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Comment from pome lover
Marvin, this is fascinating. will have to find past chapters as am afraid I've forgotten what happened before. But what I read is good - "in the bank or in the back?" Is that your dry wit???? didn't know FS would assume things and put them on your story. that is weird.
I keep hitting something and deleting sentences after I've written them. no clue how that happens, but driving me crazy. aarrgghh
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
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Marvin, this is fascinating. will have to find past chapters as am afraid I've forgotten what happened before. But what I read is good - "in the bank or in the back?" Is that your dry wit???? didn't know FS would assume things and put them on your story. that is weird.
I keep hitting something and deleting sentences after I've written them. no clue how that happens, but driving me crazy. aarrgghh
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
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Thanks for reviewing.
I guess, 'In the back,' could be called: 'My dry wit.' It just seemed to make sense and to let the readers make of it what they will.
FS is probably not at fault but something in the posting process is confusing me. So you're having trouble also. Sorry to hear that.
FOW Play Chapter 2 is the only previous chapter I could find.
Thanks again. I'm really glad you liked it.
Marv
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks more statements about the interviewee, Detective took particulars and information about Mrs. Berkowicz. Trudy was shot; now to get health status of teller number two and the robber; interrogation was over; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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This speaks more statements about the interviewee, Detective took particulars and information about Mrs. Berkowicz. Trudy was shot; now to get health status of teller number two and the robber; interrogation was over; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I appreciate your thorough review.
Thanks for the compliments and the five stars.
Please look for the next chapter.
Marv
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The verbal structure of the story reminisces an investigation in progress over a crime committed.
The work highlights the degree of cooperative relations between witnesses and members of the police investigation team.
Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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The verbal structure of the story reminisces an investigation in progress over a crime committed.
The work highlights the degree of cooperative relations between witnesses and members of the police investigation team.
Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Thank you for reviewing this chapter. Your words are very encouraging.
Marv
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Remain Blessed!
Comment from apky
Although I only got on the story at this chapter, your story got my interest and pulled me in to read to the end.
You write in a fast pace, with great skill, and the changes of scenes are so well done that they propel the story forward even faster.
Well done, for this excellent piece of writing.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Although I only got on the story at this chapter, your story got my interest and pulled me in to read to the end.
You write in a fast pace, with great skill, and the changes of scenes are so well done that they propel the story forward even faster.
Well done, for this excellent piece of writing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Your review of this chapter is music to my ears. I hope you visit future chapters. You make the effort all worthwhile. Thanks for for your review and the five stars.
Marv
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A nice, tight little continuation here. A little touch of amusement with the questioning while Amanda does more of the leg work.
"Please sit over there, Mrs. Berkowicz," pointing to the swivel chair - should probably be a full stop for the end of dialogue here rather than a comma.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Hi there,
A nice, tight little continuation here. A little touch of amusement with the questioning while Amanda does more of the leg work.
"Please sit over there, Mrs. Berkowicz," pointing to the swivel chair - should probably be a full stop for the end of dialogue here rather than a comma.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Thank you. Your comments are always helpful and appreciated.
Marv
Comment from Ricky1024
"More Statements was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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"More Statements was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Ricky, for reviewing. I appreciate the many compliments.
I'm not certain what this sentence means, but apparently it's a good thing: Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks again.
Marv
