With Each Passing Day
Was it love at first sight?43 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This romantic poem, on the order of free verse, but closer to prose, With Each Passing Day, offers the reader an opportunity to follow a young lad through a successful opening line and into a beautiful relationship. Alas, the incident is an invention, but, hopefully not the sentiment.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
  |
This romantic poem, on the order of free verse, but closer to prose, With Each Passing Day, offers the reader an opportunity to follow a young lad through a successful opening line and into a beautiful relationship. Alas, the incident is an invention, but, hopefully not the sentiment.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
-
Bill, you are starting to scare me. What did you do with the real Bill Schott? Where is the guy who is filled with irreverence? Hmm, something's fishy here. I appreciate your comments nevertheless.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
YOU are one romantic devil. This is so beautiful. At first, I WANTED it to rhyme, then I thought,nope this is from the words of a man who is in true love. It is poetry at its finest. Great job. Rhyme with something else! :)
Wendy
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
 |
YOU are one romantic devil. This is so beautiful. At first, I WANTED it to rhyme, then I thought,nope this is from the words of a man who is in true love. It is poetry at its finest. Great job. Rhyme with something else! :)
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
-
Thank you Wendy. I appreciate your great review comments.
Comment from royowen
Fiction it may be, but I think all guys dream this way, not how we made the journey, but rather where it started, and how it is now. Well written prose, with some memorable key moments, and excellently scripted verse, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : for just such as this(,) and man...2: as incredible as it (my) sound or seem. May?
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
|
Fiction it may be, but I think all guys dream this way, not how we made the journey, but rather where it started, and how it is now. Well written prose, with some memorable key moments, and excellently scripted verse, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : for just such as this(,) and man...2: as incredible as it (my) sound or seem. May?
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
-
Dang, I keep forgetting to go and fix that. Thank you so much for some very fine and encouraging comments.
-
Well done
Comment from dmt1967
That is not hard to believe. We meet someone special and fall in love, it is perfectly normal for our love to grow. I think your poem captures the essence of love. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
|
That is not hard to believe. We meet someone special and fall in love, it is perfectly normal for our love to grow. I think your poem captures the essence of love. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
-
Thank you, your words warm my heart and encourage me to keep writing.
Comment from afraazsidhu
Hi there,
I absolutely loved your dream and enjoyed the beautiful imagery. Congratulations for this well crafted poem which tells a story in poem. Good job sir!
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
|
Hi there,
I absolutely loved your dream and enjoyed the beautiful imagery. Congratulations for this well crafted poem which tells a story in poem. Good job sir!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
-
Thank you so much. It is always gratifying for a writer to hear or read that his efforts find favor with someone else. I truly appreciate your great review comments.
Comment from frierajac
I like the presentation with the girl in the flowers and grass. I think it is amazing how kindred spirits somehow find their way to one another. This is such a story. It is just a dream though.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
|
I like the presentation with the girl in the flowers and grass. I think it is amazing how kindred spirits somehow find their way to one another. This is such a story. It is just a dream though.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
-
Thank you. I do believe that all dreams are somehow rooted in reality. My first meeting with my wife did not go exactly according to this script. It did, however have its own bit of magic and we have been together now for 46 years. so ...
Comment from l.raven
HI Nolan, we all want that kind of love...true love until the end...and then some...I love your story told my sweet friend...very well written...and I love the picture....love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
|
HI Nolan, we all want that kind of love...true love until the end...and then some...I love your story told my sweet friend...very well written...and I love the picture....love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
-
Thank you Linda. I searched high and low for what I felt would be a picture that represented my vision. I am so pleased that you liked my little story.
-
yes I did...and you are so welcome...like you...sometimes it takes me awhile to find the perfect picture...love xxoo
Comment from LIJ Red
The way you're buttering the missus up, I bet you forgot her birthday or your anniversary. At any rate this looks like a well-thought out free verse to me.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
|
The way you're buttering the missus up, I bet you forgot her birthday or your anniversary. At any rate this looks like a well-thought out free verse to me.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
-
Thank you, but I can truly say that in 46 years of our being together I have never forgotten her birthday or our anniversary. I guess I'm just good like that. LOL.
Comment from wordsfromsue
Aww, I thought it was such a sweet tribute to his true love... it must be a very well written piece, to draw me in so!
Well, those of us married a very long time can only hope our honey looks at us this way. :-)
One correction: in the last sentence, I think ' as incredible as it my seem' should be 'may seem'
Really enjoyed your captivating work. :-)
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
|
Aww, I thought it was such a sweet tribute to his true love... it must be a very well written piece, to draw me in so!
Well, those of us married a very long time can only hope our honey looks at us this way. :-)
One correction: in the last sentence, I think ' as incredible as it my seem' should be 'may seem'
Really enjoyed your captivating work. :-)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
-
Thank you. Darn, I meant to go and fix that. Thank you so much for your encouraging words, and let me just say that if the guy in your life does not see you that way, he needs an attitude adjustment for I believe that there can be no finer woman than you anywhere in this entire world and he had better wake up and smell the coffee.
Comment from estory
It's an interesting foray into prose poetry, something i'd like to see more of on the site, more experimentation. You captured this little precious moment here, of the beginning of love, the beginning of a significant relationship, and the images were strong, but to make it poetry, there has to be stronger musical elements. Repetitions of words, phrases, and patterns of words and sounds is crucial, I think to writing good prose poetry. I would recommend reading some of Jack Anderson, the master of it. The Clouds of that Country has some great prose poetry in it; Scenario For a Long Movie; My Adventures As a Mountebank in South America, The Mysterious Sound, and of course, Cafeterias, which is one of my favorite prose poetry pieces of all time. Meditation on a Christian Science Reading Room is also good. estory
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
|
It's an interesting foray into prose poetry, something i'd like to see more of on the site, more experimentation. You captured this little precious moment here, of the beginning of love, the beginning of a significant relationship, and the images were strong, but to make it poetry, there has to be stronger musical elements. Repetitions of words, phrases, and patterns of words and sounds is crucial, I think to writing good prose poetry. I would recommend reading some of Jack Anderson, the master of it. The Clouds of that Country has some great prose poetry in it; Scenario For a Long Movie; My Adventures As a Mountebank in South America, The Mysterious Sound, and of course, Cafeterias, which is one of my favorite prose poetry pieces of all time. Meditation on a Christian Science Reading Room is also good. estory
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
-
Thank you estory. One of the things that has kept me on this site for the length of time I have been here, is the opportunity to learn and grow. Poor is the writer who believes he is above improving his craft by learning all that is available to be learned, absorbing it and putting it to good use. I will take to heart your enlightening comments.
