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Animal poetry and short stories

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Comment from nomi338
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Nevermore quoted the raven skinned man. If I have to return in a cockroach suit, leave me interred and let the bugs feast on my decaying corpse. That any day than to live for one second within the suit of a cockroach. I cannot possibly run fast enough to escape being stomped into the dust of the ground.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
    ... and ? the zipper is in th3 back, and sticks
Comment from Harry Smith
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This is another well written poem. I had to laugh at this one and the way you wrote this is superb. I like this type of poetry it is relaxing to read because it is not serious. Cleverly written!

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Harry, for the nice review.
reply by Harry Smith on 09-Feb-2018
    You are welcome!
Comment from Dawn Munro
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I hope and pray,
when it's my day,
there is no spray,
'cause that's no way
to go away.
(I imagine it's a pretty awful death...) Your poem, on the other hand, is thought-provoking. (Did you not read the story I wrote about my pet cockroach?) LOL.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
    I might have missed it. Is it still in your portfolio?
reply by Dawn Munro on 07-Feb-2018
    Yep, but it's not paying anymore, so don't worry about reviewing. If you DO want to read it sometime though, it's chapter 3 in a book called, "a few prose winners". The title is, "A Cockroach Called Harriet" (or something like that...LOL)
Comment from pbomar1115
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This creature sounds as if it has a never-ending life with a great personality that would make the average human desirous of it. Modeling ourselves after who and what we admire is a common habit we have.

Phillip

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
    The cockroach doesn?t care what is said about him, just that he got press.
reply by pbomar1115 on 06-Feb-2018
    Hahaha.

    Phillip
Comment from Debbie Pope
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What a fun poem! I love that you call them "cock-a-roaches." That is funny. And I like "poaching" and "proaching." You have such a clever, entertaining way with words. I want to read more.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Debbie
Comment from lyenochka
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Hmm. I think you should choose a walrus suit. Although this one may win awards on Halloween or perhaps the Terminix or Orkin guy could send him ahead to drum up some business.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
    Good idea.
Comment from judiverse
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Despite their longevity, I still wouldn't want to be a cockroach, and I certainly wouldn't want to return as one. What a fate that would be! Nice, playful tone in your poem. "Cock-a-roach" is great. Makes you think the cockroach is cocky because he has a long life. Great rhyme pattern. Cleverly done! judi

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Judi.
reply by judiverse on 05-Feb-2018
    You're very welcome. Write on! judi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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This is hilarious Bill, he he he, I've never seen a man dressed as a cockroach but I have seen many men who I have called a cockroach! fun lines well rhymed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Dolly, for the nice review. Bill
Comment from James H. Oldfield
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Very good, a fun poem but with a nice undertone of serious contemplation.

Stanza three, line three, I'd personally use 'whereas' (though obviously the meaning's the same either way). Your choice though, it's only personal preference.

Great job, take care.

-James

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
    Thanks, James, for the helpful review. Bill I will push that together as it should be.
Comment from Sherman541
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Very clever and funny. Coming back in a cockroach suit, would probably be better than just being a cockroach. As, one you would been seen wearing a suit and the other a pest to kill. :) We all need a silly poem from time to time. Sherman541

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Sherman, for the kind review. Bill
reply by Sherman541 on 05-Feb-2018
    you are welcome