Red Roses on the Mantle
A love story59 total reviews
Comment from Ursula1
This is a very sweet poem. Your rhyming is great with vivid details. You have a way with words and I feel the emotion in your poem. I think it is wonderful and so romantic that your husband still sends you roses! It is nice to hear that in this day and age. It is true that when love is real, it blooms and it cannot fail. Well said and good writing!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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This is a very sweet poem. Your rhyming is great with vivid details. You have a way with words and I feel the emotion in your poem. I think it is wonderful and so romantic that your husband still sends you roses! It is nice to hear that in this day and age. It is true that when love is real, it blooms and it cannot fail. Well said and good writing!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you Ursula for the lovely review and good wishes.
Blessings
Janet
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You are very welcome! :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks real love; he sends her red roses even after many years of marriage; well done, well said; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks real love; he sends her red roses even after many years of marriage; well done, well said; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the lovely review and good luck wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from l.raven
HI Janet, I love red Roses...I love Roses...where true love is...no storm will move that love...it will withstand anything...when you are as one...there is no separating...I love your poem sweet girl...and love your picture...beautiful...very nicely written...and I know your husband loved it as well...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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HI Janet, I love red Roses...I love Roses...where true love is...no storm will move that love...it will withstand anything...when you are as one...there is no separating...I love your poem sweet girl...and love your picture...beautiful...very nicely written...and I know your husband loved it as well...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you Linda for the lovely review and good luck wishes. You are so encouraging. Bless you.
Love
Janet
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you are so welcome Janet...always sweet girl...Bless you as well...love xxoo
Comment from Sis Cat
A very fine sonnet and love poem. I read it twice. I love the flow of your words and meter. The tone is deep, sincere, and feel real and magical at the same time:
That tender touch has made my world ignite --
like stars exploding on the Milky Way.
It came as no surprise that you wrote this for your husband's birthday.
I love your pivot in the third stanza where you speak how much he means to you:
But if you leave and take away your light,
I know that I will surely lose my way.
Your closing couplet reminded me of the blooming rose in "Beauty and the Beast" because it describes eternal love:
Red roses on the mantle tell the tale --
when love is real, it blooms and cannot fail.
I found only one spag--insert an apostrophe for "world's."
Thank you for sharing your superb sonnet. I wish you contest success.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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A very fine sonnet and love poem. I read it twice. I love the flow of your words and meter. The tone is deep, sincere, and feel real and magical at the same time:
That tender touch has made my world ignite --
like stars exploding on the Milky Way.
It came as no surprise that you wrote this for your husband's birthday.
I love your pivot in the third stanza where you speak how much he means to you:
But if you leave and take away your light,
I know that I will surely lose my way.
Your closing couplet reminded me of the blooming rose in "Beauty and the Beast" because it describes eternal love:
Red roses on the mantle tell the tale --
when love is real, it blooms and cannot fail.
I found only one spag--insert an apostrophe for "world's."
Thank you for sharing your superb sonnet. I wish you contest success.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the lovely review and good luck wishes. I always look forward to your comments and I change that one word immediately. I appreciate you encouragement.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful poem about the pretty roses on the mantle. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture of the roses. I hope you both have a very happy and blessed night and Happy Birthday to your husband! love, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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This is a very beautiful poem about the pretty roses on the mantle. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture of the roses. I hope you both have a very happy and blessed night and Happy Birthday to your husband! love, Teri
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you Teri for the lovely review and good luck wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from ameen786
A lovely tribute to a loving husband and a very happy birthday to him; excellent rhymes bringing home true love in the last couplet; thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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A lovely tribute to a loving husband and a very happy birthday to him; excellent rhymes bringing home true love in the last couplet; thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the lovely review and good wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Red roses on the mantle tell the tale --
when love is real, it blooms and cannot fail.'
So utterly beautiful1 I am so sorry my six is only virtual as I have run out but this is gorgeous so well done love Meiax x
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Red roses on the mantle tell the tale --
when love is real, it blooms and cannot fail.'
So utterly beautiful1 I am so sorry my six is only virtual as I have run out but this is gorgeous so well done love Meiax x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you Meia for the lovely review and a virtual six from you is great and so much appreciated.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from MSJVClarke
This is a very nice love poem. You cannot go wrong when you conjoin romance and red roses. i like that you show the passion in your first verse of your new romance and the strength as your love grows through trials and the loss you would feel if your lover went away.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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This is a very nice love poem. You cannot go wrong when you conjoin romance and red roses. i like that you show the passion in your first verse of your new romance and the strength as your love grows through trials and the loss you would feel if your lover went away.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for the lovely review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Joan E.
What a hero your husband is--many happy returns! I am certain he enjoyed this love sonnet as much as I did. Your alternating rhymes along with your "stars" simile and "bouquet" metaphor are very effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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What a hero your husband is--many happy returns! I am certain he enjoyed this love sonnet as much as I did. Your alternating rhymes along with your "stars" simile and "bouquet" metaphor are very effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you Joan for the lovely review and good luck wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from estory
Nice Shakespearean sonnet. I liked the image of the roses on the mantelpiece, that image of love appreciated, which is the pivot point of the whole poem. here we have that classic picture of two soul mates who are lost without each other, leaning on each other, finding the light of life together. And they are lost without each other. The meter is nice and upbeat, the rhyme scheme nicely crafted, and the musical elements as a whole are good. Strong closing couplet. estory
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Nice Shakespearean sonnet. I liked the image of the roses on the mantelpiece, that image of love appreciated, which is the pivot point of the whole poem. here we have that classic picture of two soul mates who are lost without each other, leaning on each other, finding the light of life together. And they are lost without each other. The meter is nice and upbeat, the rhyme scheme nicely crafted, and the musical elements as a whole are good. Strong closing couplet. estory
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the lovely review and good luck wishes. I always appreciate you kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
