They Learned . . .
Discovered New Ways31 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
Wow, I'm inspired that you wrote this poem in anapestic meter. That makes my eyes cross. I'm not brave enough to give it a try.
I like your theme of the cave man, and your picture is cute. It's amazing that they lived without all the comforts of home that we are used to.
Your meter was tough for me to pick up. That's my fault. However, once I got the rhythm figured out I couldn't say I could read your whole poem comfortably. Could be that I don't read and write enough anapestic poetry.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Wow, I'm inspired that you wrote this poem in anapestic meter. That makes my eyes cross. I'm not brave enough to give it a try.
I like your theme of the cave man, and your picture is cute. It's amazing that they lived without all the comforts of home that we are used to.
Your meter was tough for me to pick up. That's my fault. However, once I got the rhythm figured out I couldn't say I could read your whole poem comfortably. Could be that I don't read and write enough anapestic poetry.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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One has to get in the 'beat' of anapestic. I appreciate that you took the time and effort to give me a nice review. Thank you.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nicely done, Yvonne!
The meter seemed to lose a little "steam" (no pun intended) starting with S3, L2.
But you recovered nicely for the remainder of your poem.
You finish with a flurry and a few things for your readers to ponder over.
Well done; a very well written anapestic poem.
Happy New Year.
~Dean
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Nicely done, Yvonne!
The meter seemed to lose a little "steam" (no pun intended) starting with S3, L2.
But you recovered nicely for the remainder of your poem.
You finish with a flurry and a few things for your readers to ponder over.
Well done; a very well written anapestic poem.
Happy New Year.
~Dean
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
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Don't mention it.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
When you used the 'did' twice the meter seemed off but the count is correct. Very nice history lesson for us all and I wonder , would it be better if we were?lol
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When you used the 'did' twice the meter seemed off but the count is correct. Very nice history lesson for us all and I wonder , would it be better if we were?lol
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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I wonder that sometimes, too. Thank you.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Would We Still Live In A Cave?
I hope not, though maybe the Earth would be glad.
God knows, it has suffered from our careless hands.
If cavemen and women's lives weren't so darn sad,
I'd do it to give back some health to our lands.
(Loved it, Yvonne!)
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Would We Still Live In A Cave?
I hope not, though maybe the Earth would be glad.
God knows, it has suffered from our careless hands.
If cavemen and women's lives weren't so darn sad,
I'd do it to give back some health to our lands.
(Loved it, Yvonne!)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the nice words. I'm not so sure we've done so well with what we've been given. I think we've outdone ourselves.
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Hmmm...yup.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Oh no. Perish that thought of living as cave men. You did a great job Yvonne weaving history with thoughtful questions about where man is today. The picture is perfect. Your words create great imagery in the minds of readers. Your lines have a lyrical flow while still maintaining the meter & the focus. I enjoyed reading it greatly. the last verse is my favorite as it shows some of the 'things' man gained from that first encounter with fire. I like, too, the line about bowing down in praise. Great job. Jan
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Oh no. Perish that thought of living as cave men. You did a great job Yvonne weaving history with thoughtful questions about where man is today. The picture is perfect. Your words create great imagery in the minds of readers. Your lines have a lyrical flow while still maintaining the meter & the focus. I enjoyed reading it greatly. the last verse is my favorite as it shows some of the 'things' man gained from that first encounter with fire. I like, too, the line about bowing down in praise. Great job. Jan
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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What a lovely review. Thank you so much. What did you think of the title change?
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A lovely poem about mankind's advances and the discovery of fire.
Very true, if not for curiosity and accident, not much would change in our lives.
Well done and thank yo or sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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A lovely poem about mankind's advances and the discovery of fire.
Very true, if not for curiosity and accident, not much would change in our lives.
Well done and thank yo or sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank YOU for reviewing, and your lovely comments.
Comment from Sugarray77
A good, concise poem with real meaning. The photo is a good fit and matches your message. A great read. Regards. Hope you are enjoying a wonderful New Year's Day!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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A good, concise poem with real meaning. The photo is a good fit and matches your message. A great read. Regards. Hope you are enjoying a wonderful New Year's Day!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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I appreciate your lovely comments. Thank you for reviewing. The new year? So far, so good. lol
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, I like the theme of your poem. You take us back to the beginning of man and then brings us through our evolution. Unusual theme in a poem, but as usual so very well written. As you know I can't comment on structure. I wish I could. Happy New Year. All the Best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Hi Yvonne, I like the theme of your poem. You take us back to the beginning of man and then brings us through our evolution. Unusual theme in a poem, but as usual so very well written. As you know I can't comment on structure. I wish I could. Happy New Year. All the Best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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The fact that you like it is certainly enough. You always make me feel so good about my writing. I hope the new year finds you well and happy.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is a very interesting and unique poem. I have never read one on the subject before. It causes the reader to pause and give thought. Poems can be more than they are often used for.
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This is a very interesting and unique poem. I have never read one on the subject before. It causes the reader to pause and give thought. Poems can be more than they are often used for.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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Thank you. What a lovely comment. For some reason, I've always been fascinated by our prehistoric ancestors and how they learned new ways.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned about how the people of old started fire and cooked their meat. Who know what would have happened? We may have been better off without all this technology of today. love, Teri
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned about how the people of old started fire and cooked their meat. Who know what would have happened? We may have been better off without all this technology of today. love, Teri
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
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I have to agree about the technology. I think we've overstepped ourselves. Thank you for reviewing.
