I Gave you soup
A fictional tale about lending a helping hand.25 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
I love the title of your poem
and the artwork your choose It is a perfect match
I love the moral of your poem
You see I can truly relate to only through my family
This is what I call a food for thought poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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I love the title of your poem
and the artwork your choose It is a perfect match
I love the moral of your poem
You see I can truly relate to only through my family
This is what I call a food for thought poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you, I am overjoyed by your wonderfully kind and generous comments.
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I don't know what to say, I just tell it like it is.
Cookie
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
Nice nick -- it's close to my real name. Yeah, I can see that. No thanks. I moved and received no thanks from a shut-in who I used to cook holiday meals for. I learned from that experience -- she took advantage, but I'm still glad I did it.
Maybe you could use larger font -- I know some people on here have trouble with reading. Okay, TC, :)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Hello,
Nice nick -- it's close to my real name. Yeah, I can see that. No thanks. I moved and received no thanks from a shut-in who I used to cook holiday meals for. I learned from that experience -- she took advantage, but I'm still glad I did it.
Maybe you could use larger font -- I know some people on here have trouble with reading. Okay, TC, :)
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you, I appreciate your great comments. It would be very hard for me to forget how much I had done for someone who proved to be so ungrateful.
Comment from Pantygynt
This is an excellent example of how a syllabic rather than a metrical rhythm should work. The eight or nine syllable line alternates with the four syllable line as the poem makes its point. When we use others as a ladder on the way up we really should draw them up with us rather than the ladder.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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This is an excellent example of how a syllabic rather than a metrical rhythm should work. The eight or nine syllable line alternates with the four syllable line as the poem makes its point. When we use others as a ladder on the way up we really should draw them up with us rather than the ladder.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your wonderful comments. I feared that I would be criticized for using this scheme. I am gratified by your assessment. I will definitely try this again.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. It is sad to think how quickly people forget you when they got fame and fortune about the help they got from friends who give them the opportunity but stay behind to see them grow.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. It is sad to think how quickly people forget you when they got fame and fortune about the help they got from friends who give them the opportunity but stay behind to see them grow.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Looks and talent have rarely ever been enough to garner success, the support we receive from friends, family and sometimes an anonymous stranger are what is needed to get to the top. Failure to recognize this will make for an awkward reunion when you meet them as you experience your downward arc.
Comment from royowen
I think ambition and desire will override any thought of thankfulness and gratitude. So in this, the obsession of endeavouring to make it, to become something would be overwhelming. Excellent scribing, this is a great example of graciousness in the face cynicism.written in articulate abcb rhymed quatrains, well. Done, good job, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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I think ambition and desire will override any thought of thankfulness and gratitude. So in this, the obsession of endeavouring to make it, to become something would be overwhelming. Excellent scribing, this is a great example of graciousness in the face cynicism.written in articulate abcb rhymed quatrains, well. Done, good job, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you Brother Roy. You always offer Thanks Dean. Something I have noticed about thbalanced and thoughtful comments.
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Well done
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, Nomi.
A little poetic chicken soup for the soul here, I see.
It's always best to acknowledge in some way those who have helped you achieve fame, if you're fortunate enough to have done so.
Never forget "The Little People".
Thanks for sharing.
~Dean
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Hello, Nomi.
A little poetic chicken soup for the soul here, I see.
It's always best to acknowledge in some way those who have helped you achieve fame, if you're fortunate enough to have done so.
Never forget "The Little People".
Thanks for sharing.
~Dean
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you Dean. Something I have noticed about the better writers on this site, they always acknowledge the help and input they receive from others on the site. This is a valuable lesson on how to remain humble and gain wisdom at the same time. I hope some of the younger, newer writers are paying attention.
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I agree, Nomi.
You're very welcome.
~Dean
Comment from MissMerri
A great little tale and nicely told in rhyme and meter. I liked that the speaker never lost his giving heart or let bitterness creep in as some might when unappreciated. He cheered his friend on anyway and remained ready to help again when needed. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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A great little tale and nicely told in rhyme and meter. I liked that the speaker never lost his giving heart or let bitterness creep in as some might when unappreciated. He cheered his friend on anyway and remained ready to help again when needed. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thank you Miss Merri, is that not the point? Nothing is gained by being bitter and demanding thank yous for every act of kindness. Your secret acts of kindness will be rewarded in public. By the one who sees and knows all that you do.
Comment from c_lucas
Life is not always good,
Nor always bad.
Living a day at a time
Will help you to see the light.
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Life is not always good,
Nor always bad.
Living a day at a time
Will help you to see the light.
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Hey Charlie, thank you for your generously kind comments.
Comment from Violet WolfChild
Wonderful subject choice. It's sad but true; people often overlook the ones who were there when they were at their lowest. I didn't notice any flaws and your rhymes flow well. Great job.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Wonderful subject choice. It's sad but true; people often overlook the ones who were there when they were at their lowest. I didn't notice any flaws and your rhymes flow well. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you Violet. I greatly appreciate your generous review comments.
Comment from frierajac
And you are stating that it may again recur that is often the case. It is a clear statement of a slice of life. It is as if you are just walking by and see someone on a park bench having a bad day and stroll up for a chat and ...a poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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And you are stating that it may again recur that is often the case. It is a clear statement of a slice of life. It is as if you are just walking by and see someone on a park bench having a bad day and stroll up for a chat and ...a poem.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your comments. I try as much as possible to write about real situations that involve genuine feelings. I don't go in much for fantasy, unless written by someone else.
