In Honor Of Omar Kahayyam
READ NOTES PLEASE: aaba rhyme in iambic pentameter61 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your notes were outstanding and so informative ee. They could've
been a separate post. However, they gave great info on the original
poem. Your version was in keeping with it. I liked the rhyme scheme
used as that's a good one for storytelling. Your words were descriptive
and painted a great picture for readers. Your poem was an easy read
with great imagery.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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Your notes were outstanding and so informative ee. They could've
been a separate post. However, they gave great info on the original
poem. Your version was in keeping with it. I liked the rhyme scheme
used as that's a good one for storytelling. Your words were descriptive
and painted a great picture for readers. Your poem was an easy read
with great imagery.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
Nice job keep up the good work. I enjoy the read very well written. Keep it up stay focus and bless what's. Again thank you for sharing can't wait to read More
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Nice job keep up the good work. I enjoy the read very well written. Keep it up stay focus and bless what's. Again thank you for sharing can't wait to read More
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Ric Myworld
As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But even an untrained ear can read and enjoy the rhyme, meter, and verses they can't write. To be touched my another's sensitivities.
Thanks for sharing.
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As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But even an untrained ear can read and enjoy the rhyme, meter, and verses they can't write. To be touched my another's sensitivities.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Douglas Goff
This is very well done. My favorite poignant stanza :
Sweet mystery of life, not found when dead,
But in anticipation free of dread,
For life begins anew with every breath
And every rising from the slumber bed.
Thank you for sharing!
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This is very well done. My favorite poignant stanza :
Sweet mystery of life, not found when dead,
But in anticipation free of dread,
For life begins anew with every breath
And every rising from the slumber bed.
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Terry Broxson
Easy, I don't think this was easy to write, but dang, is it ever good! I have read some of Omar's work, although it was many years ago. Your poem certainly captures the style. While I do like the whole poem, the sixth stanza is exceptional. I am sorry I am out of sixes. Terry.
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Easy, I don't think this was easy to write, but dang, is it ever good! I have read some of Omar's work, although it was many years ago. Your poem certainly captures the style. While I do like the whole poem, the sixth stanza is exceptional. I am sorry I am out of sixes. Terry.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The first translation remains the best poetically I think and as you say has become a classic in its own right. Your version certainly merges well with the Victorian one. The musical quality is retained.
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The first translation remains the best poetically I think and as you say has become a classic in its own right. Your version certainly merges well with the Victorian one. The musical quality is retained.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Aussie
As a child my father often quoted the Rubaiyyat. Of course I didn't understand a word. Now I treasure those poems. I also thought 'the moving finger writes and having writ, moves on.' Was from the Bible with Nebuchadnezzar! Says how dumb I was as a kid. Thank you for sharing beautiful and meaningful poetry. Your Down Under sweetheart!
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As a child my father often quoted the Rubaiyyat. Of course I didn't understand a word. Now I treasure those poems. I also thought 'the moving finger writes and having writ, moves on.' Was from the Bible with Nebuchadnezzar! Says how dumb I was as a kid. Thank you for sharing beautiful and meaningful poetry. Your Down Under sweetheart!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Kaiku
it is nice to be a student of poetic verse. Not everyone has the love or diligence to understand the nuances that exist in so many formats great writers have used over the years. And new ones being formed to stretch the beauty of words.
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it is nice to be a student of poetic verse. Not everyone has the love or diligence to understand the nuances that exist in so many formats great writers have used over the years. And new ones being formed to stretch the beauty of words.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
First, your notes were are so enlightening. I have never heard of this man before, but the teaser you have given us of part of one of his poems, was fabulous, and a true classic. When I read yours, written the format of Omar Khayyam's, I found it a delight to wander in. Your tribute to this scholar is well done, and well deserved. I'll have to look for more of his work. :) Sandra xxx
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First, your notes were are so enlightening. I have never heard of this man before, but the teaser you have given us of part of one of his poems, was fabulous, and a true classic. When I read yours, written the format of Omar Khayyam's, I found it a delight to wander in. Your tribute to this scholar is well done, and well deserved. I'll have to look for more of his work. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 04-Mar-2023
Comment from patcelaw
This is a good poem that you have written. I am not sure I totally understand what it is saying. I do find that your notes are very interesting about the part that you're referring to. I wish you the best and all of your writing. Patricia.
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This is a good poem that you have written. I am not sure I totally understand what it is saying. I do find that your notes are very interesting about the part that you're referring to. I wish you the best and all of your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2023
