Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the 'The Life He Almost Lived' writing prompt.
A good story, well written.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018

Thank you for your kind review.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Well done, well said, a fantastic free verse, a pleasant to read; thank you for sharing this; wish you good luck for the contest - The Life He Almost Lived. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018

Thank you for your kind review.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

A tragic story - one of many tragedies in that terrible war, especially in the Pacific.

I am glad that your free verse poem focused on the man and his passion for carving and you left the story itself to your notes. It would have been hard to do that narrative justice in a poem.

I like the bookending too of the white pine.

Excellent entry for this contest. Good luck.

Steve

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2018

Thank you for your kind review.