Imbalance of Nature
3-5-3 contest11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 3-5-3 poem. Worms belong in nature and enter the ground softly in a natural way. Mankind needs heavy machinery and hard steel tools to drill a hole in the ground.
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A very well-written 3-5-3 poem. Worms belong in nature and enter the ground softly in a natural way. Mankind needs heavy machinery and hard steel tools to drill a hole in the ground.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very good connection from technology to nature. At this point in time, humans don't have much choice if they want to keep mobility and warmth/coolness. Great image to accompany your piece. Marilyn
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This is a very good connection from technology to nature. At this point in time, humans don't have much choice if they want to keep mobility and warmth/coolness. Great image to accompany your piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Joy Graham
Dear Mystery Poet,
This message gives the reader something to think about. I like the comparison of the man vs nature approach. Nature's not always so gentle, though. Hurricanes and flooding being the first I'm able to mention off the top of my head. Good syllables and I like your page presentation. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
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Dear Mystery Poet,
This message gives the reader something to think about. I like the comparison of the man vs nature approach. Nature's not always so gentle, though. Hurricanes and flooding being the first I'm able to mention off the top of my head. Good syllables and I like your page presentation. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Dan Diego
Nicely done. I love the contrast between "enters ... tenderly" and "drills." Puts the focus right on your aptly titled poem. You choice of art and the silhouette supply the theme. This might be small, but the message is big. Thanks for posting.
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Nicely done. I love the contrast between "enters ... tenderly" and "drills." Puts the focus right on your aptly titled poem. You choice of art and the silhouette supply the theme. This might be small, but the message is big. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Poet;
The very nice contrast between the natural way of cultivating the soil and mankind's harsh and abrupt exploration is illustrated by the lines of your poem.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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Dear Anonymous Poet;
The very nice contrast between the natural way of cultivating the soil and mankind's harsh and abrupt exploration is illustrated by the lines of your poem.
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a correct line / syllable count and nature theme. The content is intriguing and your closing a bit of creative genius as I never thought about the decay quite that way - maybe that's why I am opting for cremation LOL. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a correct line / syllable count and nature theme. The content is intriguing and your closing a bit of creative genius as I never thought about the decay quite that way - maybe that's why I am opting for cremation LOL. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Dean Kuch
Quite a stark contrast between the gentleness of nature and the harshness of man made machinery.
Your syllable count is on the money, and your style, presentation and writing are easily recognizable to those of us who read and know your work.
Good work with this 3-5-3, Michael.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
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Quite a stark contrast between the gentleness of nature and the harshness of man made machinery.
Your syllable count is on the money, and your style, presentation and writing are easily recognizable to those of us who read and know your work.
Good work with this 3-5-3, Michael.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Good message in your few words and a nice picture.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Good message in your few words and a nice picture.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a superb piece. I've read a couple of great nature haikus this weekend. the juxtaposition of the worm at balance and respectful in its place in nature against man's treatment if profound and striking.
Great piece
G
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Hi there,
This is a superb piece. I've read a couple of great nature haikus this weekend. the juxtaposition of the worm at balance and respectful in its place in nature against man's treatment if profound and striking.
Great piece
G
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yes digging for those treasures beneath the surface to make our lives better! Man's interference with nature will one day bite us in the bum, a poignant write here, love Dolly x
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Yes digging for those treasures beneath the surface to make our lives better! Man's interference with nature will one day bite us in the bum, a poignant write here, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
