Innovation
Man's creative abilities68 total reviews
Comment from smileycloud
A very strong intention and purpose is highlighting your poem
Yes
It seems that "progress" is thought of today as just a modern "now" concept
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Progress has continued (good and bad) from the beginning and your poem aptly reminds us that and it will never end hopefully more for the better in the future
I am not sure that I would actually prefer to have lived in my grandparents day
much hard work and many struggles but I think maybe a simpler time when people were closer and more connected
good work
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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A very strong intention and purpose is highlighting your poem
Yes
It seems that "progress" is thought of today as just a modern "now" concept
but
Progress has continued (good and bad) from the beginning and your poem aptly reminds us that and it will never end hopefully more for the better in the future
I am not sure that I would actually prefer to have lived in my grandparents day
much hard work and many struggles but I think maybe a simpler time when people were closer and more connected
good work
have a smiley day
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the five stars and the great review. The only thing to me is, people who don't have vocational training still needs jobs also and the ones who have it, have to go against robots doing the work. Growth is beautiful but sometimes some people get hurt.
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yes
technology (GOOD and BAD)
I always pray for the even balance one day
Comment from Fabiha_N
This is a well-written haiku, and very true as well. If we all continue to use our own imagination, we can come up with ideas that may impact the world. There are many issues in our society today, so if we all continue brainstorming, we can come up with solutions to these problems!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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This is a well-written haiku, and very true as well. If we all continue to use our own imagination, we can come up with ideas that may impact the world. There are many issues in our society today, so if we all continue brainstorming, we can come up with solutions to these problems!
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your five stars and review. Good innovations mankind thriving for years.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a wonderful thought Art4U. Just like the olden, olden days, the beginning of time at least for as much as we know it, our brainstorming has been creating all manner of things.
Best wishes to you in the contest my friend.:)
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is a wonderful thought Art4U. Just like the olden, olden days, the beginning of time at least for as much as we know it, our brainstorming has been creating all manner of things.
Best wishes to you in the contest my friend.:)
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the five stars and review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a nice knowledge poem speaks how new ideas come thru practice of brainstorming; well said, well done; good luck to you with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is a nice knowledge poem speaks how new ideas come thru practice of brainstorming; well said, well done; good luck to you with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the five stars and review.
It is so many words that you could use to describe innovation. I started out one way and it ended up like what you read.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 5-7-5 (haiku) poem you have penned for the contest about an interesting subject. You used very good wording and great imagery with the art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 (haiku) poem you have penned for the contest about an interesting subject. You used very good wording and great imagery with the art work. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the five stars and review.
It was so many words a person could have used.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the artwork you selected to establish the mood for your poem. I liked your adding alliteration to your 5-7-5. (I think "create" picked up an "s" in the the second line.) Best wishes in the contest and here's to "innovation"- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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I admired the artwork you selected to establish the mood for your poem. I liked your adding alliteration to your 5-7-5. (I think "create" picked up an "s" in the the second line.) Best wishes in the contest and here's to "innovation"- Joan
Comment Written 20-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the five stars and review.
Read what I have now, ok.
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Through all of this, I want to thank you for the review and five stars.
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I cannot find your "Dreams" post anymore. Are you planning to re-post it? -Joan
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Yes, once I feel it's ok.
Comment from tfawcus
Some people seem to have an instinct for innovation and when this is linked with an enquiring mind the results can change the course of history. Your haiku celebrates this inventiveness. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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Some people seem to have an instinct for innovation and when this is linked with an enquiring mind the results can change the course of history. Your haiku celebrates this inventiveness. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the review and five stars. I had to change the second line it had one to many syllables. As I told someone else, I feel honored you took time to review my work.
Comment from Marianne C.
What great subject material! You did a great job of making every word count in telling this story, The visual used was also very telling. For me, it gave a sense of man's creative abilities posed against the potential dark sides of what these dreams also create.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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What great subject material! You did a great job of making every word count in telling this story, The visual used was also very telling. For me, it gave a sense of man's creative abilities posed against the potential dark sides of what these dreams also create.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the review and five stars. I had to change the second line because it had one to many syllables.
Comment from Dean Kuch
As well as the dawning and ushering in of the Industrial Era, or Age if you prefer, artisart4u.
This is not haiku poerty, however. This isn't even 5-7-5, it is 5-8-5.
It has no seasonal reference, or "kigo".
It is not about a moment in nature captured in words.
The poem uses 18 syllables whereas haiku uses 17 syllables, or less.
Your second line: In-stincts and pro-bing cre-a-ted, uses eight syllables, not seven.
There's no satori to speak of; no moment of insight in your final line.
All of these things can be corrected relatively easy either by scrapping the poem and starting all over, or use the basic premise but make the poem about global warming.
Nice effort. But a 5-7-5 poem does not a haiku make.
Not by a long shot.
~Dean
Why No 5-7-5?
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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As well as the dawning and ushering in of the Industrial Era, or Age if you prefer, artisart4u.
This is not haiku poerty, however. This isn't even 5-7-5, it is 5-8-5.
It has no seasonal reference, or "kigo".
It is not about a moment in nature captured in words.
The poem uses 18 syllables whereas haiku uses 17 syllables, or less.
Your second line: In-stincts and pro-bing cre-a-ted, uses eight syllables, not seven.
There's no satori to speak of; no moment of insight in your final line.
All of these things can be corrected relatively easy either by scrapping the poem and starting all over, or use the basic premise but make the poem about global warming.
Nice effort. But a 5-7-5 poem does not a haiku make.
Not by a long shot.
~Dean
Why No 5-7-5?
Comment Written 10-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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Thanks for catching that mistake. I changed it to creates.
Nevertheless, thanks for taking time to review my haiku and the four stars. I feel honored.
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That will address the syllable count issue. Since this is a site sponsored contest that may be enough.
I'll restore your fifth star.
Thank you for your gracious reply.
~Dean
Comment from Liberty Justice
Knowing what the world wants and creating inventions that peoole will buy is a worthwhile thing. Thats how rich people get RICH. HAPPY NEW YEAR. lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Knowing what the world wants and creating inventions that peoole will buy is a worthwhile thing. Thats how rich people get RICH. HAPPY NEW YEAR. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Thanks for reviewing my work and the comments.
On my review page it has five stars but when I read the message it mentions six stars. Nevertheless, I appreciate that you read my haiku.
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Sorry but i definitely typed
In 6 ******except perhaps the soft
wear jumped it to 5 stars
Or perhaps i ran out of 6s.
There will be more 6s given
to us on Sunday. Liberty justice
