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Comment from Sankey
Good chapter, old mate. So glad you defined the lingo. Could tell it was full of "special" terminology, hehe. Looking forward to where this goes. Can't remember if I read the last chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Good chapter, old mate. So glad you defined the lingo. Could tell it was full of "special" terminology, hehe. Looking forward to where this goes. Can't remember if I read the last chapter.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the tale. I feel the Western lingo adds more depth to the storyline and do invite you to follow along as the tale unfolds.
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Yeah I like the Western lingo too adds a lot to the story puts you right there.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I haven't seen you post anything for awhile. What happened to the Lyrics Make the song Club. Just as I joined it disappeared, along with your monthly contests. I am posting a novel, The West it's the story of a man traveling through the old west. I will continue to read your story. So far, it's very interesting.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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I haven't seen you post anything for awhile. What happened to the Lyrics Make the song Club. Just as I joined it disappeared, along with your monthly contests. I am posting a novel, The West it's the story of a man traveling through the old west. I will continue to read your story. So far, it's very interesting.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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I did not renew the contest for January. Perhaps in the near future I will. I reviewed the first chapter of The West. Appreciate the comments and support you have offered for my tale. Westerns are a new genre for me, although one I have always wanted to attempt.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I enjoyed reading your next chapter. I love the names Choc'late Charlie and Sidemeat and I like the interplay between your characters. You are developing them well. Once again, my only real suggestion is to keep your jargon consistent. I would not use it in the descriptions (like Alabamy)--just in the direct dialogue or thoughts. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I enjoyed reading your next chapter. I love the names Choc'late Charlie and Sidemeat and I like the interplay between your characters. You are developing them well. Once again, my only real suggestion is to keep your jargon consistent. I would not use it in the descriptions (like Alabamy)--just in the direct dialogue or thoughts. Good luck.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Debbie, thank you for your insightful review. After considering your recommendations, I have rewritten certain portions of this section because I agree with your assessment. Very helpful indeed.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Another good chapter. I like how you are sticking to the jargon.
Well done and well told.
Again, looking forward to the next part.
Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Another good chapter. I like how you are sticking to the jargon.
Well done and well told.
Again, looking forward to the next part.
Sharon
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Sharon, appreciate this well written review. The next part of the tale will be posted within a couple days. I invite you to be on the lookout for its appearance.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
And the continuation part continues ... this is well said, well done, there is a catch in the beginning, plot is smooth with the flow, few but bold characters, cease fire.
Go On Do Writing - DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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And the continuation part continues ... this is well said, well done, there is a catch in the beginning, plot is smooth with the flow, few but bold characters, cease fire.
Go On Do Writing - DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Alcreator Litt Dear, appreciate the review. The Western genre is one I have always wanted to attempt. This I my first effort along those lines. I invite you to follow along as the tale progresses.
Comment from apky
First off, apologies for thinking some of the words were nits. I didn't realise it was western jargon until I came to your author's notes.
Having said that, this is another of your stories that is well written, entertaining and intriguing at the same time, and sure to pull a reader in and keep them reading. I look forward to reading some more chapters of this.
And it's good to have you back writing again, Brett. Missed your writing for a while.
'cause the creek that runned(ran; but it could be that "runned" is an accepted American English) along the edge of the ranch was dry.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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First off, apologies for thinking some of the words were nits. I didn't realise it was western jargon until I came to your author's notes.
Having said that, this is another of your stories that is well written, entertaining and intriguing at the same time, and sure to pull a reader in and keep them reading. I look forward to reading some more chapters of this.
And it's good to have you back writing again, Brett. Missed your writing for a while.
'cause the creek that runned(ran; but it could be that "runned" is an accepted American English) along the edge of the ranch was dry.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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apky, thanks for the review. The Western genre is one I have always wanted to attempt. This is my first effort along those lines. I used "runned" because it is Old West jargon. I invite you to follow along as this tale progresses.
Comment from misscookie
Wow,
I have not felt this relaxes reading a story like this in a long time
it was very refreshing at least so far. Loll
Then again I don't read to many long stories due to my attention spam since my stroke.
It reminded me of movies shoot on the farm when I was a little girl
That was when every thing was slow and simple
I miss those day
Thank you for sharing Cookie
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Wow,
I have not felt this relaxes reading a story like this in a long time
it was very refreshing at least so far. Loll
Then again I don't read to many long stories due to my attention spam since my stroke.
It reminded me of movies shoot on the farm when I was a little girl
That was when every thing was slow and simple
I miss those day
Thank you for sharing Cookie
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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miss cookie, thank you very much for your wonderful review. Glad you enjoyed my little tale. Yes, those simple days were indeed the very best of all.
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If we could only turn back the hands of time.
Cookie
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miss cookie, I'd be the first.
Comment from Ricky1024
Adjective Content-*****
Objective Content-*****
Pronunciation-******
Pronouncements and Descriptive Measures-*****
Grammar-******
Complete Synopsis-*****
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Adjective Content-*****
Objective Content-*****
Pronunciation-******
Pronouncements and Descriptive Measures-*****
Grammar-******
Complete Synopsis-*****
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Ricky, like your "stars". They are a different way of posting them. Glad you enjoyed this portion of this tale. Much appreciated.
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Tom shut me down so I apologize you didn't like the way I do my reviews he said they're cut and paste it so I went back to my old reviewing schedule with the Stars
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Ricky, I LIKED the way you did your stars. Unique and with such a flair. Should you review my writings again, do use them. I will be looking for them.
