Empathy matters
A contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. We all have a hidden compassion inside of us and always kicks in when it is needed to shoe empathy to another's misfortune.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. We all have a hidden compassion inside of us and always kicks in when it is needed to shoe empathy to another's misfortune.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Hello Sandra, I appreciate your visit and the encouraging review; thank you very much.
Comment from jppoet
Hello again Ameen, This is a sweet and sensitive poem, difficult to achieve within the framework of a brief 5-7-5 restriction. Congratulations, I will look for more of your works. Blessings.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Hello again Ameen, This is a sweet and sensitive poem, difficult to achieve within the framework of a brief 5-7-5 restriction. Congratulations, I will look for more of your works. Blessings.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Hello jspoet, I appreciate your visit and am pleased that you like the write; thank you very much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Empathy Matters, has the right format and pushes the point that fair weather brings friends but that foul weather brings the best out of only a few.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This 5-7-5, Empathy Matters, has the right format and pushes the point that fair weather brings friends but that foul weather brings the best out of only a few.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Bill, thank you for the visit and the insights; good day my friend.
Comment from rama devi
Deeply reflective and insightful! Love the alliterated two word satori line, making this a contender for my vote (also because the theme resonates with me intensely). Good aphoristic flavor, as befits the 5-7-5 form well. Fine alliteration of E and consonance of P and S and L.
My one critique is the use of two filler words in line two. This is not idea for the short forms. You could easily tighten it to allow two further syllables - and you might also choose a stronger verb than IS. Example:
Love's strongest bond forged
by pain's deep relationship
empathy's esteemed!
Just some thoughts.
A strong, inspiring entry...and well presented, too!
Good luck.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Deeply reflective and insightful! Love the alliterated two word satori line, making this a contender for my vote (also because the theme resonates with me intensely). Good aphoristic flavor, as befits the 5-7-5 form well. Fine alliteration of E and consonance of P and S and L.
My one critique is the use of two filler words in line two. This is not idea for the short forms. You could easily tighten it to allow two further syllables - and you might also choose a stronger verb than IS. Example:
Love's strongest bond forged
by pain's deep relationship
empathy's esteemed!
Just some thoughts.
A strong, inspiring entry...and well presented, too!
Good luck.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you Deviji and as always I welcome your beautiful suggestion and will make the change as soon as the voting is done; I am not sure if I can change while the voting is not complete. Again, thank you very much.
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So pleased to be of service, my friend. Om!
Comment from c_lucas
The strength of love is often shown in the relationship. Emotions are changed for the better. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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The strength of love is often shown in the relationship. Emotions are changed for the better. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Charlie my friend, thank you very much.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt.
A good message conveyed here.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt.
A good message conveyed here.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Sharon, thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Before they can express anything else, babies can show empathy. It's built into our DNA. People need to learn to hate. Tom T Hall said, "God bless little children when they're still too young to hate.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Before they can express anything else, babies can show empathy. It's built into our DNA. People need to learn to hate. Tom T Hall said, "God bless little children when they're still too young to hate.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Thomas, thank you for stopping by and the insights; appreciate it very much.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-w-w-w-wwwwww... Poor lil' tykes.
Someone once asked me: "What's the difference between sympathy and empathy." I told them that sympathy is when you share the feelings of another; but empathy is when you understand the feelings of another but do not necessarily share them.
Sound about right to you?
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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A-w-w-w-wwwwww... Poor lil' tykes.
Someone once asked me: "What's the difference between sympathy and empathy." I told them that sympathy is when you share the feelings of another; but empathy is when you understand the feelings of another but do not necessarily share them.
Sound about right to you?
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Dean, thank you for the visit and the insights.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from Sugarray77
A delightful poem showcasing empathy. Even though it is short, you did a fine job of describing the sentiment you wanted to convey. Well done. Regards.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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A delightful poem showcasing empathy. Even though it is short, you did a fine job of describing the sentiment you wanted to convey. Well done. Regards.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Sugarray, thank you for the visit and I am pleased that you like the write.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a fine poem having a clear message on love and pain relationship as empathy matters; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is a fine poem having a clear message on love and pain relationship as empathy matters; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello my friend, I am glad that you stopped by and like the poem, thank you very much.
