The Width of the Night is Within?
My Son Jason's Life.23 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
- "I (now) not why" - should be know
- "Slowly ever (do) slowly" - should be so
- take out all the quotation marks as it makes your poem look messy
This is a powerful emotional free verse style poem. Readers feel your agony and grief.
I'm sorry for your loss.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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- "I (now) not why" - should be know
- "Slowly ever (do) slowly" - should be so
- take out all the quotation marks as it makes your poem look messy
This is a powerful emotional free verse style poem. Readers feel your agony and grief.
I'm sorry for your loss.
Joy xx
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the Tudors Joy.
LOL!
Dr.Ricky
Comment from Liberty Justice
Ricky, Ricky, Ricky, every time I read your story scripts, I cry or either tears swell up in my eyes. BEAUTIFUL. Your writing testimonials are so enchanting, so mystical, so spiritual. You are truly a Master Poet, and you always come up with new fresh ideas to present your works. WELL WRITTEN DR. RICKY. lol liberty justice
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Ricky, Ricky, Ricky, every time I read your story scripts, I cry or either tears swell up in my eyes. BEAUTIFUL. Your writing testimonials are so enchanting, so mystical, so spiritual. You are truly a Master Poet, and you always come up with new fresh ideas to present your works. WELL WRITTEN DR. RICKY. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Marry me forever?
Babies x 3?
LOL!!!
DR PEPPER!
THIRSTY?
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Ricky, you are something else. Thanks for offer. I love it when people support me in competitions, because I always support everybody in competitions every day, so thank you for wishing me good luck in contest today.
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Liberty Justice replied thanks for offer.
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Ricky keep the faith. What
city and town do u live in?
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Manahawkin, New Jersey.
Between New York and Philadelphia about 35 minutes from Atlantic City New Jersey where the casinos are of course and about 8 minutes from Long Beach Island popular resort area which is a coerced right next to the Atlantic Ocean
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, Dr. Ricky,
This is really good, but the " are so distracting!
I found one typo:
"Two tears, I now feel, slowly roll down the left side of My (my is lower case) cold face
Take care,
Nome
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Hello, Dr. Ricky,
This is really good, but the " are so distracting!
I found one typo:
"Two tears, I now feel, slowly roll down the left side of My (my is lower case) cold face
Take care,
Nome
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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The Capitalazion on my is to present depth for my lost one.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a solemn sad write filled with painful memories Ricky, your faith will help you carry this burden and heal in the sunshine, best wishes to you, love Dolly x
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This is a solemn sad write filled with painful memories Ricky, your faith will help you carry this burden and heal in the sunshine, best wishes to you, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Thanks again Dolly for your wonderful review and time.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Dear friend: This is another tearful poem and my heart is with you in this sorrow. I still ache with you about my loss. I think today I will post just one more poem about that actual day when I found out. I must thank you for giving me the courage to continue to post about my son's loss too. Sometimes it seems that people don't want to read about it anymore but I simply must keep his memory alive, the way you do about your son, Jason. You do post about him all of the time and we have the right to write about it as much as we want so today I will post another Tyrene poem. Thank you again and you post and poem is marvelous.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Good morning, Dear friend: This is another tearful poem and my heart is with you in this sorrow. I still ache with you about my loss. I think today I will post just one more poem about that actual day when I found out. I must thank you for giving me the courage to continue to post about my son's loss too. Sometimes it seems that people don't want to read about it anymore but I simply must keep his memory alive, the way you do about your son, Jason. You do post about him all of the time and we have the right to write about it as much as we want so today I will post another Tyrene poem. Thank you again and you post and poem is marvelous.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
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Thanks dear I do try to make some up cuz I know I've had a couple of people complain I can worry about it and I know what it's like when you go and review an artist work here and it's the same way all the time like there's a writer that right every time it's religious work so you get bored but I don't live in the past but I write a lot about my son dedicated pieces to preserve his memory a course and also to promote the organ tissue donation you'll notice that's almost at the end of every one of them thanks for your time talk to Ricky 1024 and have a wonderful day
Comment from BOO ghost
This is an attractive presentation. BOO's favorite words: Yes, here I lie...
"And, here I wait...
"Here I lie and here I wait...
"And, wonder why?"
"Lord God, perhaps I'm no longer alive?"
"But, dead inside?"
"Perhaps I just appear or have died?"
Entertaining read Dr. Ricky.
BOO enjoyed very much.
BOO Ghost~
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This is an attractive presentation. BOO's favorite words: Yes, here I lie...
"And, here I wait...
"Here I lie and here I wait...
"And, wonder why?"
"Lord God, perhaps I'm no longer alive?"
"But, dead inside?"
"Perhaps I just appear or have died?"
Entertaining read Dr. Ricky.
BOO enjoyed very much.
BOO Ghost~
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Thanks boo and always a pleasure to see you who who who dr. Ricky 1024 stay scared
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BOO! BOO!
Comment from l.raven
Oh Ricky, my sweet friend...I wish I had the answer to your questions to God...but there will be a day they will be answered...this just brought tears my friend...very well written...but so very sad...God Bless sweet guy...Love Linda xxoo
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Oh Ricky, my sweet friend...I wish I had the answer to your questions to God...but there will be a day they will be answered...this just brought tears my friend...very well written...but so very sad...God Bless sweet guy...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
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Olinda why does God send the Angels so far away from me when I read reviews like this from you I just wonder why Ricky
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I hope I didn't upset you my sweet friend...trust me when I say....the Angels never leave your side Ricky...and never will...nor will Jason...when your time comes and now...all will be with you...Ricky I just watched my father die sweet guy...at the end the very last days...he reached out calling his mothers name...we didn't know why at first...but then figured it out...he was seeing her...she was there taking him home...I believe that so deep in my heart...he was truly seeing her...and you will see your son when God comes for you...the angels never leave you sweet guy...love xxoo
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And I my pain was so immense so many years ago over both these issues that on December 1st 2006 I couldn't take it anymore took a serrated steak knife to my chest twice any my heart valve it didn't kill me so I / my next three times going for the jugular that didn't kill me it took a bottle of Depakote that didn't kill me so I called nine-one-one or because there was another person involved over to my house I learned from a crew from it help people with it move forward from it I have no sad or bad memories the accident doesn't bother me anymore my wife's suicide doesn't bother me anymore and I know everything you said is true and my deepest condolences on your father's loss of your father talked to Ricky 1024
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive heartfelt wording and great imagery with the words. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive heartfelt wording and great imagery with the words. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Thanks Terri for your wonderful review and time.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Ricky
talk about the emotions I felt while reading your
saddening tearful poetic words of the feeling you son had when he knew he was going to be with
God
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Hello Ricky
talk about the emotions I felt while reading your
saddening tearful poetic words of the feeling you son had when he knew he was going to be with
God
Gert
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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I got that kind of stuff doesn't come from within comes from above thanks dr. Ricky 1024 and have a blessed Sunday
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You are welcome Ricky
what ever comes from above is the best
Gert
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This is full of emotion and excellent wording sharing the pain and the passion of a ltime that you survived and so will the next person
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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This is full of emotion and excellent wording sharing the pain and the passion of a ltime that you survived and so will the next person
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Thanks Barb I appreciate this Ricky
