A Po-em Old
A Villanelle47 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
cool meta poem about poetry love the rhyming scheme and the repetition
of the last line "a magic gift with music to behold" throughout packs a powerful punch
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cool meta poem about poetry love the rhyming scheme and the repetition
of the last line "a magic gift with music to behold" throughout packs a powerful punch
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from shelley kaye
i love the villanelle!
this one was great and the repeating lines were perfect
great work and congrats on the poem of the month!
thank you for sharing
shelley ð?¦?
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i love the villanelle!
this one was great and the repeating lines were perfect
great work and congrats on the poem of the month!
thank you for sharing
shelley ð?¦?
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Boogienights
I enjoyed your poem so much. I find this to be a very challenging type of poem to write, but you have mastered this perfectly. I also like to hear words of praise heaped upon the poets of this world.
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I enjoyed your poem so much. I find this to be a very challenging type of poem to write, but you have mastered this perfectly. I also like to hear words of praise heaped upon the poets of this world.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from JT traveller
A complex villanelle executed well. The repetition reinforces the inner message of the poem. Very lyrical with good meter and lovely word choice.
Well done, Jacqueline
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A complex villanelle executed well. The repetition reinforces the inner message of the poem. Very lyrical with good meter and lovely word choice.
Well done, Jacqueline
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your villanelle was done well, ee. It's a complex style that
relied on repeating lines that added to, and not just repeated,
the whole poem. Your lines fit in smoothly in all verses to
carry the message. Your topic was well0expressed. Yes, those
po-ems of old had much lasting influence on the literature of
the world.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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Your villanelle was done well, ee. It's a complex style that
relied on repeating lines that added to, and not just repeated,
the whole poem. Your lines fit in smoothly in all verses to
carry the message. Your topic was well0expressed. Yes, those
po-ems of old had much lasting influence on the literature of
the world.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is lovely and has a classic feel to it. I think it would be a great villanelle to introduce what a villanelle is about. I liked these lines: Perfection flows from words these poets told
In metronomic splendor like a chime;
and also
These songbird troubadours sing out their rhyme;
Great form.
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This is lovely and has a classic feel to it. I think it would be a great villanelle to introduce what a villanelle is about. I liked these lines: Perfection flows from words these poets told
In metronomic splendor like a chime;
and also
These songbird troubadours sing out their rhyme;
Great form.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your mostly tercets format and your rhyme scheme. Your repeats are effective, and I especially enjoyed your "chime" simile and focus on "music". Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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I admired your mostly tercets format and your rhyme scheme. Your repeats are effective, and I especially enjoyed your "chime" simile and focus on "music". Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Hi Joan. The Villanelle is a difficult form to get right and I never know if I have succeeded but I keep trying. Glad you enjoyed and I thank you Joan. Yours, tom
Comment from esacony
When I read a poem I don't look at in terms of structure, although this one is presented perfectly. I consider content. There is also the implied message hidden in chosen words that qualify it in my mind.
"Sophisticated language ripe and bold, applied with master crafted strokes sublime."
Fluidic phrasing defining the extraordinary content of older poems and doing so with sophistication.
"In metronomic splendor like a chime."
Great descriptive that rolls off the tongue and in its own way resembles musical rythme.
Interestingly enough, this tribute to poems of old contains within its depths the 'gold' it so describes.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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When I read a poem I don't look at in terms of structure, although this one is presented perfectly. I consider content. There is also the implied message hidden in chosen words that qualify it in my mind.
"Sophisticated language ripe and bold, applied with master crafted strokes sublime."
Fluidic phrasing defining the extraordinary content of older poems and doing so with sophistication.
"In metronomic splendor like a chime."
Great descriptive that rolls off the tongue and in its own way resembles musical rythme.
Interestingly enough, this tribute to poems of old contains within its depths the 'gold' it so describes.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much my friend. I am glad you enjoyed it. tom
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Tom;
Such a lovely poem. With each line building on the next, and the following stanza revealing more and more layers, I felt this poem deep in my heart.
Poetry is indeed an ancient art; man has tried to express themselves with rhythm and rhyme through the ages. I loved everything about this post,
Wonderful,
~patty~
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Hi, Tom;
Such a lovely poem. With each line building on the next, and the following stanza revealing more and more layers, I felt this poem deep in my heart.
Poetry is indeed an ancient art; man has tried to express themselves with rhythm and rhyme through the ages. I loved everything about this post,
Wonderful,
~patty~
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Hi Patty. Thank you so very much for this exceptional review. I am, as always, honored. tom
Comment from Pantygynt
An excellent villanelle this. Not the easiest of forms to master but you have certainly done that with this. To take two line separated in your original and glue them together:
"These songbird troubadours sing out their rhyme;
In metronomic splendor like a chime;"
It is the "metronomic splendour" that makes this, and renders the repeated lines perfectly natural.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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An excellent villanelle this. Not the easiest of forms to master but you have certainly done that with this. To take two line separated in your original and glue them together:
"These songbird troubadours sing out their rhyme;
In metronomic splendor like a chime;"
It is the "metronomic splendour" that makes this, and renders the repeated lines perfectly natural.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Hi my friend. That is my favorite line also. I thank you very much for this outstanding review. I am, as always, honored. tom
