Comment from Cranial Thinker

Exceptional

Oh!!! What a fearful something for an unashamed strength to unexpectedly introduce itself to darkness when darkness so love its no color, no true emotion filled with a form of lacking anything referencing edified anything accept self which they themselves cannot even see simply because their characters lack true breath and heart no wanting to know realisms authenticated light oh what beams of true illumination that shocks darkness indeed by simply saying respectfully Good-Morning and Hello it is I....So nicely done my friend....Cranial Thinker

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Mister cranial it is so nice to hear from you again. I see that you are writing and I will get the opportunity to read some of your work soon. I have been very busy working. And having a prosperous new year as I pray you are too. Blessings, Darren

Comment from MissMerri

Exceptional

Great lanturne poem Darren. I think you might want to change the capital I to a small i in the word into. But other than that, I see nothing to change. It is a clear message and I took it metaphorically as well as literally. Nice illustration too! Good luck in the contest. ~ MM

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018

Thanks so much Miss Mary I really appreciate the comments. Thanks for the inspiration to try this interesting form of poetry.

I really appreciate the Comments.

And I really appreciate your advice and help with always making my writing look more professional.

Hoping to see you soon,

Darren

Comment from Kingsrookviii

Exceptional

I'll tell you straight, this really made me think. I never heard of a beam of darkness; so if there is one, then it follows that Light encompasses it by a lot. I love this revelation and that's what this is, truly. From a theological and philosophical perspective this is tremendous and very congruent with what I believe, but I simply never thought of it like this at all. I am extremely impressed, Mr. Badger! Well done. Bruce.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018

Thanks for your kind comments Bruce I appreciate all of you. Great to hear from you again blessings, Darren

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

Darren,this is a good subject, but your syllable count is incorrect I believe.
" into the darkness" has 5 syllables, it should have only 4. Good luck in the contest, I'm happy for your change of style
Virtual hug, Trisha

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

Thanks so much Trisha I realize that myself it's corrected now

reply by Bucketlist on 16-Jan-2018

I?m glad

reply by Bucketlist on 16-Jan-2018

I?m glad

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

A sudden, surprising sound of light, beems with the shine of lanterns light, the glow of light makes all clear, well said, well done, good luck with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

Thanks for your faithful, ironically consistent comments, which pop up out of nowhere. May be blessed with a prosperous and happy New Year, blessings Darren

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

One dictionary defines Beems as a trumpet...you list music as a past interest, so I am curious. Even respelled as beams, the lanturne lantern pun gets you a fiver groan.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

Hey red thanks for the great comments I didn't even realize some of those times until I look at it for pointing out the definition for the word. I have since gone back and edit it and the spelling for the word beams but hey I really appreciate., brother

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Bill, I like this and it was an enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. There is one small hiccup. The word should be beam, not beem. Patricia

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018

Thanks so much I wondered about that I really appreciate it. Blessings,
Darren