Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

I find this poem truly moving, Dawn. Your mastery is so evident throughout. I'm glad that, following the contest glitch, you decided to post this superb poem.

So many wonderful images. I found myself relating on many levels. I, particularly, loved this:

'... Call the wind to brew a tempest; darken skies to match my fate...'

xx Bev

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Thanks so much, Bev.

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

I am sure many can relate to this poem. Beautifully worded and deeply moving. Those of us that can relate to this must
be shaking our heads wondering what the heck we were thinking of at the time. Lovely work with this one.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Thank you, Sasha - why are you on the computer? (lol)

reply by Sasha on 25-Jan-2018

I got my new glasses yesterday but had to send them back. He made them incorrectly and I hope to get them back this afternoon. So, I am off the computer until then. I am using a magnifying glass just to write this...lol

reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018

Oh - I hope they're right when you get them back. That was fast! Good for you!

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Thought I'd already reviewed this poem Dawn, but I could be mistaken, this is a great work and I loved every line, the flow, the rhymes and the sentiments, a work of art, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

You did - it's supposed to have changed = it's not my Valentine's entry, dear friend - THAT was supposed to be an acrostic, so I wrote to Tom and he said I could edit. I did, and the new entry is called "Kill Cupid (He Picked Me A Loser)" HAHAHAHAHA! Oops. But I loved this poem, so I posted it again, rather than let it die a dusty death in my files. :))

Does it still say it's a contest entry under the poem? I wonder why you weren't notified of the other one... I promoted both...

Thank you, my friend.

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 24-Jan-2018

I?ll try and find your other poem now, love Dolly x

Comment from damommy

Excellent

'Stop the nightingale's sweet singing, halt the world; arrest the clocks. Oh, the brook will cease its babble, all the planets not align' - so beautifully worded.

An outstanding poem for a Valentine. Wonderful rhyming.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018

Thanks very much. :) The acrostic, "Kill Cupid", is now taking the place of this one in the contest. of course, announcements don't go out again. ...*sigh*...

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Aww, that is a sad Valentine message, but I bet it would sell well in Hallmarks cards. So many lovers end in tragic despair. You should have entered this in the Valentine Poem contest, Dawn. It would have really well. I enjoyed it immensely! xx Sandra x

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Is it still showing as an entry? It's not my Valentine's entry, dear friend - THAT was supposed to be an acrostic, so I wrote to Tom and he said I could edit. I did, and the new entry is called "Kill Cupid (He Picked Me A Loser)" HAHAHAHAHA! Oops. But I loved this poem, so I posted it again, rather than let it die a dusty death in my files. :))

Thank you, Sandra.

Comment from doggymad

Excellent

Oh boy this reminds me of a relationship that I was in that ended badly.

I can identify with it strongly. Looking back, it I wonder what I was thinking lol. He was charming and dishonest.

Ah we learn from our mistakes, or I hope we do.

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Ah, but it's not my Valentine's entry, dear friend - THAT was supposed to be an acrostic, so I wrote to Tom and he said I could edit. I did, and the new entry is called "Kill Cupid (He Picked Me A Loser)" HAHAHAHAHA! Oops. But I loved this poem, so I posted it again, rather than let it die a dusty death in my files. :))

Thank you, my friend.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

What a superb entry in this Valentine's Day poetry contest, dear Dawn, you've adorned with beautifully expressed wording and a delightfully flowing presentation of artful crafting, well done my friend, good look, in 15.14 1514 aabb rhyming well done, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Ah, but it's not, dear friend - it was supposed to be an acrostic, so I wrote to Tom and he said I could edit. I did, and the new entry is called "Kill Cupid (He Picked Me A Loser)" HAHAHAHAHA! Oops. But I loved this poem, so I posted it again, rather than let it die a dusty death in my files. :))

Thank you, my friend.

reply by royowen on 24-Jan-2018

Still great Dawn, dusty death,, like that.

reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Thank you, Roy! :)

reply by royowen on 24-Jan-2018

Always welcome dear girl

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Really lovely and so extremely well phrased. Original and picturesque descriptions that grab the reader's imagination. A favorite. I rarely am out of 6's but sorry to say I was so behind on messages they are gone and I am sad I don't have one for this.

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 Comment Written 24-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018

Ah, but it's not my Valentine's entry, dear friend - THAT was supposed to be an acrostic, so I wrote to Tom and he said I could edit. I did, and the new entry is called "Kill Cupid (He Picked Me A Loser)" HAHAHAHAHA! Oops. But I loved this poem, so I posted it again, rather than let it die a dusty death in my files. :))

Thank you, my friend. I am just as happy with your virtual!!!!!!!!