Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Great job with this two sentence horror story Maria. In only these two sentences you've set up the tension and then stifled all hope as "I touch the smooth, unblemished wood,' Good job even if it is inspired by a movie, they are still your words. Well done,
cheers.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks for your review.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'Flash Fiction Club' writing prompt.
You have produced a two line horror story.
Well done. Not an easy thing to do.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thank YOU for reading, Sharon.

Comment from doggymad

Excellent

Very short but such a strong write. This is surely something we have all thought about at some point.

The terror of being buried alive is very real for some. My mother was the opposite in that she didn't want to be cremated for the same reason

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks for reading, Freda.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Maria;
You certainly gave us quite the challenge with just two sentences to create a sense of 'horror.' Thank you for sharing yours,

~patty~

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks, Patty. Have a nice day.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi MJ,

You did a good job with this piece. Using only two words is quite an achievement and not at all easy, but this was good.

That movie is super too.
G

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

I haven't seen the movie, just the trailer. I don't think I'd be able to sit through the whole thing... Too scary.
Thanks for reading.

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Strong, strong. You create much vision and imagery here. Sometimes words can be potent , if just a few, and you have managed to project, poetically, a moment of horror, in a desperate moment.
Bravo.
My best wishes.
RG

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks for your very kind review, Roy.

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning, Maria: You did well on this one. It is easy to imagine that your character is in a situation or a place they cannot get out of. Your words are well chosen and well-written. I think it's great that you used the video that actually inspired this Two Sentence Horror story. I mean, what could be more horrible than being buried alive. It equals to anything of horror I could ever think of. (Yikes)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks for reading, Tier. I'm going to miss you so when you're not on FanStory anymore...

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

A fine two-sentence horror story that reminds me of Poe's buried alive poems and stories. I am also reminded of this common fear in the past in which bodies were buried with a string in the coffin tied to a bell above ground. If the person revived in the coffin, she could ring the bell and be dug up.

Your story is tight with haiku-like lines in intense descriptions:

The silence around me is heavy, like solid lead; unbroken, infinite, empty.

Your closing line reveals the person's horror as he realizes his dire situation:

I realize I'll never get out of my forever prison.

This is compelling writing. Thank you for sharing and for scaring.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks, Andre.

Comment from Fabiha_N

Excellent

This two sentence story is well-written! I love the tension that arose from the first sentence, and then rose even higher in the second. I enjoy reading these types of stories that tell a whole story in just a small limit. Great job!

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2018

---

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for reading.