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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Brett,
The western genre is one I quite enjoyed reading in my teens
Though not so much of late.
I quite like your fist chapter and congratulate you on challenging yourself.
A fine introductory chapter and I hope to follow on.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Hi Brett,
The western genre is one I quite enjoyed reading in my teens
Though not so much of late.
I quite like your fist chapter and congratulate you on challenging yourself.
A fine introductory chapter and I hope to follow on.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. As a writer, I needed a new challenge for 2018 and so far this one seems to be fitting the bill. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Brett,
I read your author notes as directed, and have decided to start at the beginning of this story. I disagree that fanstorians don't read westerns. I have read several western stories on this site and enjoyed them immensely.
I enjoyed reading your story. You have good characters and fine descriptive skills. I'll be following this story as you post it.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hello Brett,
I read your author notes as directed, and have decided to start at the beginning of this story. I disagree that fanstorians don't read westerns. I have read several western stories on this site and enjoyed them immensely.
I enjoyed reading your story. You have good characters and fine descriptive skills. I'll be following this story as you post it.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the tale. Strong characters are essential to this tale and I plan to keep developing them. Much more to come so I invite you to ride along as the tale unfolds.
Comment from MelB
Hi Brett, I love westerns! I enjoyed reading this. You got the lingo right and authentic to the time. I didn't know an unbroken horse was called a bangtail.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Hi Brett, I love westerns! I enjoyed reading this. You got the lingo right and authentic to the time. I didn't know an unbroken horse was called a bangtail.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Yep, in the Old West an uncombed tail on a horse meant they were unbroken, thus the name "bangtail". Appreciate you taking the time to read this portion of the tale and comment. Should you be interested, Parts 2 and 3 are also posted completing the first chapter of the tale. Your comments and support welcomed.
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You're welcome. I'll check those out.
Comment from apky
I continue to learn much from your Western story, including the jargon that I'd never heard. This I consider an enrichment.
What a wonderful and profound observation, Brett:
It is we who thrive in the civilization those forefathers created, and inside us the wilderness still lingers. We live what they dreamed and dream what they lived. Our dreams of tomorrow are surrounded by fences, but they dreamed at night when fences weren't there.
Peronally, I'd rather accomplish something worthwhile for the greater good than live my life the easy and contented way while shutting off the trials and tribulation of the rest of humanity. But I gues that's because I'm a woman, born to nurture rather than conquer.
Excellent writing and an engaging story.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I continue to learn much from your Western story, including the jargon that I'd never heard. This I consider an enrichment.
What a wonderful and profound observation, Brett:
It is we who thrive in the civilization those forefathers created, and inside us the wilderness still lingers. We live what they dreamed and dream what they lived. Our dreams of tomorrow are surrounded by fences, but they dreamed at night when fences weren't there.
Peronally, I'd rather accomplish something worthwhile for the greater good than live my life the easy and contented way while shutting off the trials and tribulation of the rest of humanity. But I gues that's because I'm a woman, born to nurture rather than conquer.
Excellent writing and an engaging story.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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I would have liked to live back when there were no fences. The Old West has always intrigued me, and needing a new challenge in writing for 2018, I decided to try a Western. Glad you enjoyed this portion of it and invite you to ride along as the tale unfolds. I believe the use of cowboy lingo and jargon help provide the tale more of an Old West flair.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
You're off to a great start. I'm glad you included some of the varmints and discomforts cowboys faced. I will definitely be keepin' an eye one this tale, partner.
C Lucas is a great western writer.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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You're off to a great start. I'm glad you included some of the varmints and discomforts cowboys faced. I will definitely be keepin' an eye one this tale, partner.
C Lucas is a great western writer.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the tale. Yes, I agree. C Lucas does spin a good Western. He and I have made contact regarding that subject, as well as this tale, and he has provided helpful insights. I invite you to follow along as this tale progresses.
Comment from judiverse
Those fences--the sign of a civilized way of life, one with boundaries. Your prologue is good as it lets us know who the narrator is and tell a little bit about him. I think your story will be well-suited to first person. The mention of the boar with the snake is interesting, makes the story seem believable. We can tell how popular that madam was. She was so valued by the townspeople that they lynched the gaucho who shot her. Interesting story, and engages attention. judi
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Those fences--the sign of a civilized way of life, one with boundaries. Your prologue is good as it lets us know who the narrator is and tell a little bit about him. I think your story will be well-suited to first person. The mention of the boar with the snake is interesting, makes the story seem believable. We can tell how popular that madam was. She was so valued by the townspeople that they lynched the gaucho who shot her. Interesting story, and engages attention. judi
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Appreciate your insightful review. Glad you enjoyed what you read. Westerns are a new genre for me, albeit one I have always wanted to attempt. I invite you, should you have the interest, to follow the progression of the tale.
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You're welcome. My dad was very fond of westerns. He would have enjoyed yours. judi
Comment from Sankey
So glad I got back here in time. Already read chapter two so I know this is gonna be good. Can't remember if you saw my Tap dancer story sorry the points have run out.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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So glad I got back here in time. Already read chapter two so I know this is gonna be good. Can't remember if you saw my Tap dancer story sorry the points have run out.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Always appreciate the support you have provided my writing over the last three years. Glad you enjoyed this section of this tale. Much more to come.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, I think this is one of the best writing I've ever written off your hand. The style seems to suit you, and I would like to read more. But I realise there won't be much chance for me to do so as you won't be posting on this site. What a shame. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Hi Brett, I think this is one of the best writing I've ever written off your hand. The style seems to suit you, and I would like to read more. But I realise there won't be much chance for me to do so as you won't be posting on this site. What a shame. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Ulla, appreciate the review. While I have moved most of my writings to another site, as stated, I intend to use FanStory as a testing ground for some pieces before adding them to that site. Perhaps I will post some more of this tale on FanStory? Time will tell.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Brett,
A very good voice to the piece, very distinctive and I guess fairly authentic. The character is a strong one too.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
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Hi Brett,
A very good voice to the piece, very distinctive and I guess fairly authentic. The character is a strong one too.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
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Thank you very much for these accolades. I truly appreciate them. Westerns are a new genre for me so hopefully I can fulfill the requirements necessary to make this tale work. Your input is quite welcome. Should you get an opportunity, I do invite you to follow along as it progresses.
Comment from c_lucas
You have the writing down pat. Now work on your characters telling the story. I received most of my advice from Louis L'amour's autobiography. Familiarize yourself with Gutenberg.com/western. Real cowboys are doing the writing in their time. I am in the process of publishing some of my books. I have numerous books of poetry and seventeen Westerns to publish.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
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You have the writing down pat. Now work on your characters telling the story. I received most of my advice from Louis L'amour's autobiography. Familiarize yourself with Gutenberg.com/western. Real cowboys are doing the writing in their time. I am in the process of publishing some of my books. I have numerous books of poetry and seventeen Westerns to publish.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
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Appreciate the feedback and the helpful suggestions. Will check out the site recommended. If real cowboys are doing the writing then there is probably a wealth of information that could be readily drawn from. Time to do some serious research.
