A Po-em Old
A Villanelle47 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, Easy, you nailed it with your poems of old wrapped in gold. This poem speaks of the age-old tradition of writing poetry as if it mattered. The people of olden times read profusely poetry that sang the verses as if they were gems. And if that wasn't enough they held it dearly to their hearts. Thank you for sharing this lovely tale of the olden times!
Jesse
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Well, Easy, you nailed it with your poems of old wrapped in gold. This poem speaks of the age-old tradition of writing poetry as if it mattered. The people of olden times read profusely poetry that sang the verses as if they were gems. And if that wasn't enough they held it dearly to their hearts. Thank you for sharing this lovely tale of the olden times!
Jesse
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
Comment from Frank Malley
For metric reasons, I would change line 10 to 'As summer heat becomes winter cold.' I would also consider making line 1 (it recurs) ' A po-em old is verses in gold.' It's easier if I mention suggestions when they're catalyzed by reading. This poem, "A Po-em Old," uses a form whose name I can't recall. It has a strict a-b-a rhyme scheme, and a metric design in iambs. Each stanza uses a two lines of pentatmeter separated by a line of tetrameter. It's a lovely poem that celebrates the history and music of poetry.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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For metric reasons, I would change line 10 to 'As summer heat becomes winter cold.' I would also consider making line 1 (it recurs) ' A po-em old is verses in gold.' It's easier if I mention suggestions when they're catalyzed by reading. This poem, "A Po-em Old," uses a form whose name I can't recall. It has a strict a-b-a rhyme scheme, and a metric design in iambs. Each stanza uses a two lines of pentatmeter separated by a line of tetrameter. It's a lovely poem that celebrates the history and music of poetry.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2023
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You do not understand meter Frank. Look up iambics and then reread your review. I think you will see your error. Thank you. easy
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You might look up "scansion' also. This scans perfectly. Give it a try.
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I chose the description iambic because in most of your poem's lines, soft/loud is the pattern. I also noted, although number of feet present in a line can be altered by inflection, that most of the lines were five feet, while some were four. We apparently understand meter differently. Be well. Frank.
Comment from Wendy G
Very different as it celebrates the power of words and the poetic gift. Verses wrapped in gold: great image. Very nice musical theme running throughout when all words work together to bring pleasure, uplift and a harmony as does music.
Wendy
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Very different as it celebrates the power of words and the poetic gift. Verses wrapped in gold: great image. Very nice musical theme running throughout when all words work together to bring pleasure, uplift and a harmony as does music.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
Comment from Sanku
A brilliant villanelle!.First and third line of the first stanza is repeated to create a fluid refrain. The rhymes are smooth and and natural .A very well written po-em about poem.
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A brilliant villanelle!.First and third line of the first stanza is repeated to create a fluid refrain. The rhymes are smooth and and natural .A very well written po-em about poem.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
Comment from Julie Lau
Extremely clever rhyming in this perfectly crafted work; scanning is also flawless. Do you find it easy, everett? Haha, jokes aside, all the best for securing poem of the month with this masterpiece.
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Extremely clever rhyming in this perfectly crafted work; scanning is also flawless. Do you find it easy, everett? Haha, jokes aside, all the best for securing poem of the month with this masterpiece.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2023
Comment from Tom Horonzy
If you say so, who am I to argue? Though there is not definition for po-em. And one thing I notice is how many lines written here begin with 'a'. Has the title something to do with that?
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If you say so, who am I to argue? Though there is not definition for po-em. And one thing I notice is how many lines written here begin with 'a'. Has the title something to do with that?
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine description of poems that soothe and are magically infused with gold and I love the old poets words that still ring true today, a magical Villanelle, love Dolly x
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A fine description of poems that soothe and are magically infused with gold and I love the old poets words that still ring true today, a magical Villanelle, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was wonderful. It was very lyrical. I could see gold wrapping in a fluid motion around and through a steady stream of words. You kept this so rhythmic and the pace let me enjoy each stanza. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
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This was wonderful. It was very lyrical. I could see gold wrapping in a fluid motion around and through a steady stream of words. You kept this so rhythmic and the pace let me enjoy each stanza. Thank you for posting. Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent villanelle with stellar rhymes and the repeating line worked beautifully into each stanza.
Very well done and good luck in The contest
Blessings
J
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Excellent villanelle with stellar rhymes and the repeating line worked beautifully into each stanza.
Very well done and good luck in The contest
Blessings
J
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
Comment from Brandon Clark
Simply excellent! You're plainly a very talented poem and I enjoyed reading it. There is nothing I could suggest that would improve this!
Best of luck in the contest, you have a great contender with this one!!
Brandon
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Simply excellent! You're plainly a very talented poem and I enjoyed reading it. There is nothing I could suggest that would improve this!
Best of luck in the contest, you have a great contender with this one!!
Brandon
Comment Written 04-Apr-2023
