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I ponder93 total reviews
Comment from MelB
Hello, very nice aabb rhyme and rhythm. Great use of the question-statement format. The ending is my favorite - hope sings and healing wings.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
Hello, very nice aabb rhyme and rhythm. Great use of the question-statement format. The ending is my favorite - hope sings and healing wings.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thanks Mel, for this great review and comments,
Comment from sunnilicious
It's not something I want to think about... But all this space talk in the news forces us to think about the end. I hope life of the human could live forever. Well thought out poem. Creative. Spiritual. You should add a bible quote. Still, great work :)
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
It's not something I want to think about... But all this space talk in the news forces us to think about the end. I hope life of the human could live forever. Well thought out poem. Creative. Spiritual. You should add a bible quote. Still, great work :)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thanks Alicia, for this great review and comments,
Comment from TPAC
Beautiful views, which makes its own music at heart. I do have a suggestion:
I still ponder how the world is to end;
will rescue come?
A thought, illuminating the double usage of will.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
Beautiful views, which makes its own music at heart. I do have a suggestion:
I still ponder how the world is to end;
will rescue come?
A thought, illuminating the double usage of will.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for this great review and comments,
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your philosophical response to this prompt. Your rhymed couplets in these rhythmic quatrains are very effective and your questions are thought provoking. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
I admired your philosophical response to this prompt. Your rhymed couplets in these rhythmic quatrains are very effective and your questions are thought provoking. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thanks Joan, for this great review and comments,
Comment from Tacticz
I enjoyed the short yet strong words you delivered; the lead up to the question of divine rescue. The only negative feedback I have is in the plain font. I feel this poem would stand out more with a stronger font style. Great work regardless!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
I enjoyed the short yet strong words you delivered; the lead up to the question of divine rescue. The only negative feedback I have is in the plain font. I feel this poem would stand out more with a stronger font style. Great work regardless!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Thanks, for this great review and comments,
Comment from mermaids
You have a smooth flow of words and lines that adds to your poetic form. There is almost a musical sound here in your poetic form. You last line is fitting and hopeful, perhaps with healing in His wings. This is a wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
You have a smooth flow of words and lines that adds to your poetic form. There is almost a musical sound here in your poetic form. You last line is fitting and hopeful, perhaps with healing in His wings. This is a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks, for this great review and comments,
Comment from RGstar
A statement, yes, yet, elaborate and not without faith or wish, in which we are as one in thought. I guess we will continue with hope, but I am not sure, in any lifetime, if we will ever have that wish. Man too selfish.
Good luck in the competition.
RGstar
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
A statement, yes, yet, elaborate and not without faith or wish, in which we are as one in thought. I guess we will continue with hope, but I am not sure, in any lifetime, if we will ever have that wish. Man too selfish.
Good luck in the competition.
RGstar
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks RG, for this great review and comments,
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like the thought provoking nature of your work. There truly is to much hate in the world. This poem gives the reader many things to ponder and seek to change where change is needed. Very well done.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
I like the thought provoking nature of your work. There truly is to much hate in the world. This poem gives the reader many things to ponder and seek to change where change is needed. Very well done.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks Jeff, for this great review and comments,
Comment from Rubylou
There is so much food for thought within these two stanzas.
I often wonder how the world will end as you ponder if a rescue will indeed intercede.
Hope in His wings (to come and save us from ourselves- ) A true thought that should encourage us to rethink our own existence.
Wonderfully written,
Rubylou
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
There is so much food for thought within these two stanzas.
I often wonder how the world will end as you ponder if a rescue will indeed intercede.
Hope in His wings (to come and save us from ourselves- ) A true thought that should encourage us to rethink our own existence.
Wonderfully written,
Rubylou
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks Rubylou for this wonderful review and lovely comments, and amazing stars,
Comment from Bichon
Beautiful poem. I think we can all agree on this topic, it would be great if we could all live in perfect harmony and love. Good luck in the contest.
Chloe
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
Beautiful poem. I think we can all agree on this topic, it would be great if we could all live in perfect harmony and love. Good luck in the contest.
Chloe
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks Chloe, for this great review and comments,