Racing the Sunset
Perseverance and Faith30 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
faith, beauty, perseverance, and courage... it is all here. A fabulous poem, beautiful and serene yet fast paced, this is stunning work well done good luck and kind regards love Meia xx
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faith, beauty, perseverance, and courage... it is all here. A fabulous poem, beautiful and serene yet fast paced, this is stunning work well done good luck and kind regards love Meia xx
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello Meia,
Many thanks. These little poems are so challenging for me. I labor over precise wordage...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from ameen786
A perfect ten; please accept a virtual six; a profound write,"Racing the sunset,"-unique and wonderful metaphor as in life's approach to its end; thank you for sharing and good luck!
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A perfect ten; please accept a virtual six; a profound write,"Racing the sunset,"-unique and wonderful metaphor as in life's approach to its end; thank you for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello ameen!
I will gladly accept your "virtual six!" What a delight! Smiles all around!
These little poems are so tricky; I have re-written this offering no less than a dozen times...just searching for the right words and phrases!
So appreciative of your comments and review!
diane
Comment from MelB
Hi Mrs. KT, lovely artwork and a wonderful 5-7-5 poem. The descriptions and imagery create a great metaphor for persevering through life and its challenges.
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Hi Mrs. KT, lovely artwork and a wonderful 5-7-5 poem. The descriptions and imagery create a great metaphor for persevering through life and its challenges.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello MelB!
How honored and humbled I am by your thoughtful and complimentary review! I struggle with these short/fixed poetic formats. I have edited this piece no less than a dozen times...just searching for the precise wordage in such a small offering.
Many thanks!
diane
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about the sunset in motion, action, as if it was racing towards its destination with stroke for stroke against the sea waves; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks about the sunset in motion, action, as if it was racing towards its destination with stroke for stroke against the sea waves; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello!
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem to view a wonderful sunset and be able to paint it in a beautiful picture for the world to see is a great talent revealed. A moment in time captured forever.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem to view a wonderful sunset and be able to paint it in a beautiful picture for the world to see is a great talent revealed. A moment in time captured forever.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello Sandra!
Thank you for appreciating my poetic offering!
diane
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fine write and paints a picture of the race for first place as the sun sets, a race against time with courage and determination, best of luck with this poem, love Dolly x
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This is a fine write and paints a picture of the race for first place as the sun sets, a race against time with courage and determination, best of luck with this poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello Dolly!
One of my dearest college friends snapped this photograph.
It resonates with me on both a literal and metaphorical level...
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from Susan Burger
Excellent poem for the 5-7-5 contest. In just eleven words you convey a story. The rowers race against not only the waves, but also the sunset. The last line then sums it up. Their courage and determination is shown by the blisters they have earned from their hard work with the oars. Your words brought this picture to life. Great job. Good luck in the competition!
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Excellent poem for the 5-7-5 contest. In just eleven words you convey a story. The rowers race against not only the waves, but also the sunset. The last line then sums it up. Their courage and determination is shown by the blisters they have earned from their hard work with the oars. Your words brought this picture to life. Great job. Good luck in the competition!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello Susan!
So incredibly honored by your thoughtful review.
The longer I gazed at the photograph, it took on an even deeper meaning for me: life is a race to the sunset...
Best Wishes and again, many thanks,
diane
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Ah, yes it certainly is! Amazing what we can glean from a simple snapshot.
Comment from RodG
I love the photo, but let's pretend you didn't use it. What would we be seeing? I love competitive rowing, but are we really witnessing "courage"? May I suggest using " oar-blistered rowers" instead?
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I love the photo, but let's pretend you didn't use it. What would we be seeing? I love competitive rowing, but are we really witnessing "courage"? May I suggest using " oar-blistered rowers" instead?
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello RodG
I appreciate your suggestion of "oar-blistered rowers" as on a literal level that is what the photograph depicts. My daughter was the stroke seat for her university's 8 women crew team, and her hands were definitely "oar-blistered" after each practice and race. But the photograph takes/took on a far deeper meaning for me as I gazed upon it. Metaphorically, the rowers in the photograph depict faith and courage to me to persevere as they or we "race to the sunset..."
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Yes, I may be too literal. I love your metaphorical interpretation. Rod
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Oh Rod!
No worries. Once when my daughter was racing, her coxswain steered the boat into a cement buoy. The result was that my daughter's "unbreakable" oar split in two and my daughter nearly bit her tongue in half in the process. When I think of rowers, even on a literal level, I think of courage! :)
Be well!
diane
Comment from jppoet
This marvelous poem and its glorious captivating photo harmoniously capture the mood and imagery of its subject, despite its brief 5 7 5 requirement. Blessings, john
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This marvelous poem and its glorious captivating photo harmoniously capture the mood and imagery of its subject, despite its brief 5 7 5 requirement. Blessings, john
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
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Hello John,
I so appreciate your thoughtful and kind review.
These 5/7/5 offerings are a challenge to pen; that is for certain!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Jean Lutz
Stunning message of courage presented in well chosen words and complimentary artwork. A challenge to all who want to work for good while there is still light. Best wishes to you with the entry.
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Stunning message of courage presented in well chosen words and complimentary artwork. A challenge to all who want to work for good while there is still light. Best wishes to you with the entry.
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Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello Jean,
Thank you for your thoughtful review.
The artwork strikes me at both a literal and metaphorical level...
Best Wishes,
diane
