With Each Passing Day
Was it love at first sight?43 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
I don't believe i have ever seen a romantic prose poem before. This is an interesting experiment and one that has worked out well, telling the developing history of a love affair from its youthful beginnings to the here and now when, "her still beautiful face has a few wrinkles; her thick black hair has a few strands of gray and her middle is a little thicker".
You are probably no longer an oil painting either. Lol.
Would "Please forgive me, it's not easy to speak with Cupid's arrow buried so deep in my heart" work as a chat up line these days? Have I the balls to try it?
I don't think so -- to either of those questions.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I don't believe i have ever seen a romantic prose poem before. This is an interesting experiment and one that has worked out well, telling the developing history of a love affair from its youthful beginnings to the here and now when, "her still beautiful face has a few wrinkles; her thick black hair has a few strands of gray and her middle is a little thicker".
You are probably no longer an oil painting either. Lol.
Would "Please forgive me, it's not easy to speak with Cupid's arrow buried so deep in my heart" work as a chat up line these days? Have I the balls to try it?
I don't think so -- to either of those questions.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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You are absolutely correct. I was trying to illustrate that a young man determined to get a conversation started might resort to making an outrageous statement just to kick start a conversation that he can now turn to his advantage. I have seen this work when a man insinuates that a pretty girl is somehow ugly or unattractive to him. The girl, used to having her looks complimented is suddenly on the defensive and knocked a bit off stride. This tactic has a lot of risks, but if the guy is on his game he can use this to his advantage.
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These days it seems you can find yourself arrested for saying "Hello"! I am glad I am not of marketable age any more.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is the way love should be. Love at first sight doesn't often happen and probably never from both sides. That Cupid's arrow line is an original one.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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This is the way love should be. Love at first sight doesn't often happen and probably never from both sides. That Cupid's arrow line is an original one.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you, some might think it corny, but if it serves to open the door, only a fool would linger outside, afraid to enter and engage.
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You're welcome. It is corny. But I like Greek mythology. It is much better than What's your sign? or Do you come here often? haha.
dragonpoet
Comment from RGstar
Because my membership has ran out I am no longer a Premier Author, meaning I am not able to administer six stars to you when worth. Financial upgrade is not an option for me right now so I am considering my options. I tell you this as not to keep apologising with virtual sixes written atop your work or non participation in contests or voting. I will not post work for now nor vote, but know I will continue to read certain works and review sparsely until time, so please forgive me of my fan base for lack of attention at this time. I will continue to read most works. My apologies if any review during this time not full. Best Wishes. RG
These are the kinds of writing from you I like, Nomi. Always remind of a sunny day whatever your subject matter.
Just beautiful.
My best to you this day.
RG
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Because my membership has ran out I am no longer a Premier Author, meaning I am not able to administer six stars to you when worth. Financial upgrade is not an option for me right now so I am considering my options. I tell you this as not to keep apologising with virtual sixes written atop your work or non participation in contests or voting. I will not post work for now nor vote, but know I will continue to read certain works and review sparsely until time, so please forgive me of my fan base for lack of attention at this time. I will continue to read most works. My apologies if any review during this time not full. Best Wishes. RG
These are the kinds of writing from you I like, Nomi. Always remind of a sunny day whatever your subject matter.
Just beautiful.
My best to you this day.
RG
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much my dear brother. As I write not for the rewards of stars, but for the rewards of honest opinions of those whose talents I admire, your wonderful encouragement is worth more to me than 12 stars. God bless you and I do hope to hear from you again very soon.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a wonderful write and I was sad to hear it was all a dream as I thought it was real, but we have these fanciful thoughts and all we can do is hope, love Dolly x
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This is a wonderful write and I was sad to hear it was all a dream as I thought it was real, but we have these fanciful thoughts and all we can do is hope, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you. I wrote this poem many years ago and I am happy to say that I am in a happy and successful relationship that is 46 years along and still going. I just wish that our beginning had been as romantic as the one I wrote about. However, life is not a dream. It is real and requires real effort on the part of all those who are involved. We are happy and we continue in this happy state.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Nomi: Oh too bad this is not a real account. You wrote it so well that it sounded like the real deal. I really enjoyed reading this poem. I also got a kick out of the smooth line. It wasn't a corny one. Most women would smile and be flattered at such a line. Nice! You used normal behavior and conversation that most readers would find intriguing and this did that for me. Your story pulled me along, saying the words that I want my husband to say about me and he does. WONDERFUL and Bravo!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Good morning, Nomi: Oh too bad this is not a real account. You wrote it so well that it sounded like the real deal. I really enjoyed reading this poem. I also got a kick out of the smooth line. It wasn't a corny one. Most women would smile and be flattered at such a line. Nice! You used normal behavior and conversation that most readers would find intriguing and this did that for me. Your story pulled me along, saying the words that I want my husband to say about me and he does. WONDERFUL and Bravo!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank, thank you, thank you. I did take some kidding from at least one reviewer, who did not think that line would work. Ha, shows how much he knows. LOL. I wrote this poem many years ago, before FanStory in fact and I had to do some editing. The beginning of my current relationship was not as romantic as the one I wrote about, the life and the continuing state of our relationship is very much like the one in the poem. We have been together for forty six years now and have never fought, separated or gone to bed angry with each other in all that time. Yes, we have been blessed.
Comment from ameen786
Keep on dreaming my friend; indeed, life's entertaining only if we can dream. Although, fictional, this is a beautiful and quite convincing story. Thank you for sharing.
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Keep on dreaming my friend; indeed, life's entertaining only if we can dream. Although, fictional, this is a beautiful and quite convincing story. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you, I was surprised when I ran across this piece. I immediately wondered why I never posted it before.
Comment from c_lucas
Some men are gifted with "The Gift of Gabbed." Others depend on the looks and sexuality. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. There is good imagery.
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Some men are gifted with "The Gift of Gabbed." Others depend on the looks and sexuality. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you Charlie. I could never be as good as you at that, but I am pleased with your review comments.
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You're welcome, Nomi. Charlie
Comment from oliver818
What a beautiful poem. I love the way you told a story so intensely while keeping it poetic. Very well done. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece and have a really great day
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What a beautiful poem. I love the way you told a story so intensely while keeping it poetic. Very well done. Thanks for sharing this wonderful piece and have a really great day
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you Oliver. I am now on the hunt for what other poems I may have been overlooking. LOL.
Comment from Cycler
Well, whether a dream or real, you wrote it very well - as if you know what you want. The picture is beautiful - a very nice selection for your words. It drew my attention and was the reason I read this romantic work of art.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Well, whether a dream or real, you wrote it very well - as if you know what you want. The picture is beautiful - a very nice selection for your words. It drew my attention and was the reason I read this romantic work of art.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you. I am particularly proud of this one. All the more since it has been lost for some time, I am now searching for what else I may have mislaid.
Comment from Dean Kuch
"As I passed it to her, I smelled her vanilla scented perfume and our hands briefly touched." ... It was probably Vanilla Fields, by Avon, Nomi. Although this was just a dream, you've had to smell it somewhere and it obviously made a lasting impression on you.
"Her voice was like honey poured over my favorite dish" ... What's your favorite dish?
"Her still beautiful face has a few wrinkles; her thick black hair has a few strands of gray and her middle is a little thicker now. Despite these minor things, she is still the most beautiful woman my eyes have ever seen and as incredible as it my sound or seem, I love her more with each passing day." ... But of course you do.
Lovely poem. Thanks very much for sharing your poetic proclamation of love.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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"As I passed it to her, I smelled her vanilla scented perfume and our hands briefly touched." ... It was probably Vanilla Fields, by Avon, Nomi. Although this was just a dream, you've had to smell it somewhere and it obviously made a lasting impression on you.
"Her voice was like honey poured over my favorite dish" ... What's your favorite dish?
"Her still beautiful face has a few wrinkles; her thick black hair has a few strands of gray and her middle is a little thicker now. Despite these minor things, she is still the most beautiful woman my eyes have ever seen and as incredible as it my sound or seem, I love her more with each passing day." ... But of course you do.
Lovely poem. Thanks very much for sharing your poetic proclamation of love.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thank you Dean, my favorite dish with honey is of course Vanilla Ice Cream. This poem has been lost for quite some time, when I found it quite by accident, I could not wait to edit it and submit it. I am so glad that I did.
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You're very welcome, Nomi.
I have never tried honey on vanilla ice cream. I'll have to give it a try.
~Dean
