the rise of america
a land on the rise6 total reviews
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is a good read and written fairly well. America is indeed on the rise, depending on whose point of view it is. The artwork goes well with the poem. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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This is a good read and written fairly well. America is indeed on the rise, depending on whose point of view it is. The artwork goes well with the poem. Nicely done.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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thank you for the time of day for your review,jeff michaux! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from FlamingSpade
Very interesting post. I won't pretend to get the format because to me it seems the same thing was said over and over by switching words around and making similar points. Clearly, a lack of knowledge on my part. However, I do agree America is on the rise. Thank you for teaching me something new!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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Very interesting post. I won't pretend to get the format because to me it seems the same thing was said over and over by switching words around and making similar points. Clearly, a lack of knowledge on my part. However, I do agree America is on the rise. Thank you for teaching me something new!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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thank you for the time of day for your review,flamingspade! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I think conceptually you have something read worthy going on but the execution on this is lacking across the board. Punctuation aside, you simply repeat the same words over and over again in varied order as you move down the page which is not poetry. A reader should take something away from any piece they read and there is nothing to be had in this one. I thought maybe it might be a language barrier issue which is why I went with the four rather than going lower. Maybe your next try will be better and I look forward to watching for it. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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I think conceptually you have something read worthy going on but the execution on this is lacking across the board. Punctuation aside, you simply repeat the same words over and over again in varied order as you move down the page which is not poetry. A reader should take something away from any piece they read and there is nothing to be had in this one. I thought maybe it might be a language barrier issue which is why I went with the four rather than going lower. Maybe your next try will be better and I look forward to watching for it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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thank you for the time of day for your review,mystic angel 7777! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
An appreciative write about America a place you obviously are very glad to be. The repetitive lines remind me of 'lines' you had to write in school! But joking aside, you could make the poem a little more interesting by infusing the lines with other words and still achieve the same appreciation, good luck with your writing, don't give up, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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An appreciative write about America a place you obviously are very glad to be. The repetitive lines remind me of 'lines' you had to write in school! But joking aside, you could make the poem a little more interesting by infusing the lines with other words and still achieve the same appreciation, good luck with your writing, don't give up, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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thank you for the time of day for your review,dolly! "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Well done, said so well, it's a nice wishful appreciation write; thank you for sharing this thoughtful piece of work with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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Well done, said so well, it's a nice wishful appreciation write; thank you for sharing this thoughtful piece of work with us. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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thank you for the time of day for your review,DR ALCREATOR! " your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment from kiwisteveh
I'm sorry, I have never given a one-star review before, but put simply, this is just gibberish with no discernible meaning. You have taken a few words which might possibly have had meaning and just repeated them over and over in different patterns.
It is very hard to discern why you would write like this. My constructive suggestion to you is that you simplify your writing and ensure that each line, each sentence has a clear meaning. An example would be, "The land of America is on the rise to freedom."
Have a good day.
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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I'm sorry, I have never given a one-star review before, but put simply, this is just gibberish with no discernible meaning. You have taken a few words which might possibly have had meaning and just repeated them over and over in different patterns.
It is very hard to discern why you would write like this. My constructive suggestion to you is that you simplify your writing and ensure that each line, each sentence has a clear meaning. An example would be, "The land of America is on the rise to freedom."
Have a good day.
Steve
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
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thank you for the time of day for your review,steve! also thank you for the suggestion. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
