This House
A story in a poem51 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles Jmf4119
Excellent story loved your use of adjective,verbs and your adverb
You had me believing it actually happened
until I read your last line
Gert
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
Smiles Jmf4119
Excellent story loved your use of adjective,verbs and your adverb
You had me believing it actually happened
until I read your last line
Gert
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
-
Thank you Gert for your excellent review.
And I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I had fun writing it,
Blessings
Janet
-
Smiles Jmf4119 you are welcome
Gert
-
You are welcome Janet
Gert
Comment from Violet WolfChild
I love your imagery. I feel like I just got sucked into another world. Your story is enchanting and the image you chose to accompany it is perfect. Exceptional job.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
I love your imagery. I feel like I just got sucked into another world. Your story is enchanting and the image you chose to accompany it is perfect. Exceptional job.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
-
Thank you Violet for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about this old house. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery from the art work. Great story in a poem. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
This is a very well written poem about this old house. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery from the art work. Great story in a poem. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thank you Teri for your thoughtful review. I always look forward to hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend this is well written it may not have ended up as you wanted dean kuch style but you done your own thing and i enjoyed well done ... Jill
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
Yes my friend this is well written it may not have ended up as you wanted dean kuch style but you done your own thing and i enjoyed well done ... Jill
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thanks for Jill your thoughtful review. I always look forward to hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Bill Schott
This story poem, This House, presents some haunting images of an abandoned house that drips with the past life now gone. One can get nostalgic as old, familiar settings become the scenes of disrepair and neglect. It speaks to one's soul, I think.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
This story poem, This House, presents some haunting images of an abandoned house that drips with the past life now gone. One can get nostalgic as old, familiar settings become the scenes of disrepair and neglect. It speaks to one's soul, I think.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thanks for Bill your thoughtful review. I always look appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a dream walking through an old lonely huge house that scared a lot to break the dream; well said and well done the story. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
This speaks a dream walking through an old lonely huge house that scared a lot to break the dream; well said and well done the story. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thanks for your thoughtful review. I always look forward to hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from BermyBye50
Jmf4119
Your premise was good and execution excellent. A solid rhyming poem in its own right. It flows well and tells an interesting story.
Every stanza and line was creative and well written.
Eugene
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
Jmf4119
Your premise was good and execution excellent. A solid rhyming poem in its own right. It flows well and tells an interesting story.
Every stanza and line was creative and well written.
Eugene
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thanks for Eugene your thoughtful review. I appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Zinnia48
this story poem was great fun. I loved your colorful musings of the past, and the description of the creatures that lived there. The rhyme and rhythm gave it the feel of a children's story. I may try reading it to my grandson and see what he comes up with. Thanks! Caroline
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
this story poem was great fun. I loved your colorful musings of the past, and the description of the creatures that lived there. The rhyme and rhythm gave it the feel of a children's story. I may try reading it to my grandson and see what he comes up with. Thanks! Caroline
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thanks for Caroline your thoughtful review. I appreciate hearing from you. I hope your grandson finds it fun to hear.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a good entry for Share a Story in a Poem contest. Your photograph led my mind to imagine a spooky place that was even more enhanced by your verse. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
This is a good entry for Share a Story in a Poem contest. Your photograph led my mind to imagine a spooky place that was even more enhanced by your verse. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thanks for your thoughtful review. I appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Fabiha_N
This poem is very well-written! I really enjoyed reading this, I felt the tension rise up a little bit for me. It leaves a little mystery behind of who the men dressed in bright blue were, and who really lived in that house. I love the picture too, it adds to the creepiness! Great job, I think this is a great entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
This poem is very well-written! I really enjoyed reading this, I felt the tension rise up a little bit for me. It leaves a little mystery behind of who the men dressed in bright blue were, and who really lived in that house. I love the picture too, it adds to the creepiness! Great job, I think this is a great entry for the contest.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
-
Thanks for your thoughtful review. I appreciate hearing from you.
Blessings
Janet