well done again.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks Jan, for your wonderful review and beautiful comments, and amazing stars, blessings, Roy

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Love the voicing here:

And though your thoughts be black as coal,
hope's shining spire's not far.


A few spag suggestions:

Yes, even in the darkest night,(no ,)
still shines the brightest star;


And in the valley(,) deep and cold(,)


Lovely:
To harmonies of dawn's bright song,
morn's cradle starts to sway.


I love the rhymes here and the import:

So written on time's daily flight,
lurks souls of life unique;
God's gifted to the sons of men --
the deeps to life's mystique.


Fine work. Inspiring. Fine phonetics in phrasing, especially all the L and S sounds.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks RD, for your excellent review and inspiring comments, and your wondeful corrections, my sweet friend, blessings, Roy

reply by rama devi on 09-Feb-2018

xxxoooo

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

Roy, you have become a poetry-spouting machine, one after the next, over and over. You'll have a poem on every verse of scripture before you know it.

I like the poem quite a lot. Nice word choices, beautiful imagery.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks Marla, for your great review and thoughtful comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

A poem that flows well with its even meter and abcb rhyme scheme. There is, even or perhaps especially, the brightness of the distant stars on the darkest of nights.They are a constant metaphorical reminder for us, as is the inevitable rising of the dawn each day. God has given us many ways in which to ponder "the depths of life's mystique".

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks Again Tony, for your grea review and comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from writerjen

Excellent

Lovely poem. Vivid imagery. I like this verse, "And through the striking morning light, the dew light sparks the day. To harmonies of dawn's bright song.." It's true that dawn brings a song, it gives us hope as we see God continue to give us breath to breathe, ears to hear and eyes to see. As always, great job.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks Jen, for your wonderful review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Roy, This is a very beautiful and true poem you have penned about our Lord. You used great descriptive words and lovely art work. I love that scripture! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018

Thanks Teri, for your wonderful review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Yes, praise God for gifting us "life's mystique" and giving us purpose and assurance about all the things we can't know now. The last verse reminds me of Ecc. 3:11 "He has also set eternity in the human heart; "

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thanks Helen, you've quoted a favourite scripture, and thanks for your excellent review and empathetic comments, blessings, Roy