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Comment from lyenochka
I do get the feeling of impressionism in the poem. We start with the vase of flowers which is cast in the impressionism of the time past and memory complete with impressions of flowers, sunset and harpsichord music. The second part is even more ethereal with hands and feet described as part of a dance and focus on the spaces between the branches and drifting to "worlds away."
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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I do get the feeling of impressionism in the poem. We start with the vase of flowers which is cast in the impressionism of the time past and memory complete with impressions of flowers, sunset and harpsichord music. The second part is even more ethereal with hands and feet described as part of a dance and focus on the spaces between the branches and drifting to "worlds away."
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for the five star review and for your wonderful comments supporting this piece. I am so glad you liked it and that the impressionism I was trying to capture in language, came through. I wanted to capture Renoir's impressionistic style by creating an abstract moment, a moment in between times, in between relationships and emotions. estory
Comment from Asem.inspirations
An abstraction of experience, an emotion rather than action. estory
Good morning again, estory: I understand what you are saying above but to me this poem feels so active. It is like a warm set up for the ballet about to happen. The words dance so lovely on the page and when I read it I imagined some classical music playing softly in the background. Lovely.
I did see your other post - the out of this world story - I got half way through reading it and then things got real at work. I will have to read it later because I am sick with flu symptoms right now. I reach out tomorrow.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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An abstraction of experience, an emotion rather than action. estory
Good morning again, estory: I understand what you are saying above but to me this poem feels so active. It is like a warm set up for the ballet about to happen. The words dance so lovely on the page and when I read it I imagined some classical music playing softly in the background. Lovely.
I did see your other post - the out of this world story - I got half way through reading it and then things got real at work. I will have to read it later because I am sick with flu symptoms right now. I reach out tomorrow.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your excellent review and your comments supporting this poem. I love impressionist art, and this one was inspired by the Renoir paintings at the Met. Always one of my favorite places in the world. It was fun to write. Hope you feel better. I hear the flu is really bad in NY. 5,000 people in the hospital, or something like that. You can't fool around with it. Take care of yourself. estory
Comment from Debbie Pope
Fine piece of impressionism. Truly. I think you met your goal of creating dreamlike images. Flashes of beautiful verse. Glimpses of light. I am glad you are back from your hiatus. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Fine piece of impressionism. Truly. I think you met your goal of creating dreamlike images. Flashes of beautiful verse. Glimpses of light. I am glad you are back from your hiatus. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and all your comments supporting this poem, I am glad you enjoyed it and that the dream effect came through. Impressionism is about creating an abstraction of image, representing emotional responses to moments. This poem was inspired of course by Renoir's paintings at the met in NY. estory
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about sense of impressionism, a dream world of glimpses of moments; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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This speaks about sense of impressionism, a dream world of glimpses of moments; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem estory
Comment from robyn corum
E.,
I loved, loved, loved the first poem. It absolutely did everything you were hoping and more, in my opinion. I got all the impressionistic feelings. Wonderful!!
But the second poem just left me with questions. (sorry!) I didn't understand what you were saying or any of the images you were describing.
The five is for the first poem alone. Thanks!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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E.,
I loved, loved, loved the first poem. It absolutely did everything you were hoping and more, in my opinion. I got all the impressionistic feelings. Wonderful!!
But the second poem just left me with questions. (sorry!) I didn't understand what you were saying or any of the images you were describing.
The five is for the first poem alone. Thanks!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your wonderful comments and suggestions supporting this poem. I think the first part is also my favorite, the second part came up a little short. It is about an ethereal moment, a moment of a dancer distracted from her dancing by other images in the room. I agree that the large vase of flowers is stronger. estory
Comment from MSJVClarke
It was a pleasant poem. Your notes left nothing to the interpretation of the reader as you explained it explicitly. A well spoken point of the past and future all wrapped in one imagination.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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It was a pleasant poem. Your notes left nothing to the interpretation of the reader as you explained it explicitly. A well spoken point of the past and future all wrapped in one imagination.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the excellent review of this poem, and your comments supporting this. I am glad you enjoyed it estory
Comment from Ulla
Hi estory, I quite liked your free verse poem, which is divided into two different images. You're trying to create images in words what the Impressionists did with their paint brushes. Not an easy task, but I think you've done a great attempt. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Hi estory, I quite liked your free verse poem, which is divided into two different images. You're trying to create images in words what the Impressionists did with their paint brushes. Not an easy task, but I think you've done a great attempt. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for your excellent review of this poem and your wonderful comments supporting this. This was fun to write and I just let my response to Renoir's beautiful paintings take me away to wherever they wanted to take me. estory
Comment from Harry Smith
I liked the you wrote this poem in two different sections but related. I enjoyed reading and will come back to read more.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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I liked the you wrote this poem in two different sections but related. I enjoyed reading and will come back to read more.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the excellent review of this poem and your comments supporting this. I am glad you enjoyed it and hope you will continue to do so. Will be posting more poetry, and sci fy. estory
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You are welcome and I will be reading more
