Comment from Air Spirit

Excellent

A great example of a Haiku poem -- which I have not yet attempted yet... there are so many different forms of poetry it is mind boggling at times, and I am a novice in comparison to so many talented writers, including yourself... Your verbiage is tight, terse, coherent and consistent in promoting your point -- thinking brings ideas, which bring progress... and so is the rhythm and rhyme of life..

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018

Thanks for your review, it is uplifting and the five stars.

Comment from Angela Hayes

Excellent

Good read, educational, interesting, well presented, poem has a lot of meaning, interesting image, industrial buildings, creative way of thinking, brainstorming in
a poem, makes a poem well thought out.

Good Luck!

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018

Thank you for your review and five stars.

reply by Angela Hayes on 13-Jul-2018

:)

Comment from Miranda Langston

Excellent

this is a really nice poem and I love the industrial kind of photograph you added on this one. kind of old-timey but futuristic in my opinion. this is a great entry for the contest. good luck :)

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018

Thanks for the review and the five stars.
I was thinking about all the closed factories.

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hello, a good poem I enjoyed it and your careful word choices. As long as there is a brain, there will be brainstorming. Interesting topic for your haiku and best of luck in the competition. The only thing I will draw to your attention is in the author notes. I think wondering has three syllables, lol. I get what you are saying though. Accents can make a mockery of syllable counts, I'm Australian and we love to streamline words like 'wondring', hee hee making it two rather than three syllables, and then we add an 'o'. Davo, it's smoko now its this arvo. LOL

That's Australian for 'Dave, 'it's time for a break this afternoon.'

Thanks for sharing your poetry, Ana.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018

Thanks for the review and the five stars.
The word I was referring to, was "idea or ideas," and it was three syllables.
The site "howmanysyllables.com" said for anyone who have doubt contact them. This is a note they have on the site.
Sorry "wondering"
was not the word I was explaining.
Once again thanks.

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

Senryu? So true...brainstorming does promote the ole' think tank's juices. Well written. A true haiku has no uppercase or punctuation though and generally revolves around life and nature. This one teeters so I will give it a five because, simply put, I love the picture and enjoyed the premise. Thanks for sharing it with us ...
Janelle

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2018

Thank you for your review and five stars..
I would have to say in self defense is, ,it
would be man's biological nature, raw materials used or the beauty of the finished product.
Let me know if any of this makes sense.

Comment from Hugh McDowell

Excellent

Very good entry. Great flow as the second sentence connects both to the first and last line. It does so seamlessly. I like the reference to the past that continues to work now and in the future. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Thanks for taking the time to review and the five stars.
Thanks for the comment about the connection.
They said in an haiku, that the last line should
sum up the other two.

Comment from olivebmcg

Good

Concise. I'm curious as to why the line "Like the olden days" is in there. It felt like a set up with no follow through. Maybe I'm reading too much into it. Otherwise, a strong haiku. Best!

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Thanks for reviewing and the four stars.
That to be, if you think back
on how people
used their minds and came up with things since we
became civilized in order to survive.
Once again, thanks.

Comment from Shanbreen

Excellent

I love the picture that goes with your haiku. But most importantly, I like the underlying hope that you state in the poem as a contrast to the darkness of the past. Yes, brainstorming helps.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2018

Thank you for reviewing and the five stars.
We would not have come this if it would have been for innovation.

Comment from bard owl

Exceptional

Excellent! I can see why your haiku received the All Time Best award. It is my belief that as long as man's brain continues to function there will be a will to be innovative.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018

Thank you very much for taking the time to review my poem and giving me five stars.
You probably get a lot of tourists to visit
his home. Sounds exciting.
I was just in -D C Wednesday looking at artifacts in an new African American museum. You as should have seen the bumper to bumper traffic.
But it was worth it. A family member did the driving.
Once again thanks.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 5-7-5 haiku. Your syllables are spot on and you are correct with the syllables of ideas as three syllables, to find solutions we need to brainstorm with others with the same interest to birth new ideas.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2018

Thanks for the review and five stars.