The Waiting
free verse exercise6 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing your frustration about wasting time waiting--I think most readers can relate. I enjoyed your use of alliteration as well to add more intensity to your poem. Best wishes in the Free Verse Contest and here's to a productive 2018- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Thank you for sharing your frustration about wasting time waiting--I think most readers can relate. I enjoyed your use of alliteration as well to add more intensity to your poem. Best wishes in the Free Verse Contest and here's to a productive 2018- Joan
Comment Written 05-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
Comment from dbmccarter
You have described this day and age perfectly. My favorite waiting is trying to get through to a real person on the phone. Almost impossible. I felt I was right there with you and I could feel the frustration coming through.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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You have described this day and age perfectly. My favorite waiting is trying to get through to a real person on the phone. Almost impossible. I felt I was right there with you and I could feel the frustration coming through.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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The ever dreaded computer phone. I the them. Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
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The ever dreaded computer phone. I the them. Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Free Verse poem contest.
A good and clear message about time and the control it has over us.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Free Verse poem contest.
A good and clear message about time and the control it has over us.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
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Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
Comment from Ricky1024
The waiting is a free verse contest entry rich and themes Wells imagery flood why is she so to speak adjective adjective contents were both excellent and firmly in place the scripture measures aligned perfectly thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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The waiting is a free verse contest entry rich and themes Wells imagery flood why is she so to speak adjective adjective contents were both excellent and firmly in place the scripture measures aligned perfectly thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Thanks Ricky, I appreciate that.Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
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Thanks Ricky, I appreciate that.Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
Comment from kiwisteveh
Yes, we all know that feeling. You missed, "You are number 5 in the queue."
Strangely, this has been posted as a story, although it seems to have ended up in the Free Verse contest where it's meant to be. I will review as a poem.
Your free verse has a pleasing rhythm to it and devices such as assonance and alliteration adds to this. Short words/phrases perhaps echo the ticking of a clock: by ticks and bits, minutes and hours/ frenzied stops, cursed clocks
and forever un-boiled pots.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Yes, we all know that feeling. You missed, "You are number 5 in the queue."
Strangely, this has been posted as a story, although it seems to have ended up in the Free Verse contest where it's meant to be. I will review as a poem.
Your free verse has a pleasing rhythm to it and devices such as assonance and alliteration adds to this. Short words/phrases perhaps echo the ticking of a clock: by ticks and bits, minutes and hours/ frenzied stops, cursed clocks
and forever un-boiled pots.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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I'm not sure how that happened, I just entered as instructed.. I hate the queue! Any queue.Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Very kind of you. Best to you. Randy
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a poem of thought and expectation, well done and well said, seems time is waiting; felling is thoughtfully expressed; wish you best of luck in the contest. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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This is a poem of thought and expectation, well done and well said, seems time is waiting; felling is thoughtfully expressed; wish you best of luck in the contest. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2018
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Thanks for your kind review and remarks. Best to you. Randy
