"Wrong Turn"
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Disturbing Disturbance"My thoughts on past and present experiences.
8 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
Quite a powerful description of raw emotion and ever present memory. So sad when loved ones are taken too soon, and a child worst of all. This is a good way to let out your feelings.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
Quite a powerful description of raw emotion and ever present memory. So sad when loved ones are taken too soon, and a child worst of all. This is a good way to let out your feelings.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this one ftogbook.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment from mermaids
Those who have lost children can relate to your words. I like how at the end of your poem you ask God why? It is a very valid question and many can relate. Excellent poetic form.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
Those who have lost children can relate to your words. I like how at the end of your poem you ask God why? It is a very valid question and many can relate. Excellent poetic form.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks again Elaine.
Ricky...
Comment from estory
I think this was a terrific example of minimalist form. The repeating phrases, incomplete, stuck in a groove, created a sense of frustration, emotional frustration, at trying to come to terms with this terrible tragedy. We get glimpses of it, very surreal, very nightmarish. and then you can't seem to make sense of it. All the sentences ending in mid air were well executed. I thought this was a terrific experimental piece estory
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
I think this was a terrific example of minimalist form. The repeating phrases, incomplete, stuck in a groove, created a sense of frustration, emotional frustration, at trying to come to terms with this terrible tragedy. We get glimpses of it, very surreal, very nightmarish. and then you can't seem to make sense of it. All the sentences ending in mid air were well executed. I thought this was a terrific experimental piece estory
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review and time Estory.
Dr Ricky 1024
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
"How much does a man have to take?"
"How much can a man be expelled?"
"And, how much does a man...
"Does a man have to take?"
"Forever to forsake?"
That is the question
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
"How much does a man have to take?"
"How much can a man be expelled?"
"And, how much does a man...
"Does a man have to take?"
"Forever to forsake?"
That is the question
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thanks Barb I know anybody would understand what's going on with this it would be you dr. Ricky 1024
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Dr. Ricky;
It is disheartening to read more details about your ordeal. I do hope writing about this is helping you. I'm glad you were able to donate organs - knowing a part of him is living on must help,
I will continue to pray for you,
~patty~
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
Hi, Dr. Ricky;
It is disheartening to read more details about your ordeal. I do hope writing about this is helping you. I'm glad you were able to donate organs - knowing a part of him is living on must help,
I will continue to pray for you,
~patty~
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review and time again Mustang Sally.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment from Dumbledor
Short but dramatic writing, almost as if the writer is suffering so much it is hard for him to breadth. Brilliant capturing of atmosphere..sounds and feelings. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
Short but dramatic writing, almost as if the writer is suffering so much it is hard for him to breadth. Brilliant capturing of atmosphere..sounds and feelings. Nicely done.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thanks Dumbledore.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the remembrance of moments when disturbing of disturbance occurred and a death took place; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
This speaks the remembrance of moments when disturbing of disturbance occurred and a death took place; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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And thanks for your wonderful review and time again Alcrearor.
Dr Ricky 1024
Comment from Trudi Perkins
Yes indeed WHY? We'll never understand why. Well written and I really enjoyed this poem. Your grieving through your poetry as much as I am.Take care of yourself God bless !
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
Yes indeed WHY? We'll never understand why. Well written and I really enjoyed this poem. Your grieving through your poetry as much as I am.Take care of yourself God bless !
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thanks...
Trudi
And, yes...
I do as you....
My Condolences...
Ricky....