Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

very intricate form style indeed
your rhyme scheme is really excellent yet still
you keep the flow and continuity of the story which is actually very interesting and picturesque with wonderful word imagery
fine poetry
have a smiley day

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Glad you liked it so much. Thanks.

Joan

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

DP,
You did a great job with your duo rhyme potlatch challenge. I enjoyed reading it. Your message is great & really stands out. Your lines flow well with great rhymes. Good job on the style. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks for all the positive comments. I appreciate the generous rating.


Joan

Comment from apky

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your very well-written rhyme. It included some great rhymes that harmonised rather well. I'm afraid I can't review this in terms of techniques and the like - I'm no poet, just a wordy prose girl. But I love reading poetry.

Thanks for making my Sunday afternoon "poetic".

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Glad you liked it. Appreciate the words of encouragement

dragonpoet

Comment from BermyBye50

Excellent

Joan

Thank you for sharing this excellent write. I like how its flows. Its a perfect example of a duo rhymed poem. I hope to aspire to follow your example.

All the best,

Eugene

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Eugene

No thanks necessary. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review.

Joan

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Duo Rhyme with great rhymes that worked quite well. If I remnber correctly I think each line shoukd have eight syllables right through. Your poem have different sykkables in each line although there are a few lines with eight syllables.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018

Thanks for the review I will see if i can get the meter right.

Joan

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

A profound one, DragonPoet! I like how it starts with an individual, personal perspective on light and darkness and then it ends with a more universal one that takes us into space seeing the relationship with Earth and the sun and moon. Great use of rhyming, alliteration and assonance in this.

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thank you for the thorough review. I appreciate all the stars.

dp

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A clever play on words here and your poem has a special message, the sky at night can be a beautiful thing to watch, especially when the moon is bright, an enjoyable poem, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Glad you enjoyed it , Dolly. Thanks for the comments.

Joan

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks even a spell of light removes the scare feeling at darkness of night; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this poem with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thank you very much for your review and generous rating.

dp

Comment from James H. Oldfield

Excellent

Really good, and I couldn't agree more. Looking up to a clear night-sky always gives me a sense of perspective, whatever's going on.

Wonderful wording, and a very well-delivered message.

Great job.

Take care.

-James

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks for your kind words James.

Joan

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

There is a good idea behind this write , there is hope and firm belief that not even dark is too big to scare. How beautifully you painted the sky.

Danny Jock

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018

Thanks, Danny for the kind words and generous rating. Glad you liked it

Joan