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The Wild Winds

A Duo-Rhyme Poem for Potlatch

39 total reviews 
Comment from ameen786
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That's the beauty of this site; I always learn something new and what a wonderful poem to learn from; excellent rhyming with superb flow; reminds of all the tornadoes/hurricanes we face every season; thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    Thank you for such a wonderful review. I truly appreciate your lovely remarks. 8-)
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Yvonne, this is a wonderful poem written so well for this potlatch challenge. I loved it. you seem to have grasped it to perfection. I loved it. All the best, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much. I wish you'd join in Potlatch with us. It's a lot of fun.
Comment from Douglas Paul
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I enjoyed this one, my friend. It flows very smoothly and you used some very creative rhyming. Hope you are having a great day. You did a nice job on this one

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    I appreciate you saying that. Thank you. I spent half the morning University of Arkansas for Medical Sciences Center (UAMS) for an MRI. What was really wrong, you have to walk 37 miles to get the door, or so it seems, and another 42 to get to the MRI place. To make matters worse, I got lost going back to the car and went up and down and up and down, everyone giving a different direction. I finally winged it and finally found my car. Other than that, it was a great day. LOL
reply by Douglas Paul on 25-Jan-2018
    LOL = I can relate to that. I walk a lot when I go to Moffit too
Comment from MelB
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Hi Yvonne, great description and alliteration in this poem. I enjoyed this poem and it reminded me a little of the Garth Brooks song, The Thunder Rolled.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    Oh, my. What a nice thing to say. Thank you.
reply by MelB on 25-Jan-2018
    You're welcome:)
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
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Absolutely loved this form of poetry, and the content was just delightful.
Wonderful rhythm, enabling a nice smooth read.
Excellent artwork to accompany which marries with your words a treat.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much. What wonderful comments.
Comment from doggymad
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Great write my friend. Reminds me of a few storms that we had here with no warning.

You have personified the gale and the lightening and the destruction they caused.

I quite like the format too

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    I'm so glad you like it. You must try one. I like a good thunder-boomer as long as it doesn't hurt anything or knock out the power.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Wow this one flowed of all the ones that I have read so far. The storm passing and blue skies ahead. Nicely done, I have never tried a duo-rhyme before but you made it seem effortlessly

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    Thank you for those wonderful remarks. Try one. It's not as hard as it looks.
Comment from Mark Valentine
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I love the form - the duorhyme is a nice compromise for those who might find monorhyme too tedious. Your iambic tetrameter is carried flawlessly throghout the poem. Nice use of alliteration. I like that you used gray background - it accentuated the dark and violent feel of the storm you were describing. It's clear that a lot of thought went into this.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    This means a lot to me, this wonderful review and the stars. Thank you. You brightened my day. 8-)
Comment from Pantygynt
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I think you have made an excellent job of what I originally saw as a piece of "form-for-form's-sake". The content forms an introduction and conclusion containing the monorhyming bulk of the piece in a kind of verbal parenthesis. The monorhyme allows event to be stacked upon event and the threat grows throughout the section.

I think you have done really well with this, at first sight, un-prepossessing form.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    Wow! A six from you means a lot. Thank you so much. Now, you do one. I'll be looking for it. 8-)
reply by Pantygynt on 25-Jan-2018
    I will see what I can do.
Comment from judiverse
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This moves so beautifully, and the rhyme is great. You did a fine job of following the format. You choose your words well to describe the severity of the storm. The alliterative sound of ripped and rammed works well, and the verbs really convey the destruction of the storm. Glad there were blue skies at the end. judi

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2018


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much. I appreciate this great review.T
reply by judiverse on 25-Jan-2018
    You're welcome. I really loved your poem. judi