In Honor Of Omar Kahayyam
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Comment from Treischel
Wow! You grabbed me immediately in that very first line with a flurry of flowing alliteration, and you used several more through the poem. Excellent rhyming and meter. You even expertly spattered in some in-line rhymes.to provide futhere delight. The poem itself intertwined stupor with grape in clever ways. Then segued into fears driven by the cloister voices of revolution. A rollicking read. Bravo.
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Wow! You grabbed me immediately in that very first line with a flurry of flowing alliteration, and you used several more through the poem. Excellent rhyming and meter. You even expertly spattered in some in-line rhymes.to provide futhere delight. The poem itself intertwined stupor with grape in clever ways. Then segued into fears driven by the cloister voices of revolution. A rollicking read. Bravo.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Lovely work. It does seem that a lot of his poetry revolves around drinking wine. Nice work if you can get it I suppose. Have va very happy New Year. Karen
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Lovely work. It does seem that a lot of his poetry revolves around drinking wine. Nice work if you can get it I suppose. Have va very happy New Year. Karen
Comment Written 01-Jan-2024
Comment from Julie Lau
I am a long-time fan of Omar Kahayaam, and you piece certainly does him justice, reproducing perfectly the rhyme and rhythm of Fitzgerald's beautiful translation. Interesting that it was attacked by many English clerics because he describes a pleasant but godless existence. Would that many more of present-day twisted humanity could not adopt his thinking!
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I am a long-time fan of Omar Kahayaam, and you piece certainly does him justice, reproducing perfectly the rhyme and rhythm of Fitzgerald's beautiful translation. Interesting that it was attacked by many English clerics because he describes a pleasant but godless existence. Would that many more of present-day twisted humanity could not adopt his thinking!
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
Comment from Jacob1395
I am always left in awe of writing, particularly by your choice of words and the way how you construct your poems. A really well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
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I am always left in awe of writing, particularly by your choice of words and the way how you construct your poems. A really well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
Comment from Lisasview
I am blown away by your authors notes sharing this rather amazing poem.
It is the type of poem, as I see it, that needs to be gone through carefully, line by line ... to actually understand the metaphors so well hidden behind the lines.
One wonders what he was thinking when he wrote this?
I really love this line ...
'Tis all a Chequer-board of Nights and Days
Lisasview
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I am blown away by your authors notes sharing this rather amazing poem.
It is the type of poem, as I see it, that needs to be gone through carefully, line by line ... to actually understand the metaphors so well hidden behind the lines.
One wonders what he was thinking when he wrote this?
I really love this line ...
'Tis all a Chequer-board of Nights and Days
Lisasview
Comment Written 31-Dec-2023
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I appreciate fully your introduction (to me) of this fine poet. I always love biographies and your notes are very helpful in adding more flesh on the bones here. I can't pretend to understand the full extent of your verse although I've read it a couple of times. But your craftsmanship, as ever, is faultless. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
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I appreciate fully your introduction (to me) of this fine poet. I always love biographies and your notes are very helpful in adding more flesh on the bones here. I can't pretend to understand the full extent of your verse although I've read it a couple of times. But your craftsmanship, as ever, is faultless. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
Comment from Navada
I like your use of techniques such as internal rhyme and iambic pentameter in the creation of this tribute. Your imagery and language choices are also powerful and evocative.
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I like your use of techniques such as internal rhyme and iambic pentameter in the creation of this tribute. Your imagery and language choices are also powerful and evocative.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Really good I'm always impressed by the amount of effort you put into every one of these poems you write I can see in your notes as well you're well versed in many things therefore I can appreciate your work very much! As always there are no grammatical issues at all your work is perfect and well written thank you for sharing her work with us I hope you had a great Christmas and that you have a wonderful New year too all the best!
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Really good I'm always impressed by the amount of effort you put into every one of these poems you write I can see in your notes as well you're well versed in many things therefore I can appreciate your work very much! As always there are no grammatical issues at all your work is perfect and well written thank you for sharing her work with us I hope you had a great Christmas and that you have a wonderful New year too all the best!
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a very well written piece of rhyming poetry in which you have used a great deal of end rhymes and internal rhymes and much alliteration too. Excellent imagery throughout and very interesting and informative author's notes.
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This is a very well written piece of rhyming poetry in which you have used a great deal of end rhymes and internal rhymes and much alliteration too. Excellent imagery throughout and very interesting and informative author's notes.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2023
Comment from Julcia
An amazing amount of ability, contemplation and a huge knowledge base contributed to this
remarkable and significant poetry. I
salute you for creating it in all its nobility of words.
You must wonder as I do as to the
nature of the sad and disrespectful poet who had the need to trump your remarkable poem into its second placement status. Query. Who is this nervy and obtuse person. It is I. I do not ask for forgiveness. I say let the punishment fit the crime. Behead me, slowly, partially. Then feel free to inflict necessary much required
creative tortures.
Julcia
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An amazing amount of ability, contemplation and a huge knowledge base contributed to this
remarkable and significant poetry. I
salute you for creating it in all its nobility of words.
You must wonder as I do as to the
nature of the sad and disrespectful poet who had the need to trump your remarkable poem into its second placement status. Query. Who is this nervy and obtuse person. It is I. I do not ask for forgiveness. I say let the punishment fit the crime. Behead me, slowly, partially. Then feel free to inflict necessary much required
creative tortures.
Julcia
Comment Written 07-Mar-2023
