Comment from
James H. Oldfield
Excellent, and a feeling I know all too well (it's more often when I'm trying to get my daughter down for a nap that ideas start flowing :) ).
Just a couple of minor suggestions, none of which effect the quality of the poem:
First line 'mind's' ('mind is'), unless you're referring to multiple minds.
Line seven, I'm less sure on this one, but did you mean 'the idea is becoming webbed', or 'the ideas are becoming webbed'? If the former, you'd again need the apostrophe.
Doesn't harm the poem, but I think you meant 'middle of the night', in the author's note.
Well done, and take care.
-James
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Comment Written 19-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
Thank you so very much. I went back and edited. I was distracted by the four year old at my side and became careless in the hurry to post. I do appreciate your reading and the supportive comments. Glad you could relate to this one.
Have a great day!
:)Brigitte
reply by James H. Oldfield on 19-Jan-2018
Haha, I ca very much relate to THAT, too :) -James