This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "A Show of Defiance "Veronica is sent back again
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Sir John stared open-mouthed when he saw the cap float through the air, seemingly on its own. Shock filled his eyes as he stepped back, knocking into the bench the oil lamp was standing on. The subsequent explosion of shattered glass when it crashed to the floor, resulted in the flame hungrily licking at the pile of yellowed paper beside where it landed....Superb Sandra. I have continued to be enthralled by this story. You have such talent. Kindest regards wel done and best wishes Meia xx
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Sir John stared open-mouthed when he saw the cap float through the air, seemingly on its own. Shock filled his eyes as he stepped back, knocking into the bench the oil lamp was standing on. The subsequent explosion of shattered glass when it crashed to the floor, resulted in the flame hungrily licking at the pile of yellowed paper beside where it landed....Superb Sandra. I have continued to be enthralled by this story. You have such talent. Kindest regards wel done and best wishes Meia xx
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thank you again, Meia, for another of your lovely reviews. Your comments are really nice, thank you. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Ulla
Oh Dear, Sandra, this could have disastrous consequences. I don't hope the whole place is going up in flames. There's something about succession if I remember right. What a great new chapter. I love it. Hugs, Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Oh Dear, Sandra, this could have disastrous consequences. I don't hope the whole place is going up in flames. There's something about succession if I remember right. What a great new chapter. I love it. Hugs, Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thank you so very much, Ulla, for all those lovely stars and wonderful review! Yes, you remember right, my friend. Big hugs!! Sandra xxx
Comment from Ric Myworld
You get carried away writing, and I get carried away with reading your writing, so it makes for a very nice union and entertainment for me. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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You get carried away writing, and I get carried away with reading your writing, so it makes for a very nice union and entertainment for me. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much, Ric, for another wonderful review, and long may our union last!! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from royowen
Now there's a fire that's in the offing, what are we going to do now? Didn't the house belong to a succession of Sir John's? I particularly liked this episode and the time travelling Veronica. The four "minders" are obviously not perfect either, and are also in a quandary. Well done. Blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Now there's a fire that's in the offing, what are we going to do now? Didn't the house belong to a succession of Sir John's? I particularly liked this episode and the time travelling Veronica. The four "minders" are obviously not perfect either, and are also in a quandary. Well done. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Yes, indeed it was, Roy, you have passed today's memory test for the over fifty's, lol. Of course you haven't reached that age yet. :)) Yes, it is, but it's what will happen next that is the question. Thank you, my dear friend, for another of your lovely reviews. I'm glad you liked this part. Big hugs :) Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
Nice job here once again. The powers-that=be are struggling and not happy, and old Sir John's thrown a wobbly.. lol
do you think we could ask the time-lords for permission - couldn't help but think of Dr Who here...
'Twenty years? That's a long time. Do you like working here, Joe? - need closing speech marks here.
trying to match his mates show of bravado - mate's.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Hi Sandra,
Nice job here once again. The powers-that=be are struggling and not happy, and old Sir John's thrown a wobbly.. lol
do you think we could ask the time-lords for permission - couldn't help but think of Dr Who here...
'Twenty years? That's a long time. Do you like working here, Joe? - need closing speech marks here.
trying to match his mates show of bravado - mate's.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much, Gareth, for another of your lovely, helpful reviews. Thrown a wobbly... lol, I haven't used that expression in a long time! I must put that down for a future remark. lol. I've made the correction, thank you and a big hug for always being so nice. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from aryr
Oh my goodness, the ending was priceless, The shock of seeing Joe's cap floating was enough to cause Sir John to accidently break the lanterns and creating a fire. Would he and Joe be able to contain it? It was great having the Powers To Be in the first part of the chapter with their somewhat heated discussion about what to do. Then flipping over to the basement with Joe, Tod, Jake, Sir John, Gwendolyne and Veronica. I liked the action of Veronica, first supplying the baby's name and then with the cap. Fantastic job, well done, thanks.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Oh my goodness, the ending was priceless, The shock of seeing Joe's cap floating was enough to cause Sir John to accidently break the lanterns and creating a fire. Would he and Joe be able to contain it? It was great having the Powers To Be in the first part of the chapter with their somewhat heated discussion about what to do. Then flipping over to the basement with Joe, Tod, Jake, Sir John, Gwendolyne and Veronica. I liked the action of Veronica, first supplying the baby's name and then with the cap. Fantastic job, well done, thanks.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Hi Ali, thank you so much for this fabulous review! I'm so pleased you liked that part, I had fun with it. Will they be able to put the fire out? Hmm. We will see, lol. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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You are so welcome Sandra, every chapter has been great, they represent a rather creative mind. Keep writing, Alie. Hugs in return.
Comment from mbroyles2
I like how you built the suspense in this chapter.
All your characters fit so well into the story and blend well with each other.
This has a turn the page kind of feel.
Really good work!
Michael
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I like how you built the suspense in this chapter.
All your characters fit so well into the story and blend well with each other.
This has a turn the page kind of feel.
Really good work!
Michael
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Michael! You always give me such lovely reviews, it's just so nice to have your continued support. I'm sending a humongous hug for the 6 shiny stars! Thank you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from BermyBye50
Sandra
Two well written chapters. I enjoyed reading them both.
I did find a few minor grammatical and spelling errors (see below). I use a free software called Grammarly (works with current versions of MSWord) to check my work after completing a write. It is a tremendous help and a great tool for improving one's writing.
After we rushed though [through] to see what was happening, Gwendolyn and I looked anxiously down the stairs. (change though)
Kraid glared at him [,] but said nothing. He then folded his arms and leaned back in his chair, while Petro rested his elbows on the table and brought his hands together as if in prayer. (remove comma after him)
Leif glanced at his three friends and shook his head. 'Arguing amongst ourselves [,] isn't helping. I suggest we look at our options.' (remove comma after ourselves)
Jowell frowned and appeared to think on [about] it. (change on)
'You can't, but Joe can.' I hurried on down the stairs as the urgency of the situation intensified when the men struck out and knocked him onto [to] the floor. (change onto)
I rolled my eyes and tuned [turned] back to Joe. (change tuned)
I bit on my lower lip as my brain rushed into problem-solving mode. (remove on)
He frowned and scratched his forehead before a smug, relieved look spread over [across] his face. (change over)
Over all a great story that is quite captivating to read.
Cheers
Eugene
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Sandra
Two well written chapters. I enjoyed reading them both.
I did find a few minor grammatical and spelling errors (see below). I use a free software called Grammarly (works with current versions of MSWord) to check my work after completing a write. It is a tremendous help and a great tool for improving one's writing.
After we rushed though [through] to see what was happening, Gwendolyn and I looked anxiously down the stairs. (change though)
Kraid glared at him [,] but said nothing. He then folded his arms and leaned back in his chair, while Petro rested his elbows on the table and brought his hands together as if in prayer. (remove comma after him)
Leif glanced at his three friends and shook his head. 'Arguing amongst ourselves [,] isn't helping. I suggest we look at our options.' (remove comma after ourselves)
Jowell frowned and appeared to think on [about] it. (change on)
'You can't, but Joe can.' I hurried on down the stairs as the urgency of the situation intensified when the men struck out and knocked him onto [to] the floor. (change onto)
I rolled my eyes and tuned [turned] back to Joe. (change tuned)
I bit on my lower lip as my brain rushed into problem-solving mode. (remove on)
He frowned and scratched his forehead before a smug, relieved look spread over [across] his face. (change over)
Over all a great story that is quite captivating to read.
Cheers
Eugene
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review and for picking up all those errors! I don't know how many times I've read through it, but I certainly missed a lot! I've been back and made the corrections. I can't thank you enough for taking the time to do that, I appreciate it a lot. I'm pleased that even after finding all those mistakes, you still enjoyed reading my book, it's a pleasure to have you along and I hope you'll continue. Thank you! :) Sandra xx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Now we have a fire. I sure hope everybody is safe. I can imagine Sir John's face when he realized his sister was in the room. LOL He deserves a shaken up. Good write.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Now we have a fire. I sure hope everybody is safe. I can imagine Sir John's face when he realized his sister was in the room. LOL He deserves a shaken up. Good write.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Yes, he did need a bit of a shake. Thank you so very much, Barbara, for your lovely review and the 6 stars! I'm delighted you enjoyed this part. I'm looking forward to reading your next part, too. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
What a great ending! You certainly know how to make your readers anxious to read on. I'm also glad to hear that this Sir John has a softer side (according to Gwendolyn) Let's just hope Joe is saved by Veronica's quick thinking, and Sir John is convinced his sister is there!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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What a great ending! You certainly know how to make your readers anxious to read on. I'm also glad to hear that this Sir John has a softer side (according to Gwendolyn) Let's just hope Joe is saved by Veronica's quick thinking, and Sir John is convinced his sister is there!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Aww, thank you, Alexis for this really lovely review, and for those shiny six stars! I don't think Veronica can do anything about the fire, but we shall see!!!! LOL. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra x
