Burden of gratitude
A Sedoka5 total reviews
Comment from royowen
What a beautiful tribute to the the most high. It is laced with gratitude, and an obvious love and awe for He who sits in the Heavens, and loves we sons of men. Beautifully written, you're heart is one of a royal scribe, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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What a beautiful tribute to the the most high. It is laced with gratitude, and an obvious love and awe for He who sits in the Heavens, and loves we sons of men. Beautifully written, you're heart is one of a royal scribe, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I am honored my friend, so pleased that you stopped by and blessed my work; thank you very much.
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Most welcome my friend,
Comment from Joan E.
And last but not least, before I call it a day, one more offering from your pen, and a Sedoka at that. I admired your spiritual poem about the role of "meekness," with its "roof" metaphor and use of alliteration. More good wishes in the competition and sweet dreams- Joan
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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And last but not least, before I call it a day, one more offering from your pen, and a Sedoka at that. I admired your spiritual poem about the role of "meekness," with its "roof" metaphor and use of alliteration. More good wishes in the competition and sweet dreams- Joan
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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Hello my friend, much obliged for your time and the wonderful review; thank you very much.
Comment from sunnilicious
That is a wonderful poem. Religion is a spiritual belief too. Well thought out and clearly written. I ran out of 6er's but this is definitely a winner to me. Be proud. Great work.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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That is a wonderful poem. Religion is a spiritual belief too. Well thought out and clearly written. I ran out of 6er's but this is definitely a winner to me. Be proud. Great work.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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I am so pleased that you like the poem, thank you very much my friend.
Comment from rama devi
Totally agree. Well said! Nice theme. Nice presentation. Deep and profound insight, my friend. It's an interesting word choice: 'burden of gratitude'. I find it lifts weight, not adds weight. The bliss of gratitude makes more sense. So your word choice prompted deep reflection. Indeed, that bliss is also a burden in that we have to be responsible with our minds - to work to keep the ego from flaring up, to keep humble. It is a burden of sorts...rewarded with bliss...
Love this phrasing: His roof's vast refuge
Fine phonetics and flow in this fine free verse.
Namaskaram
rd
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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Totally agree. Well said! Nice theme. Nice presentation. Deep and profound insight, my friend. It's an interesting word choice: 'burden of gratitude'. I find it lifts weight, not adds weight. The bliss of gratitude makes more sense. So your word choice prompted deep reflection. Indeed, that bliss is also a burden in that we have to be responsible with our minds - to work to keep the ego from flaring up, to keep humble. It is a burden of sorts...rewarded with bliss...
Love this phrasing: His roof's vast refuge
Fine phonetics and flow in this fine free verse.
Namaskaram
rd
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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Much obliged my friend and thank you very much for your time and the uplifting review; means a lot to me. Thank you and God bless, namaskar!
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Namaskar, Ameenji. Thanks, dear fried. Blessings, rd
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Kamran, You know this is a beautiful write. It seems strange however, when males write of faith and gratitude they do it with feminine presentations. Wonder if that is subconscious? Simply beautiful. I would also like to remind you dear friend, I also write once in a while lol. Would be great to see you at my place too once in a while. huggs xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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Hello Kamran, You know this is a beautiful write. It seems strange however, when males write of faith and gratitude they do it with feminine presentations. Wonder if that is subconscious? Simply beautiful. I would also like to remind you dear friend, I also write once in a while lol. Would be great to see you at my place too once in a while. huggs xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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xoxo my friend, much obliged and thank you very much for the encouraging review. Using feminine presentations to reflect faith/gratitude is sincere; to me they are more devoted and submissive to God than the rebellious males. Now I am going to your profile and become your fan so that I never miss your posting. As you should know, I am your pupil and could never forget your guidance when I first joined the site and for that I remain grateful, thank you my friend.
